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Viewing comments for Chapter 111 "How I wish that I could sing"
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Comment from Walu Feral
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LOL. G'day Christine, great work mate. You have done really well with this contest entry in the interesting form which I can't write. I am a singer but these days the people tell me that I should be "on stage!" "The first stage out of town!" Good luck in the contest my friend, I'd like to see you take it.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
    Thanks Fez, perhaps we could do a duet and clear the hall ha ha Having a go at the different styles and come up with this. I would love to learn how to yodel but no matter how much I try not a good sound, thanks for your support. Glad to see you writing still Cheers Christine😃
Comment from pharp
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Nicely penned, meeting all the requirements of a triolet and a great contest entry. I enjoyed the read. As I was reading, it reminded me, on how Sunday I was called to sing a solo; I can sing great in the shower, but not in front of an audience. Needless to say, I was quite nervous, gave it by best (one verse) and sat down. Best of luck in the contest. Portia

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
    Thank you Portia for your review ,rating and comments. Yes I too love to have a sing and usually sing in the car by myself. I have sung in a chorus but never solo, no no but it is always worth having a go . I have a repatoire of country songs I learnt from my Aunt when I was a little girl, ( she could yodel relay well too) not me ha ha . A bit of fun anyway Cheers Christine😀
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Chrissy...

_ Boy, do I hear you. If I even try to sing in the shower, the birds would want to fly south if they weren't already there! LOL
_ Cute Triolet entry. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
    Ha thank you Jax , I love to have a sing but usually by myself, although. I did sing some country songs to my granddaughters one day while driving along (Old Shep, the girl with the blue velvet band, and several others.) until one of my granddaughter had had enough and said to me "Nan you're killing me" I had a real laugh about that and no don't sing to her anymore so I guess I am right lol as Always thanks for reading and rating well 😀Cheers Christine
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Cute artwork that goes with your poem and your author notes, too:)
-Your format is good.
-I particularly like these lines:
"My echo through the mountains ring
To thrill you all would be my plan"
-The lines you chose to repeat are good.
-I also like how you incorporate anything "you wish you could do," sing, yodel, or whistle, it doesn't matter!

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
    Thank you respa1 for your time, rating and comments as always much appreciated. Somehow the words seemed to flow and I imagined the mountains echoing with my wonderful voice lol however reality must reign I tired to ensure I followed the triolet requirements and hope I have . Yes I liked the image and thought it appropriate. Cheers Christine😄
reply by Pam (respa) on 08-Jun-2015
    Yes, you followed the triolet requirements. You did a good job. I am not sure if you want to single space it or not, but that is the writer's option. You did really well:)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
    Thanks, thought I would do something a bit different I hope it works , learning all the time and having fun Cheers Christine will post something serious soon
reply by Pam (respa) on 08-Jun-2015
    The main thing is enjoying it and doing what inspires you.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
    Thanks I really do appreciate you comments and helpChristine
reply by Pam (respa) on 09-Jun-2015
    You are very welcome.
Comment from Callisto
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A nice fun short little poem....probably would work well in a children's book. Have you thought of writing children's stories?

Callisto

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
    thanks for your review and comments and no have never thought about children's story writing , just thought I would have a go at a triolet style of poetry and wanted to make it simple. Appreciate your review Cheers Christine☺️
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. Your Triolet is delightful with a refreshingly fun entry. The lines you selected to repeat are perfect to keep the energy moving along at a lyrical pace. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
    Thank you Mystic Angel 7777 for your lovely review, rating and encouraging comments. My first attempt at a Triolet style poem so I' m glad you like it. ( not getting much sleep lol) as always thank you Cheers Christine😀