To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "The Sun's Stunning Glare"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from I am Cat
I don't suppose the brevity monotype will allow me to slobber on the screen and get away with that..
A DNA sample will not suffice seeing as how I'm not built to service that model...
And yet, I may be in need of a mi(c)key very soon as I realize... This gps system im using with my coordinates
"Just Hasn't Found What it's looking for".
Direct me to the poem of your life's perfection, please?hurry!
Lol
I mustn't read you late at night and review you on the boards...
Say it fast .. Saved be bell.
..goodnight Mikey
Antihistamines are not good lol
Sweet dreams ,
Xox
Damn
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2015
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I don't suppose the brevity monotype will allow me to slobber on the screen and get away with that..
A DNA sample will not suffice seeing as how I'm not built to service that model...
And yet, I may be in need of a mi(c)key very soon as I realize... This gps system im using with my coordinates
"Just Hasn't Found What it's looking for".
Direct me to the poem of your life's perfection, please?hurry!
Lol
I mustn't read you late at night and review you on the boards...
Say it fast .. Saved be bell.
..goodnight Mikey
Antihistamines are not good lol
Sweet dreams ,
Xox
Damn
Comment Written 04-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2015
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"Hey, what ever happened to Cat?"
"I don't know, I showed her a picture of a pretty girl and she wandered away ..."
I like this little poem. Not bad, huh? Antihistamines are good things unless of course you're a histamine.
Well, thank you very much. I like your reaction. I think it's a positive step in the right direction. :))
Sweet dreams to you as well. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
I missed this stunning piece. Wonderful poetry using all devices available. Masterful use of language presenting images tha explode in the mind. Loved this.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I missed this stunning piece. Wonderful poetry using all devices available. Masterful use of language presenting images tha explode in the mind. Loved this.
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you so much. I didn't get many reviews. I'm pleased you enjoyed this one, I was kind of proud of it. :)) mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. She does look sexy and innocent. I love the poem. The last line is really telling. You told yourself the lies. You said what you wanted to believe. She was not really innocent. Great work.
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I love the picture. She does look sexy and innocent. I love the poem. The last line is really telling. You told yourself the lies. You said what you wanted to believe. She was not really innocent. Great work.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from Tatarka2
Too bad you missed the deadline. I think this one might have won. What I loved: the alliteration of "coo caroo caroo" and "cackles cruelly," and the last paragraph, with its tight rhyme, and the surprise of "an eager ear/ so very near/ the attached to me . . ." A couple of suggestions: I think "sundress" is usually one word, and "anymore" should probably be two words in this context: "any more."
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Too bad you missed the deadline. I think this one might have won. What I loved: the alliteration of "coo caroo caroo" and "cackles cruelly," and the last paragraph, with its tight rhyme, and the surprise of "an eager ear/ so very near/ the attached to me . . ." A couple of suggestions: I think "sundress" is usually one word, and "anymore" should probably be two words in this context: "any more."
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from CR Delport
I think not many human emotions can cut as deep as betrayal by a trusted one. The sad thing is it makes you suspicious of everyone in the future. This is very well done, Mikey. Good job.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
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I think not many human emotions can cut as deep as betrayal by a trusted one. The sad thing is it makes you suspicious of everyone in the future. This is very well done, Mikey. Good job.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from Megalips
Mesmerizing metaphor...I love your description, both of your 'subject' and of yourself (the fool who starts rumors). Your 4th stanza is very well versed and reminiscent of our gullible nature...the lascivious crowd on the other side of the hill.
"Little thinks in the field, yon red cloaked clown
of thee on the hilltop looking down."
~Emerson
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Mesmerizing metaphor...I love your description, both of your 'subject' and of yourself (the fool who starts rumors). Your 4th stanza is very well versed and reminiscent of our gullible nature...the lascivious crowd on the other side of the hill.
"Little thinks in the field, yon red cloaked clown
of thee on the hilltop looking down."
~Emerson
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from Sasha
Very nice work with this one. I love the twist at the end, not what I was expecting. Too bad yo missed the deadline for this contest, I am sure it would have been a top contender.
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Very nice work with this one. I love the twist at the end, not what I was expecting. Too bad yo missed the deadline for this contest, I am sure it would have been a top contender.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from danpald
Poem of power does relate
The sense of love that hesitates
Seeing the beauty touched by the sunset
Lost because delay has been the assent
How to capture again the dream so real
The grasp of one that is pure beauties call
The desire to hold not a dream but reality
That is what the poem shares with this tragic twist
Romance desired turned to a dream
That came form the wonder of the perfect scene
Than changed with a moments flight
Seeking not the real but the dreamers sight
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Poem of power does relate
The sense of love that hesitates
Seeing the beauty touched by the sunset
Lost because delay has been the assent
How to capture again the dream so real
The grasp of one that is pure beauties call
The desire to hold not a dream but reality
That is what the poem shares with this tragic twist
Romance desired turned to a dream
That came form the wonder of the perfect scene
Than changed with a moments flight
Seeking not the real but the dreamers sight
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Verses flowed well into each other. Action flows smoothly. Descriptive language well used especially in the last verse. Write on.
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Verses flowed well into each other. Action flows smoothly. Descriptive language well used especially in the last verse. Write on.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from petalangela
Your stunning words often leave me breathless .in awe of your talent,one that I can but hope to emulate.
If have a goal with my own writing (and I do!)
It is to be able to pen words as eloquently as you do
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Your stunning words often leave me breathless .in awe of your talent,one that I can but hope to emulate.
If have a goal with my own writing (and I do!)
It is to be able to pen words as eloquently as you do
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
