Beautiful Death
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Poet indicates something common but interesting we often do not care or remember, that with the age, separating men from women becomes harder; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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Poet indicates something common but interesting we often do not care or remember, that with the age, separating men from women becomes harder; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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Thank you.
Comment from c_lucas
Aging is not for the weak of heart. This is very well written with a touch of humor. One must face life one day at a time. This has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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Aging is not for the weak of heart. This is very well written with a touch of humor. One must face life one day at a time. This has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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I appreciate your comments my mother taught us not to speak of these things so this was. Hard to admit.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Enjoyed this poem about getting old, loved the two line format used, emotive and sad the aging process hangs heavy around the writer's neck.
Best wishes..........
Mitchell
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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Enjoyed this poem about getting old, loved the two line format used, emotive and sad the aging process hangs heavy around the writer's neck.
Best wishes..........
Mitchell
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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Thany you very much.
Comment from papa55mike
Wonderful job, this is so well written. I to am sagging in spots I didn't know I had. I keep my hair cut short to cover my receding hairline. I really enjoyed your poem. Have a great day and God Bless, mike.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Wonderful job, this is so well written. I to am sagging in spots I didn't know I had. I keep my hair cut short to cover my receding hairline. I really enjoyed your poem. Have a great day and God Bless, mike.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
Comment from Patti R.
I suppose there is not much good to say about aging - but it happens to everyone.
I found this poem to be humorous.
The rhymes are good, but the rhythm is broken up by the lack of a rhyming scheme and changing syllable count per line. Some couplets rhyme, some do not.
Patti
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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I suppose there is not much good to say about aging - but it happens to everyone.
I found this poem to be humorous.
The rhymes are good, but the rhythm is broken up by the lack of a rhyming scheme and changing syllable count per line. Some couplets rhyme, some do not.
Patti
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
As you can tell, I know nothing about poems.
Even reading them confuses me.
I am doing some classes, perhaps it will help.
Couplets? syllable count?
Comment from MickeyV
Hi, CBAT: This is a very interesting poem. You did a really good job portraying the feelings of someone who has had enough. Did you mean to use "losing" as opposed to "loosing" in your description? Good luck to you. Mickey
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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Hi, CBAT: This is a very interesting poem. You did a really good job portraying the feelings of someone who has had enough. Did you mean to use "losing" as opposed to "loosing" in your description? Good luck to you. Mickey
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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I am going to edit,.
My mind is worse than my body.
Thank you for reading this.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I enjoyed this poem with good solid rhymes and approximates.
Good presentation of the piece as well in the short lines.
The joys of aging are not lost on us. When does enough become enough?
GMG
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Hi there,
I enjoyed this poem with good solid rhymes and approximates.
Good presentation of the piece as well in the short lines.
The joys of aging are not lost on us. When does enough become enough?
GMG
Comment Written 26-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
Good question.
Comment from thomdble
Humorous, sad and true. I have often wondered why I am still around. For His purpose - is the only reason I have come up with. You stated the facts of the aged. Thanks for sharing, (I think?).
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Humorous, sad and true. I have often wondered why I am still around. For His purpose - is the only reason I have come up with. You stated the facts of the aged. Thanks for sharing, (I think?).
Comment Written 26-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
Comment from adewpearl
fun rhyming and proximate rhyme like in snot/top
good use of enjambment and a good cadence when read aloud
vivid descriptive detail
great humor
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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fun rhyming and proximate rhyme like in snot/top
good use of enjambment and a good cadence when read aloud
vivid descriptive detail
great humor
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 25-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Thank You much.
Comment from patcelaw
I thought this to be funny and I can relate on several point the snot, the teeth , the piddle and the spittle.
I don't think with the package I carry just below my chin anyone will confuse me for a man however. Patricia
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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I thought this to be funny and I can relate on several point the snot, the teeth , the piddle and the spittle.
I don't think with the package I carry just below my chin anyone will confuse me for a man however. Patricia
Comment Written 25-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Thank you, I felt silly for writing this.
I just lost my bearings for a minute.
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it gave me a laugh so I am glad you lost your bearings for a minute.
