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Small and Specialty Poems

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Comment from sunnilicious
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Experimenting isn't always a good thing. I'm glad you're keeping it to poetry. Great storytelling skills shining through in such a meticulously written short poem with too many syllable count requirements. Adventuresome you are.... Fabulous work!


 Comment Written 21-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
    Thank you Alicia. Those stars shine brightly for me.
Comment from Selina Stambi
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Again you've amazed - and dazed - me!

The ending is pithy alright!

Very clever, Tom.

Happy weekend. Spring's here (I hope!) .. yay!!

Sonali

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
    Thank to Sonali. Yeah! It is, isn't it.
Comment from rod007
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An intriguing format. I take it x represents 'kiss' not "sex" Or is it both? The word 'desire' has six letters not 5. Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
    Thank you rod. I'll leave it up to the reader's interpretation.
Comment from Finglas
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I like this piece. Talk about economy of words. I am unfamiliar with this format but plan to give it a shot. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
    Thank you Finglas.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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I love the use of this format. Perfect image. This, of course, flowed well. My only thought is why the "X" as the last word. Does that mean kiss or something else? I think that word is key to the entire poem. Great job, very creative.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
    Thank you Michael. Yes it means kiss.
Comment from Joan E.
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I am amazed you were able to pull off the letter count experiment and the striking shape, while creating another miniature Word Sonnet. I always knew there was a use for "x" in a poem--you are so clever! Many cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
    Thank you Joan. I appreciate your accolades.
Comment from L. Sherman
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Simple, but frankly, powerful. You really packed a message into those very limited words. The idea expressed in the poem is clear (not that there's much room for subtly in this form). Also, I liked how minimalist the whole thing looked. Less truly is more and this is a fine example of it.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
    Thank you very much Lisa. Definitely minimalist. Calling the form a Sonnet is a bit pretentious though.
Comment from Pyrrho
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Still toying about with this and doing interesting things with it. If you keep it up, try inserting poetic attributes into your experiments, enjambment, rhyme, alliteration, etc.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
    Thank you Pyrrho. Enjambment might be tough. But simile or metaphor will work. Certainly alliteration, will. Oh yeah, mono-rhyme.
Comment from patcelaw
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This is an interesting format. I had not seen it before, but I do like it. Thanks for the notes, it explains well what you have done here, Patricia

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
    Thank you Patricia.