Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 254 "Robin a Bobbin'"Small and Specialty Poems
8 total reviews
Comment from I am Cat
you know...
if you could go into business with
that robbin
you wouldn't have
to pay for,
or search for
your own worms
for fishing.
not a bad gig if you can
get it.
*wink*
:)
this made me smile
Cat
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
  |
you know...
if you could go into business with
that robbin
you wouldn't have
to pay for,
or search for
your own worms
for fishing.
not a bad gig if you can
get it.
*wink*
:)
this made me smile
Cat
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
-
Thank you. Cat. Just check the sidewalks after it rains.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Nature provides us with so many wonderful writing prompts and
this little bird is a great subject.
Its quest for food seems never-ending and presents a challenge.
This Cinquain poem captures the habits and quest of this robin quite well.
The image is stunning- I always thought robins had a red breast.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
|
Nature provides us with so many wonderful writing prompts and
this little bird is a great subject.
Its quest for food seems never-ending and presents a challenge.
This Cinquain poem captures the habits and quest of this robin quite well.
The image is stunning- I always thought robins had a red breast.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
-
Thank you Shirley. As you can see it is plainly orange, but most call it red.
Comment from Pantygynt
I suppose one of the joys of being a US citizen is that you can choose the number of syllables you wish to sound in any given wor word! So this time orange is given its full value and you are not asking me to indulge in any oral gymnastics! You also use the word "flittering", which is an interesting and attractive choice. I think most English poets would have used "fluttering", a more common but far less effective choice.
Ornithological Note: I have been told the apparent bobbing of the head, a habit if most ground feeding birds, is a defence mechanism - a quick upward glance scans the skies for hawkish predatores then back to concentrate on the worm selected for dinner.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
|
I suppose one of the joys of being a US citizen is that you can choose the number of syllables you wish to sound in any given wor word! So this time orange is given its full value and you are not asking me to indulge in any oral gymnastics! You also use the word "flittering", which is an interesting and attractive choice. I think most English poets would have used "fluttering", a more common but far less effective choice.
Ornithological Note: I have been told the apparent bobbing of the head, a habit if most ground feeding birds, is a defence mechanism - a quick upward glance scans the skies for hawkish predatores then back to concentrate on the worm selected for dinner.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
-
Thank you very much Pantygynt. You could be right. I've noticed that prairie dogs are more active on sunny days than cloudy, because they can see the shadow of a approaching raptor. A good warning system.
Comment from Joan E.
Yes, we still have robins in California despite the four-year drought. I'm glad you continue to enjoy using the cinquain as your vehicle for these observations and including one of your neat photographs. I admired the energy in "flittering" and your rhymes. Hugs and happy summer weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
|
Yes, we still have robins in California despite the four-year drought. I'm glad you continue to enjoy using the cinquain as your vehicle for these observations and including one of your neat photographs. I admired the energy in "flittering" and your rhymes. Hugs and happy summer weekend- Joan
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
-
Thank you Joan. There is just one more Cinquain format I haven't done yet. Maybe tomorrow.
-
Thanks for the heads-up--I'll watch for a special cinquain. -Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Well done. We also have a kind of bird here, hopping on the grass, finding worms right in front of you, it's not a robin as you described, I cannot get close enough to get a proper photo of the bird to find out what species it is.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
|
Well done. We also have a kind of bird here, hopping on the grass, finding worms right in front of you, it's not a robin as you described, I cannot get close enough to get a proper photo of the bird to find out what species it is.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
-
Thank you Sandra. My notes were a mess. I niw have fixed them.
Comment from fossilhunter
Good job! Yes, the robin is a frequent visitor, and the worms are plentiful. You did a very good job on the cinquain. It reads smoothly, and has rich descriptions. Kudos
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
|
Good job! Yes, the robin is a frequent visitor, and the worms are plentiful. You did a very good job on the cinquain. It reads smoothly, and has rich descriptions. Kudos
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
-
Thank you fossilhunter.
Comment from Amy Greta
I love your cinquain, and you make it seem so easy and effortless, yet so full of quality. I wrote a cinquain once, and pretty much failed. It seems so simple, but for me it was difficult to meet the syllable count while telling an interesting story, but you did it so well! I can visualize that orange chested, head bobbing bird so well. The ending is perfect (and happy) with a worm being found. I can see using this poem with my 6th graders, leaving out the last line and challenging them to finish the poem with only two syllables....you just inspired a great "back to school" activity! Thank you!
~Amy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
|
I love your cinquain, and you make it seem so easy and effortless, yet so full of quality. I wrote a cinquain once, and pretty much failed. It seems so simple, but for me it was difficult to meet the syllable count while telling an interesting story, but you did it so well! I can visualize that orange chested, head bobbing bird so well. The ending is perfect (and happy) with a worm being found. I can see using this poem with my 6th graders, leaving out the last line and challenging them to finish the poem with only two syllables....you just inspired a great "back to school" activity! Thank you!
~Amy
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
-
Thank you Amy. That a great idea.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I thought this was great.
I am a huge fan of observational poetry and how that translates into the piece. to fit it into a formalised structure is skilful.
Very nice piece.
GMG
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
|
Hi there,
I thought this was great.
I am a huge fan of observational poetry and how that translates into the piece. to fit it into a formalised structure is skilful.
Very nice piece.
GMG
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
-
Thank you GMG.
