What's To Find Within
Children's Story In a Poem22 total reviews
Comment from Susanjohn
AHHHHHH another little gem Michael!!!! love this too!!...fairy, witches, cute little girl...and in the end,,,cindy has the power within!! nice one!!!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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AHHHHHH another little gem Michael!!!! love this too!!...fairy, witches, cute little girl...and in the end,,,cindy has the power within!! nice one!!!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Gee, Susan
I don't know where you're finding these. I've forgotten writing them. What fun for me to see them and remember. Yes, this was me seeing if I could write a little fairy tale kind of thing. Glad you liked it. Maybe I'll try another. Thanks. mikey
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Try Mikey, I work with kids...they love this kinda thing...you know...little bit of scary, trouble,but in the end..it all works out!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Cute and quite a piece to end with such a wonderful conclusion.
Nice children's piece and a nice entry to the contest.
Rules followed and I wish I could write as you do and have it flow like the master. Very nice
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Cute and quite a piece to end with such a wonderful conclusion.
Nice children's piece and a nice entry to the contest.
Rules followed and I wish I could write as you do and have it flow like the master. Very nice
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
Comment from Sankey
Well done my good friend. Most enjoyable read. I seem to remember I have already mentioned about Tootsie55 writing on our trips in Australia especially the current chapters of our trip right across the country. Check out Chapters 20, 21, 22,23 and 24. So far only 20 and 21 up..22 and 23 hopefully today.
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Well done my good friend. Most enjoyable read. I seem to remember I have already mentioned about Tootsie55 writing on our trips in Australia especially the current chapters of our trip right across the country. Check out Chapters 20, 21, 22,23 and 24. So far only 20 and 21 up..22 and 23 hopefully today.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
Comment from Dawny53
Some wonderful fantasy here.. and a wonderful message for children as well.. good always winning over evil! It's a fantastic story.. you're on your way to a book..
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Some wonderful fantasy here.. and a wonderful message for children as well.. good always winning over evil! It's a fantastic story.. you're on your way to a book..
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from Tootsie55
Good fantasy poem, mate. Have not seen you around much. Don't forget we are getting Louise's trip stories up now. Two went up yesterday two will go up today and the last one tomorrow.. Ch 20 21 22 #23 &24 tomorrow on Tootsie55. Cya
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Good fantasy poem, mate. Have not seen you around much. Don't forget we are getting Louise's trip stories up now. Two went up yesterday two will go up today and the last one tomorrow.. Ch 20 21 22 #23 &24 tomorrow on Tootsie55. Cya
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from krys123
Mikey;
+ nearing notable alliteration's:/"sounding screams"/"Sonata Sprite"/"she screamed"/
+ Rhyming was done well with a different formattable structure however each of the rhyming words Were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making it neither forced nor labored and helpful in the rhythmic flow*.
+ Rhythmic flow had its moments throughout the poem but struggled in some areas but the times that there were a good flow the rhythms tempo, cadence, movement and timing all helpful in making the reading fluid, clear and easy.
+ Poetic assessment: as for a children's poem goes the reading is at a level much higher than for a child unless read and explained by an adult. This is my only sub professional understanding. The writing itself is done magically well and expresses and describes the many different variant stages of the poem that were excitingly expressive and fun to read.
+ Enjambment was used in this poem which is determined as the running on of a thought and idea or concept from one line of verse to the next without a syntactical break.
+ The luck in the contest Mikey and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
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Mikey;
+ nearing notable alliteration's:/"sounding screams"/"Sonata Sprite"/"she screamed"/
+ Rhyming was done well with a different formattable structure however each of the rhyming words Were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making it neither forced nor labored and helpful in the rhythmic flow*.
+ Rhythmic flow had its moments throughout the poem but struggled in some areas but the times that there were a good flow the rhythms tempo, cadence, movement and timing all helpful in making the reading fluid, clear and easy.
+ Poetic assessment: as for a children's poem goes the reading is at a level much higher than for a child unless read and explained by an adult. This is my only sub professional understanding. The writing itself is done magically well and expresses and describes the many different variant stages of the poem that were excitingly expressive and fun to read.
+ Enjambment was used in this poem which is determined as the running on of a thought and idea or concept from one line of verse to the next without a syntactical break.
+ The luck in the contest Mikey and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from Nosha17
Creatively written story within a poem about the preponderance of good over evil, and how it succeeded in defeating the witch. Good message for children, to see the power of good. Excellent rhyming and story line. Good luck in the contest. Faye
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Creatively written story within a poem about the preponderance of good over evil, and how it succeeded in defeating the witch. Good message for children, to see the power of good. Excellent rhyming and story line. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from pattipac
You have penned a winner here, my friend. Every little girl reads stories about a good fairy that comes to the rescue just in the nick-of=time. In this case, a fairy named Sonata empowers Splendid Cindy, by garnering up the goodness that resides within her to defeat the dastardly witch.
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You have penned a winner here, my friend. Every little girl reads stories about a good fairy that comes to the rescue just in the nick-of=time. In this case, a fairy named Sonata empowers Splendid Cindy, by garnering up the goodness that resides within her to defeat the dastardly witch.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
Wow. What a great poem. This was filed with poetic devices too numerous to mention. I read this to the neighbor's kids who squeled with delight. Awesome work.
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Wow. What a great poem. This was filed with poetic devices too numerous to mention. I read this to the neighbor's kids who squeled with delight. Awesome work.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the poem. I love the moral. It is so true. Goodness lays in every child. They can use this to fight evil. Great work.
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I love the poem. I love the moral. It is so true. Goodness lays in every child. They can use this to fight evil. Great work.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
