Beautiful Death
Viewing comments for Chapter 10012 "rip in my sleep"from birth I have longed for death
16 total reviews
Comment from Kimberly Maschi
This poem is terrifying, like a waking nightmare. It is well written, innovative, and expressive. I find each stanza brings something new. I have added this to my favorites. Very nice work
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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This poem is terrifying, like a waking nightmare. It is well written, innovative, and expressive. I find each stanza brings something new. I have added this to my favorites. Very nice work
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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Thank you, I feel unworthy to even be able to connect with people like you're
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow! This really sounds like a nightmare that the reader simply cannot get away from....scary! And then to think it's there everytime one tries to sleep again.....ugh. You certainly have some very unsettling sleep .... try some chamomile tea and play some soft music with rain sounds in the bedroom... :) ;)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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Wow! This really sounds like a nightmare that the reader simply cannot get away from....scary! And then to think it's there everytime one tries to sleep again.....ugh. You certainly have some very unsettling sleep .... try some chamomile tea and play some soft music with rain sounds in the bedroom... :) ;)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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Thanks you have a good. Sense Of humor
Comment from kiwijenny
This seems like fragments of a dream or nightmare...there is no rhyme or reason sometimes a bad dream can be because you ate a sandwich right before going to bed..lol
I am an insomniac...rarely remember my dreams lol
Hugs
God bless
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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This seems like fragments of a dream or nightmare...there is no rhyme or reason sometimes a bad dream can be because you ate a sandwich right before going to bed..lol
I am an insomniac...rarely remember my dreams lol
Hugs
God bless
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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You have helped me through many sleepless nights, I dream almost be for fully asleep and often can figure why and what causes them, I am trying to get back to so much writing of others.
Comment from meeshu
scary monsters and super freaks, this is great with it's undefined but terrifying villain. good form and rhyme, CBAT..................meeshu
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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scary monsters and super freaks, this is great with it's undefined but terrifying villain. good form and rhyme, CBAT..................meeshu
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Thanks for your encouraging words
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a recurring nightmare that happens every time sleep takes over and there is no rest, we are often haunted by news stories and what happens in the world, sometimes it's better to be ignorant, your words get under the skin, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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This sounds like a recurring nightmare that happens every time sleep takes over and there is no rest, we are often haunted by news stories and what happens in the world, sometimes it's better to be ignorant, your words get under the skin, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Sadly it is worse if the nightmare is homegrown. Thank you for your remarks.
Comment from Debbie Pope
This poem is unsettling. Good, but disturbing, as it should be for your nightmare category. I used that same photo in a poem once. It fits your words so much better. She certainly appears to be "seeping and weeping."
I have trouble understanding some lines, but the words follow the form of a nightmare, which can be disjunct and nonsensical.
Good job.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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This poem is unsettling. Good, but disturbing, as it should be for your nightmare category. I used that same photo in a poem once. It fits your words so much better. She certainly appears to be "seeping and weeping."
I have trouble understanding some lines, but the words follow the form of a nightmare, which can be disjunct and nonsensical.
Good job.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Your response is appreciated, thanks
Comment from Anntonette
Sometimes we cry in our sleep, make noises, drool, move around, sleepwalk, you name it! Its scary because we aren't aware of what we do when sleeping. Understandable read!
- Anntonette J
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Sometimes we cry in our sleep, make noises, drool, move around, sleepwalk, you name it! Its scary because we aren't aware of what we do when sleeping. Understandable read!
- Anntonette J
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Often our dreams come from things we go through daily, thank you.
Comment from sajeda6
Really nice poem. The nightmare is like a person creeping in. Lots of descriptions are scary. Nightmares are horrible and confusing. Nicely written!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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Really nice poem. The nightmare is like a person creeping in. Lots of descriptions are scary. Nightmares are horrible and confusing. Nicely written!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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Thank you.
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You are welcome.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Loumon
This definitely stirred fear, the very supernatural fear. Scary. Well written, with good choice of words and rhyming scheme.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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This definitely stirred fear, the very supernatural fear. Scary. Well written, with good choice of words and rhyming scheme.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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I appreciate your review.
Comment from Linda Kay
Very good word choice to paint a grisly picture of you sleep time visitor. I also like the message- don't complain about your lot in life, others have it worse (even if they are supernatural)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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Very good word choice to paint a grisly picture of you sleep time visitor. I also like the message- don't complain about your lot in life, others have it worse (even if they are supernatural)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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Thank you.
