Anzac Day
Lest we forget the fallen soldiers.27 total reviews
Comment from bill darling
Absolutely brilliant. The flow of this poem, the message so clear, yes, these men fought a battle, and,be forever remembered. Thank you for sharing this so very well written verse.These men formed a nation.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2015
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Absolutely brilliant. The flow of this poem, the message so clear, yes, these men fought a battle, and,be forever remembered. Thank you for sharing this so very well written verse.These men formed a nation.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2015
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Thanks so much Bill. I feel very strongly about ANZAC Day and the Turks have crack troops (2,000) ready to protect our people on the 25th. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from adewpearl
strong use of rhyming couplets
very effective imagery with strong emotional appeal
great alliteration like in the silent sentinels passage
a moving poetic tribute, my friend :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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strong use of rhyming couplets
very effective imagery with strong emotional appeal
great alliteration like in the silent sentinels passage
a moving poetic tribute, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Bubbling Brooke, Thanks so much for reading. 100 years this month since WW1 lots of commemorations will be going on across the country. Love, Kay.
Comment from garrymc5
Fingers of light part the night -nice
Golden rays of dawn, -cliched
Ghostly soldiers wade ashore
As they did one hundred years before. --strictly speaking, they were not ghosts 100 yrs ago. Revise.
Bloody battles so we could be free --again, technically and factually, we were invading a country that was not threatening us
Long dead men from bloody foam --nice
Bugler sounds reveille, welcoming day -- this line breaks the rhythm of the previous ones
Centenary of one-hundred years --tautology. Omit.
Hope this helps/
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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Fingers of light part the night -nice
Golden rays of dawn, -cliched
Ghostly soldiers wade ashore
As they did one hundred years before. --strictly speaking, they were not ghosts 100 yrs ago. Revise.
Bloody battles so we could be free --again, technically and factually, we were invading a country that was not threatening us
Long dead men from bloody foam --nice
Bugler sounds reveille, welcoming day -- this line breaks the rhythm of the previous ones
Centenary of one-hundred years --tautology. Omit.
Hope this helps/
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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What? The Turks were our enemies and we Australians and New Zealanders were attacking and trying to take the land. ANZAC Cove is a sacred place where we attend and commemorate the men who died every year on the 25th April and this year especially, 100 years of WW1 and WW11. Thank you. All men that died in both wars haunt the places that they were shot to death.
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The Turks had never heard of us in 1914.
But 'war' was considered glorious in those times (Kipling and all that), so most men went to war NOT to defend Australia but for adventure, or in defence of the Britain. It is clearly shown in the newspapers of the day, and found in reputable history books. The 'they died for our freedom' was invented later.
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On the 25th of April 1915 ANZAC troops landed on the beach at Gallipoli (later called (ANZAC Cove, in peacetime) "At the going down of the sun and in the morning, we will remember them." Look up 'landing at Gallipoli' case closed.
Comment from benoenose
A national poem of freedom and excellence. In war the contribution of the soldiers are praised by the poet. The poet seeks to see the commitment of the war to let free the nation. This sportive mentality is highlighted within the poem.
Recommended for people who are in war especially soldiers to make the rank out of this war, to make the nation reign.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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A national poem of freedom and excellence. In war the contribution of the soldiers are praised by the poet. The poet seeks to see the commitment of the war to let free the nation. This sportive mentality is highlighted within the poem.
Recommended for people who are in war especially soldiers to make the rank out of this war, to make the nation reign.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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Thanks so much for reading and your in-depth review. Glad you liked the poem. Blessings, K.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Kay, I so hate the war...just wish it would all stop...just like that...to many lives passing for land that we lease...it belongs to God not us...just enjoy it's beauty...my heart goes out to all who have fought for us....and those who have dead....very well written ...so sad...love ya you...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Hi Kay, I so hate the war...just wish it would all stop...just like that...to many lives passing for land that we lease...it belongs to God not us...just enjoy it's beauty...my heart goes out to all who have fought for us....and those who have dead....very well written ...so sad...love ya you...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 08-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Luverly Linda, Man has fought since the cave-man! Thanks for reading my dear friend. Love, Kay.
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I know...you would think Kay they would figure it out...sigh...you have a wonderful evening beautiful girl..love ya Linda xxoo
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Kay, what a great piece this is. I am going to miss another ANZAC day this year as I'll be overseas as I have for the last few. I used to always go to the dawn service. Great work mate, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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G'day Kay, what a great piece this is. I am going to miss another ANZAC day this year as I'll be overseas as I have for the last few. I used to always go to the dawn service. Great work mate, cheers Fez
Comment Written 07-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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Hi Fez, Thanks for reading, sorry you will miss the day. Glad you liked the tribute. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from Alan K Pease
You poem is an impressive tribute to those who died at Gapoli - 8000 or so of Australia/NewZealand and even some of a Newfoundland regiment, more losses for Britain and France. They are remembered in many islands of the Pacific and in South East Asia where they fought in WWII and later in Vietnam. Australia and New Zealand are staunch friends of America and Canada. The poem is well written with notes that are clear and informative
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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You poem is an impressive tribute to those who died at Gapoli - 8000 or so of Australia/NewZealand and even some of a Newfoundland regiment, more losses for Britain and France. They are remembered in many islands of the Pacific and in South East Asia where they fought in WWII and later in Vietnam. Australia and New Zealand are staunch friends of America and Canada. The poem is well written with notes that are clear and informative
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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Dear friend Alan, Thanks so much for reading, glad you appreciated my tribute to the fallen. "At the going down of the sun and in the morning, we will remember them." Love, Kay.
Comment from artemis53
What a very lovely and yet lonely piece you have written. I can see the ghosts from the shore young and determined but cut down in the name of freedom.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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What a very lovely and yet lonely piece you have written. I can see the ghosts from the shore young and determined but cut down in the name of freedom.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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Thank you for reading my friend. "At the going down of the sun and in the morning, we will remember them." Love, Kay.
Comment from Ben Colder
Beautiful tribute to such gallantry. I was thinking also about Normandy in France, the lives, the results. Best to you in the contest. Hope you win.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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Beautiful tribute to such gallantry. I was thinking also about Normandy in France, the lives, the results. Best to you in the contest. Hope you win.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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Ben, Thanks so much for reading and yes, Normandy was in my mind too. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from tfawcus
A fine poem, indeed and a tribute to these fallen soldiers so firmly embedded in the psyche of Australia. Your opening line was a superb piece of imagery, 'Fingers of light part the night'. It so aptly describes the atmosphere of the dawn service. Your use of the word 'ghosts' to signify the fallen soldiers, the silent mourners and their sad memories acts like glue, binding this poem together. Having a military background myself, I think I'm right in saying that 'revellee' should be 'reveille'. My mother-in-law will be marching again this year or, rather, riding in a bus. She is now 98 and was a nurse in the casualty clearing stations of the Middle East. We were reading her letters and diaries again together only the other day.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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A fine poem, indeed and a tribute to these fallen soldiers so firmly embedded in the psyche of Australia. Your opening line was a superb piece of imagery, 'Fingers of light part the night'. It so aptly describes the atmosphere of the dawn service. Your use of the word 'ghosts' to signify the fallen soldiers, the silent mourners and their sad memories acts like glue, binding this poem together. Having a military background myself, I think I'm right in saying that 'revellee' should be 'reveille'. My mother-in-law will be marching again this year or, rather, riding in a bus. She is now 98 and was a nurse in the casualty clearing stations of the Middle East. We were reading her letters and diaries again together only the other day.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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Thank you friend, I think reveille must be the French spelling? You are blessed to have her diaries. Blessings, Kay.
