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A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics

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Comment from Delahay
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I don't read in this the wife who left showing empathy for her husband. It seems that she left him for someone else but knows that doing so will hurt him. What am I missing?

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


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    Her trying to break her leaving to him gently in a vain effort to lessen his pain. Thanks for your comments and support.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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Take away these teardrops (I would change these to the)

This is easy for me to relate to as I recently had a similar situation. You have describer the emotions well.

One other change, I would l change this line


There's so much I need to tell her. So much I need to say.

to There's so much I need to tell her, so much I need to say.

As song lyrics, it would sound the same, but in poetry, I think this change would prove beneficial.

Good write, my friend~Debbie

Take care, my

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


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Comment from dmt1967
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This is a good song about heartache. I take his wife has left him for another woman or man. This song broke my heart as I can hear the pain in his voice. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


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Comment from Dustybones
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The one feature I noticed, and liked to a great extent of this was that the narrartor changed from a wife to the husband. I never saw this done. Fact is I'm a song writter, on F.Music, if you arent't there you need to be, as I read you have music listed in your profile. I have a one song half done with lyrics. I was thinking of a poem I had listed as a duet. I jumped up when I thought the same as your post. Why not split the lyrics into two perspectives. The Man, whose a typical pig, and the woman he's hitting on.
Good writing.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Brett...

Great freestyle with awesome artwork. At least she's letting him know instead of him remaining in the dark and learn in a more embarrassing way.

Well penned and presented.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


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Comment from w.j.debi
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This is certainly an original take on empathy for grief. The abandoned husband feeing empathy for the wife that has left him is unexpected.
The line that really sticks out for me is

I'd trade away tomorrow for one single yesterday.

Good luck in the contest with this gem.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015


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Comment from Tomes Johnston
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This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of work. I watched the movie called the scarlet letter. I can't remember exactly how it went because it was a long time ago, but I do know that it was branded on women who were seen as disgraced in society.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015


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    My pleasure
Comment from BeasPeas
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It is sad when a relationship of any kind ends. In the long run, I think it's kinder than staying. I'm sure many can relate to your poem.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2015


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Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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This is really very good. A broken relationship between a man and wife and empathy is shown by both parties. Flows really well - good rhyme throughout and really interesting. I think maybe if you distinguish between the words of each party. Perhaps put the letter in italics or something it would make it clearer. But this is excellent and good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothyx

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2015


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Comment from valerieellis
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Excellent! I enjoyed the ease in which the rhyme and rhythm flowed. The poem evoked strong feelings of empathy for the poor husband who was abandoned. I've been there myself.... I also love the artwork you attached. It added beauty to your writings. I look forward to reading more of your writings. God bless :)

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2015


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