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from birth I have longed for death

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Comment from lakeport
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Rattle snakes and little brothers. indeed living out in Nature is not an easy live,
but it has its beauty too. I enjoyed reading the store, God bless you. Lakeport,

 Comment Written 06-May-2015


reply by the author on 06-May-2015
    Thank you.
reply by lakeport on 06-May-2015
    you are very welcome. lakeport.
Comment from Curly Girly
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What a fascinating account of growing up. I grew up in Africa, and had many similar experiences. The world is all so global and urban now--it's so sad.
I can picture this well:
Our father was dealing with menial jobs between bouts of headaches that made him insane.
Our mother was constantly pregnant, while trying to handle bills and dads fits along with our wild bunch.
An excellent read, thanks for sharing. Nicole

 Comment Written 06-May-2015


reply by the author on 06-May-2015
    Thank you!

    I have read some of your work, and am impressed.
Comment from Jay Squires
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Cbat, you have a problem with the spacing of this chapter. You should always space with each new paragraph. This is because there is no indentation.

I am deducting a star for the spacing, but I will happily read your post, which looks otherwise interesting, and return the star as soon as you correct the spacing problem.

Thank you, CBat.

 Comment Written 06-May-2015


reply by the author on 06-May-2015
    Thank you, I am currently taking a grammar class and have not yet found the information you just provided.
    Getting less stars with helpful information is wonderful.
Comment from Walu Feral
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G'day Coral. I wish I had a six left for you on this one mate. Indeed it sounds like both a tough place and a fun/adventurous place to be a kid, I would have loved that part of your life as a child, but not some of the others. I have a question about relationships in your family....did you call all of the mothers Mom? Or just your biological one?

A couple of spags....

"I am squeamish and do not believe in killing things.So(put a space between . and So) My trusty"

"Our mother was constant ally(constantly) pregnant,"

"Lizard's were harder to catch but it was consoling to know that if a tale(tail) was lost,"

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 06-May-2015


reply by the author on 06-May-2015
    Thank's again for your help, you make a great teacher.

    Most families in our religion did have many mom's, but because of my fathers accident, and the difficulties after, he never had more than one mom. My mother gave birth 23 times with only 15 living.

    The other families did call all women in their families "Mother". As a married polygamist (28 years) our children called both mom's the same.
Comment from bizzygirl
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A lovley memory of growing up in simpler times. I envy the large family. We were only two. The stories of cutting a snake open is bizare but something only a kid would do. Wonderful memories, I wonder too if my grandchildren will have such joy. I think they will just not quite the same. Well written thanks for sharing. Do a spell check, couple errors noted

 Comment Written 05-May-2015


reply by the author on 05-May-2015
    Thank you!
reply by bizzygirl on 05-May-2015
    YW
Comment from Janet7053
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cbat, Love the childhood antics and pranks. Did you used to also hold your breath and have someone lace their hands around you from behind and snap the breath out of you by squeezing your ribcage? What about scratching each other with fingernails until you drew blood...was that wise?

Lizards doesn't need an apostrophe.

I hear you when you speak of coming in and asking mom something just so she wouldn't come looking for you.

 Comment Written 05-May-2015


reply by the author on 05-May-2015
    Are you talking about something you did?
    Perhaps you are thinking of 50 shades!
    Not my cup of tea.
    When are children wise?