Beautiful Death
Viewing comments for Chapter 10018 "Fickle Trickle"from birth I have longed for death
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. Firstly you have no need to apologise for your poetry, there is much, much worse poetry out there than yours my friend. I really enjoyed this, it is very well written and thought out and reads easily and smoothly. Well done, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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G'day mate. Firstly you have no need to apologise for your poetry, there is much, much worse poetry out there than yours my friend. I really enjoyed this, it is very well written and thought out and reads easily and smoothly. Well done, cheers Fez
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
You have made my day!
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a this work presents as a gifted writer, unafraid to share her thoughts, fragmented though they may appear, they become cohesive in free verse meter and say a great deal about the emotional depth of this freely constructed and succinct piece -
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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In my opinion, a this work presents as a gifted writer, unafraid to share her thoughts, fragmented though they may appear, they become cohesive in free verse meter and say a great deal about the emotional depth of this freely constructed and succinct piece -
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
I love the words, now I must look up the meaning of some.
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You are so welcome...
Comment from Ben Colder
Never apologize for sharing your thoughts. They are yours and good enough for you. Really that is all that matters. Enjoy what God gives you. A memory is a terrible thing to lose. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Never apologize for sharing your thoughts. They are yours and good enough for you. Really that is all that matters. Enjoy what God gives you. A memory is a terrible thing to lose. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
Comment from royowen
Don't apologise for this poetry, in many conventions this would be excellent! The wording is great, communicates emotions and thoughts beautifully, I couldn't find anything amiss with it! You've left out punctuation, but many people do in poetry, so well done, I quite enjoyed this, do it again! Well done, some good use of rhyme. blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Don't apologise for this poetry, in many conventions this would be excellent! The wording is great, communicates emotions and thoughts beautifully, I couldn't find anything amiss with it! You've left out punctuation, but many people do in poetry, so well done, I quite enjoyed this, do it again! Well done, some good use of rhyme. blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
leaving out punctuation is certainly an advantage for me.
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My pleasure,
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Love it! Please don't apologize. You do a wonderful job of showing us how memory - doesn't work! But maybe again - yes it does. A well written and creative poem. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Love it! Please don't apologize. You do a wonderful job of showing us how memory - doesn't work! But maybe again - yes it does. A well written and creative poem. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
Comment from Pyrrho
As for me, at 81 even I see that I am headed into the dotty age where memory is a memory, or it seems to be ... I forget, or do I? Oh well it will come to me ... or it won't.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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As for me, at 81 even I see that I am headed into the dotty age where memory is a memory, or it seems to be ... I forget, or do I? Oh well it will come to me ... or it won't.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Funny!
It sounds like you at 81 have more marbles than I do at 64.
Thank you!
Comment from meggie13
Memory is failing to your character when he/she can remember it hunts him /her with a past not worth remembering. Well written with a good message.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Memory is failing to your character when he/she can remember it hunts him /her with a past not worth remembering. Well written with a good message.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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My memory is so bad, I am not quite sure what you mean.
Naturally at first, I take you meaning my character is failing, I have a past not worth remembering.
Then my other mind say's " no that is not what was meant. You wouldn't have been kind".
Thank you for the stars and response.
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What I meant is the character you are writing about. I did not know if this is something happening to you. If you need some more explanation ,please let me know. I did not mean to offend you or be unkind.
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You were not unkind.
I have personality querks. (is that even a word?).
I was making fun of myself.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Memories can indeed be fickle, haunting, mean and cruel. Good words to describe bad experiences. Poem flowed nicely. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Memories can indeed be fickle, haunting, mean and cruel. Good words to describe bad experiences. Poem flowed nicely. Keep writing.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Thank you!
