tangerine robe kneels
A riddle.66 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
This made me cry...how can men perpetrate such evil,on fellow men...and why oh why are these monsters able to recruit young girls ?
Groan...what is wrong with the world...your poem brought tears
God bless you
God bless
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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This made me cry...how can men perpetrate such evil,on fellow men...and why oh why are these monsters able to recruit young girls ?
Groan...what is wrong with the world...your poem brought tears
God bless you
God bless
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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The horror of it all. The mass beheadings. The cage burnings. The girl suicide bombers. Where will it all end? Neither my poem nor I have any answers.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from Ekim777
Our poet knows how to use his images with an uncanny sense. A drama unfolds and in light of this, the final words are a bit of a come-down. Your images, beautiful as they are, might just be a bit obscure. Just a thought! -Ekim777
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Our poet knows how to use his images with an uncanny sense. A drama unfolds and in light of this, the final words are a bit of a come-down. Your images, beautiful as they are, might just be a bit obscure. Just a thought! -Ekim777
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you for your review. Other reviewers remarked they found my poem obscure until they read the author notes.
Comment from honeytree
Excellent art work for these words written
How cruel human beings can be killing other
human beings like this.
Why?
honeytree
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Excellent art work for these words written
How cruel human beings can be killing other
human beings like this.
Why?
honeytree
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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I do not know why, honey tree. My poem and the actions of these individuals are riddles. Thank you for your review.
Comment from krys123
Sis Cat; Very powerful, poignant and compelling 5/7/5 syllabic format that uses some great imagination to be very inventive and ingeniously creative. The resourcefulness of your writing is sadly clever. The imagery is very demonstratively descriptive as well as exquisitely expressive in a very exquisite type of way. Thank you for your authors notes it was helpful in understanding your writing even though your writing is quite self-sufficient to understand. Near and notable alliteration in
"shadows across sand". Thank you for sharing and posting and may the Lord be with you.
Alex
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Sis Cat; Very powerful, poignant and compelling 5/7/5 syllabic format that uses some great imagination to be very inventive and ingeniously creative. The resourcefulness of your writing is sadly clever. The imagery is very demonstratively descriptive as well as exquisitely expressive in a very exquisite type of way. Thank you for your authors notes it was helpful in understanding your writing even though your writing is quite self-sufficient to understand. Near and notable alliteration in
"shadows across sand". Thank you for sharing and posting and may the Lord be with you.
Alex
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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May the Lord be with us all. Thank you, Alex. I am humbled that I wrote a 5/7/5 that touched so many people. Thank you for your review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Your haiku does indeed say much in few words and I agree with the comment about removing the person from the scene.
Your last line reflects the horror that is felt across the globe as we contemplate such horrific acts.
Steve
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Your haiku does indeed say much in few words and I agree with the comment about removing the person from the scene.
Your last line reflects the horror that is felt across the globe as we contemplate such horrific acts.
Steve
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Steve, for your kind review. This horror stretched across the globe.
Comment from MSJVClarke
Excellent poem and a strong statement indeed. I appreciate the notes, it always helps to clarify the interpretation. You wrote a heartfelt piece and in doing so honored the victims. Your title was intriguing.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Excellent poem and a strong statement indeed. I appreciate the notes, it always helps to clarify the interpretation. You wrote a heartfelt piece and in doing so honored the victims. Your title was intriguing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you for your review. I am humbled that my notes helped.
Comment from leigholiver
good piece of writing, had me interested from start to finish, which in its self is a unique trait to have. well done. good use of words
keep up the good work
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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good piece of writing, had me interested from start to finish, which in its self is a unique trait to have. well done. good use of words
keep up the good work
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you, leigholiver, for your kind review. I am humbled that my poem engaged you.
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Thank you, leigholiver, for your kind review. I am humbled that my poem engaged you.
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Thank you, leigholiver, for your kind review. I am humbled that my poem engaged you.
Comment from fdgsr
The image is well created in haiku form. Thanks for this reminder of the human propensity to be beastly and for the reflection that our beastly nature can rise to poetic beauty from the ashes of the fire. Tangerine reminds me of fire and the spider reminds me of coal, fuel for fire.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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The image is well created in haiku form. Thanks for this reminder of the human propensity to be beastly and for the reflection that our beastly nature can rise to poetic beauty from the ashes of the fire. Tangerine reminds me of fire and the spider reminds me of coal, fuel for fire.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. I do not know when humanity's propensity to be beastly will stop. I am shocked that such a beautiful poem can capture the horror.
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Thank you for your kind review. I do not know when humanity's propensity to be beastly will stop. I am shocked that such a beautiful poem can capture the horror.
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Thank you for your kind review. I do not know when humanity's propensity to be beastly will stop. I am shocked that such a beautiful poem can capture the horror.
Comment from ravenblack
Chills living rooms- the perfect closure. I would suggest dropping the "and" and making the line " chilling living rooms", but as a whole, the haiku is quite powerful. I know by orange robes you mean the hostages that those evil bastards are beheading, but I also could not help but think of saffron bhuddist robes, the killing of peace. Which is a good thing for the poem.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Chills living rooms- the perfect closure. I would suggest dropping the "and" and making the line " chilling living rooms", but as a whole, the haiku is quite powerful. I know by orange robes you mean the hostages that those evil bastards are beheading, but I also could not help but think of saffron bhuddist robes, the killing of peace. Which is a good thing for the poem.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you, ravenblack, for your kind review. I agonized about how to describe the garments the executed wore. In some of the earlier videos they wore the traditional Middle Eastern prison garment, an orange robe. I debated calling it saffron robe but did not want to confuse people with Buddhists. I debated using orange jumpsuit, but that was too Western. Just as my poem posted I saw on the news the twenty-one Coptic Christians in orange jumpsuits paraded onto the beach before their mass beheading. This was like seeing my poem modernized and come to life. Thanks for the review.
Comment from flamingstar
Yes, every report makes my blood run cold. I like how you drag the reader from the sands of the Middle East right into their own living room. I say "drag" because it's an event none of us wants to think about, much less witness...
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Yes, every report makes my blood run cold. I like how you drag the reader from the sands of the Middle East right into their own living room. I say "drag" because it's an event none of us wants to think about, much less witness...
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you, flamingstar, for your kind review. I am glad we do not show the entire execution on TV in America, and we should not. No one wants to think about it nor witness it, but it is happening over there.
