Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 227 "May Blooms"Small and Specialty Poems
9 total reviews
Comment from Angel Debbie
Great job on this. You didn't lose a thing when reading.
I got to try this new style, it does look easy.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Great job on this. You didn't lose a thing when reading.
I got to try this new style, it does look easy.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Thank you Angel Debbie.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Another lovely poem, and I do like this version of the Haiku better. I especially liked the way you rhymed it, it made it so much sweeter to read. It is perfect with your photo. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Another lovely poem, and I do like this version of the Haiku better. I especially liked the way you rhymed it, it made it so much sweeter to read. It is perfect with your photo. :) Sandra
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thank you Sandra. Glad you enjoyed my little May tribute.
Comment from Joan E.
I think it was sunnilicious who recently posted a Haynaku--an odd little form, but you made it work well in this series with rhyme. Your photo certainly captures the potted flowers that bloom in the spring--tra la. Enjoy your first May weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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I think it was sunnilicious who recently posted a Haynaku--an odd little form, but you made it work well in this series with rhyme. Your photo certainly captures the potted flowers that bloom in the spring--tra la. Enjoy your first May weekend- Joan
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Thank you zjoan. You too.
Comment from lakeport
May blooms, indeed it's beautiful May again, that's a wonderful expressed poem.
I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. lakeport......
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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May blooms, indeed it's beautiful May again, that's a wonderful expressed poem.
I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. lakeport......
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Thank you Les.
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you are very welcome.Lakeport.
Comment from rod007
In this simple poem you captured the smell and color of the flowers in that magnificent flower pot. The image is brilliant as purple, orange, red and pink mingle in play. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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In this simple poem you captured the smell and color of the flowers in that magnificent flower pot. The image is brilliant as purple, orange, red and pink mingle in play. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Thank you rod.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is very effective poetry for making definitive, short, sharp statements. If each stanza i written as a line you have a simple, alternatively rhyming quatrain. What this one has not got is that essential Japanese 'feel' to it that is the first requirement of the haiku. Dare I say it, but it could be the rhyming element that is responsible! Anyway thank heavens May has arrived and the colour is coming back to the gardens.
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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This is very effective poetry for making definitive, short, sharp statements. If each stanza i written as a line you have a simple, alternatively rhyming quatrain. What this one has not got is that essential Japanese 'feel' to it that is the first requirement of the haiku. Dare I say it, but it could be the rhyming element that is responsible! Anyway thank heavens May has arrived and the colour is coming back to the gardens.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Alas, i think you are right. It may also be the capitalization, punctuation, and title format. I sort of intentionally violated all those Japanese rules, because I don't think the format should even be classified as a relative of a Haiku. That was pretty presumptuous. But, you are the only one who noted that, so far.
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I have a sestina now on p.1 if you are interested.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
I can smell the aroma of the lilacs in the air..This was spot on in both words as well rhythm..Another great write by my Mr. T
TK
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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I can smell the aroma of the lilacs in the air..This was spot on in both words as well rhythm..Another great write by my Mr. T
TK
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you Sir T.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I really like your poem. The format is interesting. Maybe you could create a contest with that format. I am amazed at your knowledge of poetic forms and willingness to share it with others.
I
like this
season a lot.
The words a lot are vague. However if you did change them, then you would also have to change the rhyme of the last verse. Remember this is just my and, it is your call.
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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I really like your poem. The format is interesting. Maybe you could create a contest with that format. I am amazed at your knowledge of poetic forms and willingness to share it with others.
I
like this
season a lot.
The words a lot are vague. However if you did change them, then you would also have to change the rhyme of the last verse. Remember this is just my and, it is your call.
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you Jannypan. Your not the only one y
Who pointed to that line.
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But I did it in a nice way???
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Yes, you did.
Comment from Edward J
I thought this was well written. I thought you did a great job of expressing your joy of the season. My only thought is
"I
like this
season a lot. "
wasn't the strongest stanza. The next two were powerful and poetic. This needed that same level of description.
Well done!
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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I thought this was well written. I thought you did a great job of expressing your joy of the season. My only thought is
"I
like this
season a lot. "
wasn't the strongest stanza. The next two were powerful and poetic. This needed that same level of description.
Well done!
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Ethanol you Edward. Your probably right.
