Suffering By The Numbers
free verse11 total reviews
Comment from Dawny53
Very well done.. wish I had a six left for you! You presented this well, the format was effective in getting your message across..I especially like windows roll up and our breath fogs the glass.. which irritates us..doesn't it, we were straining our necks to have a good look only to see we have fogged up the windows.. I like what you've done here..it sickens me that as human beings we often scoff at the suffering of others.. it is a horrible trait..
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Very well done.. wish I had a six left for you! You presented this well, the format was effective in getting your message across..I especially like windows roll up and our breath fogs the glass.. which irritates us..doesn't it, we were straining our necks to have a good look only to see we have fogged up the windows.. I like what you've done here..it sickens me that as human beings we often scoff at the suffering of others.. it is a horrible trait..
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
Comment from Sis Cat
I voted for your free-style poem: human suffering because of your global perspective and the free style nature of your poem itself. "how safe our hearts when we view from afar" is a line that riveted my attention due to its honesty. "Suffer alone / heal together" is another line that evokes the message of your poem. This is exceptional, creative work. I hope you win.
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I voted for your free-style poem: human suffering because of your global perspective and the free style nature of your poem itself. "how safe our hearts when we view from afar" is a line that riveted my attention due to its honesty. "Suffer alone / heal together" is another line that evokes the message of your poem. This is exceptional, creative work. I hope you win.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
Comment from artemis53
This seems to be a wake-up call for the non-participators, the ones that are glad that it wasn't them, those who are in denial and the ones who through it all don't really give a damn.
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This seems to be a wake-up call for the non-participators, the ones that are glad that it wasn't them, those who are in denial and the ones who through it all don't really give a damn.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
A well thought out free verse that gets to the heart of the matter. The last line, one, sums it up perfectly. One hand to another is the true way o easing suferring. Has my vote.
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A well thought out free verse that gets to the heart of the matter. The last line, one, sums it up perfectly. One hand to another is the true way o easing suferring. Has my vote.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
Comment from pennedup
you have an excellent point here..it is so much easier when we think of things in big numbers including destruction, massive hunger etc..but when you put a face (one single face) or are forced to touch the victim on a personal level, it is then personal and much harder to deal with. We have been desensitized by the media..so much happening and the sense that nothing we can do prevails. Very engaging write, your thought process coming clearly through, and it is done within a minimum of words, which I feel makes it stronger. Good luck in the challenge, you deserve a win.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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you have an excellent point here..it is so much easier when we think of things in big numbers including destruction, massive hunger etc..but when you put a face (one single face) or are forced to touch the victim on a personal level, it is then personal and much harder to deal with. We have been desensitized by the media..so much happening and the sense that nothing we can do prevails. Very engaging write, your thought process coming clearly through, and it is done within a minimum of words, which I feel makes it stronger. Good luck in the challenge, you deserve a win.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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It's always wonderful for a writer to hear that someone understands completely every word of what they've written. Thank you so much. Love all the stars and well wishes as well. We'll see how the voting goes. Hanging in there. :)
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you are very welcome
Comment from TAB_that's me
You have several good points of different human suffering. The marshmellow roast gives us vivid concrete imagery. Great free verse on human suffering. Good luck.
teresa
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You have several good points of different human suffering. The marshmellow roast gives us vivid concrete imagery. Great free verse on human suffering. Good luck.
teresa
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
Comment from risktaker
Great descriptions of the scenes depicted. I love the word choice and the colors.I like the designated ares of suffering that are mentioned. I like the photo indicating a need to reach out and help others. All humans need help at some time in their life. No one is immune to suffering.It is easy to distant ourselves and pretend it is far from us, but if we look close, it can be next door. Thanks Message well expressed.
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Great descriptions of the scenes depicted. I love the word choice and the colors.I like the designated ares of suffering that are mentioned. I like the photo indicating a need to reach out and help others. All humans need help at some time in their life. No one is immune to suffering.It is easy to distant ourselves and pretend it is far from us, but if we look close, it can be next door. Thanks Message well expressed.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
Comment from kiwijenny
Interesting take on suffering...togetherness a marshmallow roast ..I like that...but when we suffer part of that is feeling all alone
Well penned...there is so much strife in this world
God bless
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Interesting take on suffering...togetherness a marshmallow roast ..I like that...but when we suffer part of that is feeling all alone
Well penned...there is so much strife in this world
God bless
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I really like this line - "a marshmallow roast of togetherness" - in this poem about human suffering. Whether singly or in groups, it is inevitable. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
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I really like this line - "a marshmallow roast of togetherness" - in this poem about human suffering. Whether singly or in groups, it is inevitable. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
Comment from pipersfancy
How right is the poet's observation, we have the tendency to distance ourselves from the pain, suffering of others. As if it's somehow less real when it's 'over there' or 'behind closed doors'. And yet... we strain our necks, rubberneckers to the nightly news reporting the newest atrocity... and feel momentary outrage... THAT we can do. Saves us from actually getting involved...
PF
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How right is the poet's observation, we have the tendency to distance ourselves from the pain, suffering of others. As if it's somehow less real when it's 'over there' or 'behind closed doors'. And yet... we strain our necks, rubberneckers to the nightly news reporting the newest atrocity... and feel momentary outrage... THAT we can do. Saves us from actually getting involved...
PF
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
