Eleanor Rigby
Short Story42 total reviews
Comment from Travis64
I really enjoyed reading this! It was full of anger and sadness and quite possibly, more emotions in between! Anyway, the point is, this was a short story but I liked the way it reaches out to the reader and pulls them in and reminds them we all have been there at some point in our life. You made good use of the song and summed it up well in your short story! Well done! I believe it truly deserves six stars!
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I really enjoyed reading this! It was full of anger and sadness and quite possibly, more emotions in between! Anyway, the point is, this was a short story but I liked the way it reaches out to the reader and pulls them in and reminds them we all have been there at some point in our life. You made good use of the song and summed it up well in your short story! Well done! I believe it truly deserves six stars!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Michaelcahill,
It's a nice piece of Commentary and Philosophy Fan Fiction meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its theme.
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth flow with lively imagery.
Good Luck!
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Hello Michaelcahill,
It's a nice piece of Commentary and Philosophy Fan Fiction meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its theme.
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth flow with lively imagery.
Good Luck!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from Bill Schott
Your story is a different stab at the images developed from the Beatles' song. The sympathy aspect is derailed a bit by the alcoholic inference. We are left with a sad story of a disconnected son and a lost soul with no mourners. Good choice to write on.
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Your story is a different stab at the images developed from the Beatles' song. The sympathy aspect is derailed a bit by the alcoholic inference. We are left with a sad story of a disconnected son and a lost soul with no mourners. Good choice to write on.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from madhatter1977
Hi, Mikey, this was an excellent entry for the competition which got my vote. Well done and good luck in the contest - it is doing well I see! It's a great reference to Eleanor Rigby and I noticed a lyric in the story and I also like the fact that you include the Beatles' lyrics too. Best wishes, my friend, Pete :)
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Hi, Mikey, this was an excellent entry for the competition which got my vote. Well done and good luck in the contest - it is doing well I see! It's a great reference to Eleanor Rigby and I noticed a lyric in the story and I also like the fact that you include the Beatles' lyrics too. Best wishes, my friend, Pete :)
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from chasennov
"Eleanor Rigby" I guess there are lonely people all over the world and they are lonely for their own reasons, one way or the other. Why do people get lonely? Perhaps because they've been left behind. Well done.
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"Eleanor Rigby" I guess there are lonely people all over the world and they are lonely for their own reasons, one way or the other. Why do people get lonely? Perhaps because they've been left behind. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
VERY well done, Michael. Good choice. I never liked the song much, but you did a great job with the poem, I might even listen to it again. :)
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VERY well done, Michael. Good choice. I never liked the song much, but you did a great job with the poem, I might even listen to it again. :)
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mikey, this is a sad poem based on the song, but then, wasn't the song also sad, with all its lonely people? I think you have adhered to the song very well with your story with it's twist in the end, good luck in the contest my friend.
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Hi Mikey, this is a sad poem based on the song, but then, wasn't the song also sad, with all its lonely people? I think you have adhered to the song very well with your story with it's twist in the end, good luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a strong and evocative piece about grief, acceptance, and rejection of a departed person who harmed you in life. Your poem captured the loneliness of the Beatles song. Your character displays inner turmoil and speaks directly from the heart. Thank you for sharing.
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This is a strong and evocative piece about grief, acceptance, and rejection of a departed person who harmed you in life. Your poem captured the loneliness of the Beatles song. Your character displays inner turmoil and speaks directly from the heart. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from thee-name
Excellent story. Seen no mistakes. Keep on writing.
I doubt there's any warmth coming off this candle, Mom. The chill from my heart is surely making for a cold flame.
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Excellent story. Seen no mistakes. Keep on writing.
I doubt there's any warmth coming off this candle, Mom. The chill from my heart is surely making for a cold flame.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from JJ Rowe
Beautiful Mikey! This is written so well and I didn't expect the twist at the end. Great build up. You are great at pulling the reader in emotionally. Good luck in the contest! I really liked this.
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Beautiful Mikey! This is written so well and I didn't expect the twist at the end. Great build up. You are great at pulling the reader in emotionally. Good luck in the contest! I really liked this.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
