Beautiful Death
Viewing comments for Chapter 10009 "Not silicone boob"from birth I have longed for death
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day CJ, great work mate, your poetry is getting very good now my fried as pratice makes perfect. Nightmares are the weirdest things, but I used to love mine and would get all cranky if I got woken up and couldn't get back to it LOL....
SPAG ALERT...
"You are far
to bold"
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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G'day CJ, great work mate, your poetry is getting very good now my fried as pratice makes perfect. Nightmares are the weirdest things, but I used to love mine and would get all cranky if I got woken up and couldn't get back to it LOL....
SPAG ALERT...
"You are far
to bold"
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Again thank's!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
That is a really nice poem about a daydream. It is funny the places your dreams can take you. And it's okay, sometimes to take yourself to new places and experiences. It's what we writers do. Thanks for sharing,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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That is a really nice poem about a daydream. It is funny the places your dreams can take you. And it's okay, sometimes to take yourself to new places and experiences. It's what we writers do. Thanks for sharing,
Rhonda
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I apologize for this thing.
A day dream is going somewhere you want to be.
I end there silly as it seems, to make me happy to be where I am at. I was a prisoner of my own making for almost 30 years.
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I understand the self prisoning, and it's good when you kick free. It doesn't help to blame others, but you didn't get there alone. Holding onto it certainly doesn't help, but be easy on yourself.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
The last line confuses me a little. It makes me think you weren't sleeping. I hate nightmares and I've had my share of them over the past years. Great job and sleep tight with no dreams
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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The last line confuses me a little. It makes me think you weren't sleeping. I hate nightmares and I've had my share of them over the past years. Great job and sleep tight with no dreams
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Sleep I was, I find that my dreams sometimes start before I am under. I usually end up where my children were small.
many times looking for a way out.
This one was just funny.
Comment from lalajovanoski
I totally agree with you. I found this to be very humorous. Well composed and flowed very smoothly. Thank you so much for sharing this. I truly enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I totally agree with you. I found this to be very humorous. Well composed and flowed very smoothly. Thank you so much for sharing this. I truly enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you! It was just for fun.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good poem Cbet! I like it a lot. It's both sad and funny, like life. I really like the color you chose. I would make the font darker of make it white. You can do that in advance editor. Was this a real dream you had? It sounds real.
I found a tiny error:
You are far
to bold [too bold]
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Good poem Cbet! I like it a lot. It's both sad and funny, like life. I really like the color you chose. I would make the font darker of make it white. You can do that in advance editor. Was this a real dream you had? It sounds real.
I found a tiny error:
You are far
to bold [too bold]
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Actually yes, I left my sister with him, Usually he is just taking my car away or nailing me into the walls.
I thought this was funny, I think she had just gotten a little work done.
I know it sounds silly, and some think I doth protest too much but I would never go back to the pathetic old asshole.
Sorry, I am basically a rough, swearing old thing.
