Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 242 " The Temptation"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for conjuring up this lesson in a quatret and adding such a parallel photograph. Today, one of our tour group members left his I-pad on a bus bench and someone brought it to a nearby concession stand and he got it back! I am glad to hear that you experienced a similar event--it restores our faith in humankind. Cheers- Joan, from sun-soaked Seville
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thank you for conjuring up this lesson in a quatret and adding such a parallel photograph. Today, one of our tour group members left his I-pad on a bus bench and someone brought it to a nearby concession stand and he got it back! I am glad to hear that you experienced a similar event--it restores our faith in humankind. Cheers- Joan, from sun-soaked Seville
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thank you Joan. So glad you checked it from Seville. That does restore my faith too.
Comment from ravenblack
I once did the same as a kid- found a wallet while peddling my bike, emptied the cash- 60 bucks which to me was a fortune- and turned it in at the gas station as it was in the parking lot. And later peddled back and returned the cash - which the owner left for me as a reward for being honest. Funny how things work out. Good poem, though I think you need some sort of transition between the second and third line between I and who.
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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I once did the same as a kid- found a wallet while peddling my bike, emptied the cash- 60 bucks which to me was a fortune- and turned it in at the gas station as it was in the parking lot. And later peddled back and returned the cash - which the owner left for me as a reward for being honest. Funny how things work out. Good poem, though I think you need some sort of transition between the second and third line between I and who.
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Yhank you ravenblack. I think it's ok the way its is.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Says a lot for the power of a Mother's influence - for good or evil!
Love the story. Love the form.
My mom influenced my life and my thinking so much too.
Sonali
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Says a lot for the power of a Mother's influence - for good or evil!
Love the story. Love the form.
My mom influenced my life and my thinking so much too.
Sonali
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Thank you Sonali. Yes indeed, the play a huge developmental role on their children's life.
Comment from rod007
A good deed is a deed indeed, for honesty pays in a lot of ways not only for God but for a commune of people who respect each other's property--something like this happened to me when I was kid. I brought the wallet I found on the pavement to the police, it had fifty pounds in it--a lot of money in those days. I just hope the cops returned it to its owner!
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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A good deed is a deed indeed, for honesty pays in a lot of ways not only for God but for a commune of people who respect each other's property--something like this happened to me when I was kid. I brought the wallet I found on the pavement to the police, it had fifty pounds in it--a lot of money in those days. I just hope the cops returned it to its owner!
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Thank you rod. At least you did your part.
Comment from Pantygynt
I like these quatrets. This is I think the second one of yours that I have reviewed. The struggle with conscience comes over well. I found myself wondering, "How vwould I have reacted". Your notes on the photo made me laugh. An excellent piece of insurance against the fortune hunters!
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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I like these quatrets. This is I think the second one of yours that I have reviewed. The struggle with conscience comes over well. I found myself wondering, "How vwould I have reacted". Your notes on the photo made me laugh. An excellent piece of insurance against the fortune hunters!
Comment Written 21-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, this is my second.
Btw, did you catch my villanelle., Red Paddlewheel. I did do it in the 11-7 meter.
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No that one slipped the net I think. I would have reviewed it had I seen it. If it was last week I was busy with proper work as well and got a bit behind. I ll find it in your portfolio.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem makes a great statement. I like the indented italicized lines that represent your conscience. Excellent job with the rhyme. I see no changes.
One would hope that all people would return the wallet intact. But sadly that is not the case.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Your poem makes a great statement. I like the indented italicized lines that represent your conscience. Excellent job with the rhyme. I see no changes.
One would hope that all people would return the wallet intact. But sadly that is not the case.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Thank you jannypan.
Comment from TAB_that's me
A very beautiful poem with a wonderful message. We have to treat others and do things the way we would want them done to us.
Teresa
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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A very beautiful poem with a wonderful message. We have to treat others and do things the way we would want them done to us.
Teresa
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Thank you, Teresa.
