Little Poems
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Comment from Green Lake Girl
I really enjoyed this Pantoum, Tom. You are very creative when searching for poetry formats! The repetitious lines are fun, especially when read aloud.
I particularly like the shadows that are long and skinny! LOL
Nicely penned!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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I really enjoyed this Pantoum, Tom. You are very creative when searching for poetry formats! The repetitious lines are fun, especially when read aloud.
I particularly like the shadows that are long and skinny! LOL
Nicely penned!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you. Glad to spread to long or short. It tags along
Comment from Pantygynt
An excellent instructional session on the pantoum form in your notes accompanying the excellent example of the poem itself. The whole presentation of this post raises you from simply a master of formic poetry to a great teacher of the various styles. Here's a suggestion: Write an FS "book" on poetic forms and how to go about achieving them. Each "chapter" would be a different form with an example poem and notes on how to achieve it. Such a work would inmy opinion not be an entertaining series of posts but, in the final analysis, would serve as an excellent reference work for budding poets.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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An excellent instructional session on the pantoum form in your notes accompanying the excellent example of the poem itself. The whole presentation of this post raises you from simply a master of formic poetry to a great teacher of the various styles. Here's a suggestion: Write an FS "book" on poetic forms and how to go about achieving them. Each "chapter" would be a different form with an example poem and notes on how to achieve it. Such a work would inmy opinion not be an entertaining series of posts but, in the final analysis, would serve as an excellent reference work for budding poets.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. I have exactly that in mind. It will contain about 150 formats, and 2 to five poems as examples. I also pland to create a spreadsheet, listing their key attributes. I appreciate the suggestion. I thought this form and the Triolet are good forms to do here for new poets, because of their ease of assembly.
Comment from Joan E.
Pleased to meet your wife--from afar! And thank you for the Pantoum tutorial--I wrote one for FS a few years ago. I'll keep your notes when I am inspired again. I enjoyed your "funny friend," rhymes and repeats. Here's to more "sunny days"! -Joan
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Pleased to meet your wife--from afar! And thank you for the Pantoum tutorial--I wrote one for FS a few years ago. I'll keep your notes when I am inspired again. I enjoyed your "funny friend," rhymes and repeats. Here's to more "sunny days"! -Joan
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you Joan. Great idea. You never know where inspiration may lead you.
Comment from Angel Debbie
Excellent job on this amazing shadow write.
Sometimes I wish mine would go away cause it always wants to get where I'm going first. LOL
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Excellent job on this amazing shadow write.
Sometimes I wish mine would go away cause it always wants to get where I'm going first. LOL
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you Angel Debbie. That would make an interesting race.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Another interesting form of poem. This time I first look if I can find the pattern before reading your notes. Thank you.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Another interesting form of poem. This time I first look if I can find the pattern before reading your notes. Thank you.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you Sandra. You are a quick learner.
Comment from Amy Greta
Excellent Pantoum poem! The topic of your shadow is so fitting for this piece, as the repeating lines symbolize the repeating appearance of your shadow. I like how you describe your shadow as a "funny friend"...so relatable. I remember laughing with my childhood friends about how silly our shadows looked. Very well crafted; I really enjoyed it!
~Amy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Excellent Pantoum poem! The topic of your shadow is so fitting for this piece, as the repeating lines symbolize the repeating appearance of your shadow. I like how you describe your shadow as a "funny friend"...so relatable. I remember laughing with my childhood friends about how silly our shadows looked. Very well crafted; I really enjoyed it!
~Amy
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you Amy for this nice review and share your experience.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, treishcle, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the shadow that follows you around on sunny days. I enjoyed reading this one.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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this is an excellent write, treishcle, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the shadow that follows you around on sunny days. I enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you sweetwoodjax.
