Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 250 "Leaf Cascade"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from Pantygynt
Yet another sonnet form that I have left and returned to a couple of times before writing this review. I agree with the staccato effect created by the rhyme scheme; What I cannot see is why. Why that is one would want to create a staccato effect when describing such a peaceful scene that almost cries out for the most drawn out legato one could imagine. This is not running water but a pond overhung with by these beautiful trees. Your choice of language and use of words to describe the scene is as always exemplary but for me it fights the rhyme scheme and form.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Yet another sonnet form that I have left and returned to a couple of times before writing this review. I agree with the staccato effect created by the rhyme scheme; What I cannot see is why. Why that is one would want to create a staccato effect when describing such a peaceful scene that almost cries out for the most drawn out legato one could imagine. This is not running water but a pond overhung with by these beautiful trees. Your choice of language and use of words to describe the scene is as always exemplary but for me it fights the rhyme scheme and form.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Maybe I should say an echo effect. Would that change your mindset as you read it?
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Yes I think it would. I always equate the word staccato with harsh rattling sounds that i felt were inappropriate to the poem, the scene described and the mood you are trying to induce. The repetition and the word echo dovetail together neatly, yes.
Comment from dmt1967
This poem reminded me of a very old style poem. The ones I used to like when I was a child. I liked the flow as well. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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This poem reminded me of a very old style poem. The ones I used to like when I was a child. I liked the flow as well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thank you Darlene.
Comment from rod007
There is a peace and quietness about the words used in this poem which vividly describes the softness and tranquility of the wonderful nature scene. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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There is a peace and quietness about the words used in this poem which vividly describes the softness and tranquility of the wonderful nature scene. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Thank you rod. It good to know i achieved my goal then.
Comment from flamingstar
I love sonnets and this one is gorgeous. Haven't encountered that rhyme scheme until now. Looks like it could be rather confining but yours flows so naturally that the repetitive sounds weren't immediately obvious to me. I was so hooked on the imagery. You're right, they certainly do resemble a green waterfall. Perfect final couplet.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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I love sonnets and this one is gorgeous. Haven't encountered that rhyme scheme until now. Looks like it could be rather confining but yours flows so naturally that the repetitive sounds weren't immediately obvious to me. I was so hooked on the imagery. You're right, they certainly do resemble a green waterfall. Perfect final couplet.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you very much flamingstar. What a lovely review, and award of stars.
Comment from patcelaw
Treischel the is a lovely poem about a lovely tree. Weeping willows are in my opinion some =of the most elegant of all the trees. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Treischel the is a lovely poem about a lovely tree. Weeping willows are in my opinion some =of the most elegant of all the trees. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you Patricia, i agree with you.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this triptic sonnet--never heard of one before--the words are full of imagery and the picture is beautiful. I enjoyed the whole presentation
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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this is an excellent write, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this triptic sonnet--never heard of one before--the words are full of imagery and the picture is beautiful. I enjoyed the whole presentation
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much sweetwoodjax.
Comment from Nelle Louise
I liked this poem - and especially loved the picture. It sounds like a lovely place
to visit. I wish you good luck in the ratings. Good work.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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I liked this poem - and especially loved the picture. It sounds like a lovely place
to visit. I wish you good luck in the ratings. Good work.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you Nellie.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Great visual imagery with weeping willow's leaf cascade. I love weeping willows too. Sounds like a lovely place.
Teresa
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Great visual imagery with weeping willow's leaf cascade. I love weeping willows too. Sounds like a lovely place.
Teresa
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you Teresa.
