Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "A Heart As Cold As Stone"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Well, don't come crying to me when she tears your world in two.
Remember that you told me there ain't a thing I do for you.
What a sorrowful tale of lost love, Brett - but so well presented - the words, rhythm and rhyme flowing smoothly throughout.... good luck with the contest.
Margaret
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Well, don't come crying to me when she tears your world in two.
Remember that you told me there ain't a thing I do for you.
What a sorrowful tale of lost love, Brett - but so well presented - the words, rhythm and rhyme flowing smoothly throughout.... good luck with the contest.
Margaret
Comment Written 09-May-2015
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Comment from Eric1
Hi Brett, loved reading these poetical lyrics my friend, you seem to excel at being a poet and a lyricist, the words to this beautiful song and competition entry would fare well in the Country and western category, I would like to hear your words set to music on here one day.
Good luck in the contest.
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Hi Brett, loved reading these poetical lyrics my friend, you seem to excel at being a poet and a lyricist, the words to this beautiful song and competition entry would fare well in the Country and western category, I would like to hear your words set to music on here one day.
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment from mfowler
Your poem fulfills the prompt well with its memories of a love lost despite the candles and roses. Your quatrains flow nicely and the whole feels like a romantic love song about loss. I thought your philosophical and imagery heavy third last verse was my favourite. Good luck with your entry.
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Your poem fulfills the prompt well with its memories of a love lost despite the candles and roses. Your quatrains flow nicely and the whole feels like a romantic love song about loss. I thought your philosophical and imagery heavy third last verse was my favourite. Good luck with your entry.
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Comment from scd41
Love is a game played by the heart and no one knows why one changes mind and leaves for greener pasteurs. Of course, the proverb says, the grass is always greener on the other side of the fence.' Nevertheless, one should not feel inferior if let down by the lover. I liked your lines 'I know that she is waiting with a heart as cold as stone,
but, some day soon you'll wake up and find your new love gone.'
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Love is a game played by the heart and no one knows why one changes mind and leaves for greener pasteurs. Of course, the proverb says, the grass is always greener on the other side of the fence.' Nevertheless, one should not feel inferior if let down by the lover. I liked your lines 'I know that she is waiting with a heart as cold as stone,
but, some day soon you'll wake up and find your new love gone.'
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Comment from patcelaw
This is an excellent poem. beautifully presented. I enjoyed this writing.
I am sure we all have a bag that we've packed with our memories.
May you have a wonder filled weekend, Patricia
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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This is an excellent poem. beautifully presented. I enjoyed this writing.
I am sure we all have a bag that we've packed with our memories.
May you have a wonder filled weekend, Patricia
Comment Written 08-May-2015
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Comment from thee-name
Excellent poem. I enjoyed reading your rhyming writing.
There's a bag that I've packing full of my memories.
I gave my head and soul to you, but you wanted to be free.
Suggestion: put comma between you & but.
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Excellent poem. I enjoyed reading your rhyming writing.
There's a bag that I've packing full of my memories.
I gave my head and soul to you, but you wanted to be free.
Suggestion: put comma between you & but.
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thank you!
Comment from Ekim777
You have the happy knack of expressing piquant and poignant things in the simplest way. By the time we reach the final verse. We feel that we have plumbed the depth of human love. Human beings being what they are, love becomes a maze of passions and a clash of selfishness. It's not enough to say that love like life cannot be eternal. So with the break-up of an affair might be normal but a painful period of mourning is necessary too. I think you say all this in your poem.-Ekim777
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You have the happy knack of expressing piquant and poignant things in the simplest way. By the time we reach the final verse. We feel that we have plumbed the depth of human love. Human beings being what they are, love becomes a maze of passions and a clash of selfishness. It's not enough to say that love like life cannot be eternal. So with the break-up of an affair might be normal but a painful period of mourning is necessary too. I think you say all this in your poem.-Ekim777
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Comment from Cindy Warren
That's so sad. Love stories seem to go wrong a lot. Yes, you risk pain when you fall in love, but what's the option? I have a rule about never taking a guy back. If he's left once he'll do it again. Good luck in the contest.
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That's so sad. Love stories seem to go wrong a lot. Yes, you risk pain when you fall in love, but what's the option? I have a rule about never taking a guy back. If he's left once he'll do it again. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2015
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Comment from Treischel
This is a true classic country western theme of love lst and scorned,heartache and sleepless nights. Excellent aabb rhymed quatrains with closing couplet with a twist. Broken heart. Uneven cadence matches the mood. Well told.
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This is a true classic country western theme of love lst and scorned,heartache and sleepless nights. Excellent aabb rhymed quatrains with closing couplet with a twist. Broken heart. Uneven cadence matches the mood. Well told.
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Comment from Donya Quijote
This poem caught me interest because stupid cupid has been flying around the middle school where I teach, striking boys and girls alike with his poison arrows. the girls he makes dreamy eyed and giddy and the boys stupid. Annoying really. I tell you this because with the day's activities running through my head as I read your poem the rhyme came across as sappy. That is just a question of individual taste and not criticism. However, there is a strong song-like quality about this poem, a definite melody runs from beginning to end. I found that aspect very interesting. Good luck in the contest...
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This poem caught me interest because stupid cupid has been flying around the middle school where I teach, striking boys and girls alike with his poison arrows. the girls he makes dreamy eyed and giddy and the boys stupid. Annoying really. I tell you this because with the day's activities running through my head as I read your poem the rhyme came across as sappy. That is just a question of individual taste and not criticism. However, there is a strong song-like quality about this poem, a definite melody runs from beginning to end. I found that aspect very interesting. Good luck in the contest...
Comment Written 07-May-2015
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