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Eddie

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Comment from valerieellis
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Excellent! Beautifully written! This story evoked strong emotions of sadness, not only for Eddie's death but for the people who missed out on such a beautiful life. Your story brought to mind a poem I once read called, "The Dash." I highly recommend it. It is beautiful and has an amazing message. Again, excellent story! I look forward to reading more of your writings. God bless :)

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 01-May-2015
    Many thanks for taking the time to read this piece. It is very much appreciated.
Comment from Tatarka2
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This is just my humble opinion, but I think this story should have won. One tiny SPAG: I don't think you need a comma after "funerals," as in "all funerals are sad." Overall, though, I thought this was a bittersweet eulogy to your friend, and it says so much about who you are as a person and a caregiver. Top-notch, and congratulations on placing in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
    Many thanks for your generous comments and thoughts. they are very much appreciated.
Comment from Muffins
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A causal, respectful prospective view on a funeral of a man who may or may not deserved an anemic funeral attendance. But, when your in a coffin, does it matter? Your presence and insight proved it does not. I beliveed Eddie felt your kindness, your sincerity and that's more improtant than having one hundred people filling church pews at a funeral. This was beautifully written. It's smooth and gentle like a quiet river stream.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
    Many thanks for the warm and generous response to this piece. It is very much appreciated
Comment from Brabazon
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Every body has got his time and how is will be.

Here, where i come from and live, a paucity of mourners is what people dread. When people attend the funeral of others they do it for people to notice and put their names in a register. When his turn comes, he, sure, will be paid back. Other ways of building ones mourners is to be a church member. Here, in Nigeria, 70% of church goers do it for purposes of insurance in the face of death, or when a challenge that demands support comes up. Such feared challenges are usually accumulated hospitals bills when one is operated upon.

But, I think it doesn't really matter what happens after your death -you are already gone. Regardless of the size of his mourners, I'm confident that Eddie is resting in peace. I hope that I will leave as long as he did.

Thank you for sharing this. If anything, it was informative, educational and thought provoking.

Thank you.

Brabazon.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
    Many thanks for the thoughtful response to this piece. It is very much appreciated
Comment from Wabigoon
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Giraffmang--
Very well done. Some of the writing is maybe "casual," not absolutely "perfect" but I think that is part of the ease and charm...and humor of the piece. The sadness as well.

I am not sure I know what a "carer" is but I'm sure Eddie was grateful he had one and probably many others too. The...thought of a funeral with no one there does become a bit of a nightmare as one gets older.

Thanks, brave piece.
Wabigoon

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Many thanks for your thoughts on this.
    A "carer" is someone who literally cares for other people. Healthcare assistant, child care assistant, care assistant would all fall under this umbrella, too.

    I go into client's homes and get them up, wash, dress, make food and so on to enable them to live in their own homes rather than go into care homes, or rest homes. Before this I worked in residential special schools helping children and young people who had various special, or social needs.

    A carer is just that - one who delivers care to those who need it.

    G
Comment from Ulla
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A quite well written piece of a dismal funeral. It's always sad to attend but it can certainly be a celebration of the long life lived and in fond memory of the deceased.
Not in this case though. What a sad story. Good luck in the contest. Ulla

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Many thanks for your thoughts on this. It is much appreciated.
Comment from kiwijenny
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Gary this is a wonderful story..you cared not just at the funeral but made a man's life better, I think you gave Eddie dignity
I don't know why his daughter didn't visit him
God bless

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Many thanks for the review and more so for your generous comments. Dignity and respect are so important in the care environment. It should never be a 'job' but sadly it seems to be going that way. He was a gentleman. Much appreciated
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Gareth...

A touching story. It is sad to think only ten people showed. So many times people who end up in a care facility are neglected. The family always has something or someone else that's more important.

You're right, the most important thing is that we cared, and that we loved and were loved.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Hi Jax, many thanks for the review. Neglect is such a horrible thing. Many are left in the care of 'strangers', with barely any contact. Ninety-four years on this earth, and this was it. A very sad state of affairs. Much appreciated.
    G
Comment from dmt1967
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I find relatives u have never met turn up at funerals and good on you for caring. It was nice of you to bother to turn up and shows just how caring you are. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Yes, you are right. It is frequently seen as an obligation or chore rather than out of any real feelings of love or respect. I took the afternoon off for the service; I felt it important to do so. I liked the man - a true gentleman, in my experience. Much appreciated.
Comment from petalangela
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Oh wow I am so choked up by this incredible piece of work. All the more tragic because it is non fiction and happens continually
Sometimes carers are all we have left and even then so few of the actually really care. To many we are a just a pay check.
My daughter has just relocated from Africa to live with. This would have could have been my funeral I hope it is read and reviewed by many. Thank you for you love and insight and most of all your non judgement of family who sometimes just cannot handle situations and stay away

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
    Many thanks for this generous and great review. It is very much appreciated.