Ginsu Knife-Part 1
short story15 total reviews
Comment from Green Lake Girl
This is a good example of how things spiral out of control. I'm not blaming our main character for standing up for himself. But, at some point, give up the damn banana!
Deep POV, which I always enjoy--we know what makes your guy tick. I'm hooked. Looking forward to more chapters, Mikey.
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This is a good example of how things spiral out of control. I'm not blaming our main character for standing up for himself. But, at some point, give up the damn banana!
Deep POV, which I always enjoy--we know what makes your guy tick. I'm hooked. Looking forward to more chapters, Mikey.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Wow, good stuff. What a jerk that criminal is, having his kid with him to see him steal for her. She's doomed for sure, and he's bound to get himself killed one way or another.
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Wow, good stuff. What a jerk that criminal is, having his kid with him to see him steal for her. She's doomed for sure, and he's bound to get himself killed one way or another.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
Comment from CR Delport
Mikey, what a well told story. Well, I hope that was a gun the guy pulled and not his wallet. Fear can make us see things that are not there. Good job.
Christelle.
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Mikey, what a well told story. Well, I hope that was a gun the guy pulled and not his wallet. Fear can make us see things that are not there. Good job.
Christelle.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
Comment from Nosha17
Most unusual story, starting with a self analysis on the strengths and weaknesses of a human being. I am still puzzled as to why the banana is so important, unless that is a symbol of something else. Written with style, exciting drama of the dispute and interaction. Interesting to read the next part. Faye
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Most unusual story, starting with a self analysis on the strengths and weaknesses of a human being. I am still puzzled as to why the banana is so important, unless that is a symbol of something else. Written with style, exciting drama of the dispute and interaction. Interesting to read the next part. Faye
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
Comment from Spitfire
Great opening that tells the reader what to expect. Or not.
For me, the enlightenment would have been: your life is not worth a banana. LOL
But I admire the principle behind the hero's refusal.
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Great opening that tells the reader what to expect. Or not.
For me, the enlightenment would have been: your life is not worth a banana. LOL
But I admire the principle behind the hero's refusal.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, you never know what is out there...but like you I would never start a fight...but I won't walk away from one either...I will protect myself...I love your story told...and a knife is a knife...very well written...now let me read the second part...Luff Linda xxoo love
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Hi Michael, you never know what is out there...but like you I would never start a fight...but I won't walk away from one either...I will protect myself...I love your story told...and a knife is a knife...very well written...now let me read the second part...Luff Linda xxoo love
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
Comment from Tatarka2
I like it very much. I can't wait to read Part 2. This is a very intriguing beginning. The character of the narrator is interesting, the reader is gradually led to understand him and wonder what will happen next.
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I like it very much. I can't wait to read Part 2. This is a very intriguing beginning. The character of the narrator is interesting, the reader is gradually led to understand him and wonder what will happen next.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
Comment from Megalips
I like the way you set this up and your comic relief is understated, but hilarious...it, of course, permeates the piece. And I can't help but visualizing one of those TV commercials with the guy wielding a Ginsu, hacking off some dood's arm and saying, "Finally, you can also use this for home defense".
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I like the way you set this up and your comic relief is understated, but hilarious...it, of course, permeates the piece. And I can't help but visualizing one of those TV commercials with the guy wielding a Ginsu, hacking off some dood's arm and saying, "Finally, you can also use this for home defense".
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
Comment from Sasha
Great start for this one. Lots of emotional action and I am now off to read part two. This is really well written. I am anxious to read the next part.
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Great start for this one. Lots of emotional action and I am now off to read part two. This is really well written. I am anxious to read the next part.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. It started out with a knife and a fun day at the fair. It was a good beginning but a very bad ending. It was all over a giant banana, or was it? I tend to think the fight was over values. How could the jerk be so blatant about taking something won by another? The man had to stand up to that. Great work.
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I love the story. It started out with a knife and a fun day at the fair. It was a good beginning but a very bad ending. It was all over a giant banana, or was it? I tend to think the fight was over values. How could the jerk be so blatant about taking something won by another? The man had to stand up to that. Great work.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
