To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Gathered Ghosts"Free Verse Poetry
25 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
I like your take on ghosts, a past that you own that does not haunt you at all. I don't think haunting alone means that you will languish in solitude, but that you have no regrets and won't be joining in a chorus of moans. good luck in the contest.
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I like your take on ghosts, a past that you own that does not haunt you at all. I don't think haunting alone means that you will languish in solitude, but that you have no regrets and won't be joining in a chorus of moans. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
Comment from LoannaLois
This complex and complicated poem is filled with technical merit and writing that inspires and excites. I also loved the placement of your illustrations...loved this!
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This complex and complicated poem is filled with technical merit and writing that inspires and excites. I also loved the placement of your illustrations...loved this!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good entry, Mikey. I love this line about your dad: you're no more now than yesterday. Powerful! And the ending is good too, alone in life, alone in death as a ghost.
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Very good entry, Mikey. I love this line about your dad: you're no more now than yesterday. Powerful! And the ending is good too, alone in life, alone in death as a ghost.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
Comment from Tootsie55
Geoff just coming through. Oh how apt is this poem mate. Seeing I know a lot of your history from your stories.
Once again we have had so much in common. Except I was luck to have a loving caring mother who busted her gut to care for us when our Dad didn't give a stuff. Bravo mate and I wish you well in the comp. Someone said I should be entering some of the competitions but I have not told him I just don't have the time. No spags shock horror (plenty of that hehe)
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Geoff just coming through. Oh how apt is this poem mate. Seeing I know a lot of your history from your stories.
Once again we have had so much in common. Except I was luck to have a loving caring mother who busted her gut to care for us when our Dad didn't give a stuff. Bravo mate and I wish you well in the comp. Someone said I should be entering some of the competitions but I have not told him I just don't have the time. No spags shock horror (plenty of that hehe)
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Great free verse.
Nicely stated and described.
all the ones gone before and what yo will be when gone.
I love the way it flows from part to part.
Tis good.
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Great free verse.
Nicely stated and described.
all the ones gone before and what yo will be when gone.
I love the way it flows from part to part.
Tis good.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Deborah Marie
Awesome. How did you write this and add all the pictures? I'd like to try to do that too. Cleverly written this way. Clever use of descriptive wording for impressive imagery seen throughout. Light and airy (eerie/ghostly) sense to progression, rhythm and flow making it an extremely enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest, Deb
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Awesome. How did you write this and add all the pictures? I'd like to try to do that too. Cleverly written this way. Clever use of descriptive wording for impressive imagery seen throughout. Light and airy (eerie/ghostly) sense to progression, rhythm and flow making it an extremely enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest, Deb
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from GregoryCody
Hi there! Been a while! I've missed you man. One of my absolute favorites. I had to read your work while I finally had a chance to jump on here. I've been busy of course. I hope to have more time to get on. Miss you man.
What an eerie ending. FANTASTIC choices of words. You pull the reader into self reflection, in the sense of raw emotions. Great piece. Well earned six
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Hi there! Been a while! I've missed you man. One of my absolute favorites. I had to read your work while I finally had a chance to jump on here. I've been busy of course. I hope to have more time to get on. Miss you man.
What an eerie ending. FANTASTIC choices of words. You pull the reader into self reflection, in the sense of raw emotions. Great piece. Well earned six
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Zinnia48
This is quite powerful, Michael. It's an interesting and creative approach to ghosts. My understanding is that you are using ghosts as an autobiographical tool. My favorite line is in the first stanza: I have visions that I see: Just me. thank you. Caroline
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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This is quite powerful, Michael. It's an interesting and creative approach to ghosts. My understanding is that you are using ghosts as an autobiographical tool. My favorite line is in the first stanza: I have visions that I see: Just me. thank you. Caroline
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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Hi Caroline. I'm buried in the real world at the moment. I take care of people and I'm at the emergency room and back and forth with them so I have little time for responses etc. But, I wanted to say hello and thank you so much for your wonderful reviews and support. I TRULY need some smiles at the moment. You are so appreciated. I'll try to catch up when things settle back down. mikey
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Take care of yourself, Mikey! Caroline
Comment from seaglass
A great entry for the contest. Your ghostly poem has shadows of your own experience. So many people I've known in life are now no more and they're memories are like ghosts in my dreams. Graphics are great and effectively positioned throughout the piece.
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A great entry for the contest. Your ghostly poem has shadows of your own experience. So many people I've known in life are now no more and they're memories are like ghosts in my dreams. Graphics are great and effectively positioned throughout the piece.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from alf collier
Hi Mikey. Loved this. What clever ways to highlight the ghosts from the past. Most especially, I like . . . when I'm gone I'll be the ghost who walks alone. I had a distinct image of your ghostly figure sending chuckles all through the night!!! Thanks for this one, alf
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Hi Mikey. Loved this. What clever ways to highlight the ghosts from the past. Most especially, I like . . . when I'm gone I'll be the ghost who walks alone. I had a distinct image of your ghostly figure sending chuckles all through the night!!! Thanks for this one, alf
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
