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Comment from trimple
Hi, Tom
A very powerful slap in the face. We humans are a fickle lot.
I am sorry to read that your family are experiencing this awful situation.
A great reminder to all. Make a will!
The repetitive lines certainly re-enforce the angst between them all.
Pleasure to read
kind regards
tracey
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Hi, Tom
A very powerful slap in the face. We humans are a fickle lot.
I am sorry to read that your family are experiencing this awful situation.
A great reminder to all. Make a will!
The repetitive lines certainly re-enforce the angst between them all.
Pleasure to read
kind regards
tracey
Comment Written 15-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Thank you Tracey.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Oh, this is sad and unfortunate but definitely commonplace these days.
It makes it seem as though a life well lived means nothing.
In fact, in some cases the children are fighting over these things before their loved one has even passed.
I related to the subject poem, and the rhyme and format has worked well.
Thoughtful, and thought provoking.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Oh, this is sad and unfortunate but definitely commonplace these days.
It makes it seem as though a life well lived means nothing.
In fact, in some cases the children are fighting over these things before their loved one has even passed.
I related to the subject poem, and the rhyme and format has worked well.
Thoughtful, and thought provoking.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Thank you Shirley.
Comment from risktaker
I agree, when people die, some people go crazy. Greed, competition, self righteousness rears its head. Hard feelings,resentment, and anger appears and grows. I like the rhyme, word choice, and the structure. Message clear and relevant.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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I agree, when people die, some people go crazy. Greed, competition, self righteousness rears its head. Hard feelings,resentment, and anger appears and grows. I like the rhyme, word choice, and the structure. Message clear and relevant.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thank your risktaker. A sad but true fact.
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I have lived this. Thanks
Comment from Capricorn30
Kind of sad that when a loved one has passed away, petty squabbles begin;
Hopefully these issues will soon resolve themselves, as death is difficult enough without having to deal with disputes;
A poignant writing.
My condolences on the passing of your mother-in-law, Tom.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Kind of sad that when a loved one has passed away, petty squabbles begin;
Hopefully these issues will soon resolve themselves, as death is difficult enough without having to deal with disputes;
A poignant writing.
My condolences on the passing of your mother-in-law, Tom.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thank you Nargaret. I appreciate your thoughts
Comment from Joan E.
I am sorry you're dealing with family squabbles in the aftermath of losing a loved one. I admired your rhymes and the repeats to reinforce the message. : ( -Joan
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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I am sorry you're dealing with family squabbles in the aftermath of losing a loved one. I admired your rhymes and the repeats to reinforce the message. : ( -Joan
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you Joan. Not so much me as my wife dealing with her siblings.
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Yes, but you sadly have to witness the pettiness. Hopefully, this too shall pass... -Joan
Comment from ravenblack
My mom's family went through this in spades after both parents had passed. Ten children an a sizable estate - my mom washed her hands of it and let her siblings squabble.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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My mom's family went through this in spades after both parents had passed. Ten children an a sizable estate - my mom washed her hands of it and let her siblings squabble.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you ravenblack. It is amazing how siblings can squabble.
Comment from rod007
This poem is well written setting out the nonsense that goes on in getting the property of the dead and departed. It should not happen as it destroys the memory and grace of her life and blackens her death. When my parents died, I didn't care one iota about these materials 'things.' Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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This poem is well written setting out the nonsense that goes on in getting the property of the dead and departed. It should not happen as it destroys the memory and grace of her life and blackens her death. When my parents died, I didn't care one iota about these materials 'things.' Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you rod, you are right.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It is so sad when that happens, Tom. I guess I was lucky with my siblings, we sat down and talked it all through. My parents didn't write a will, they had nothing to leave apart from lots of very personal things. I have heard some horrific stories though, which ends up with the family splitting up, when they should be coming together more. You have written this really well. Perhaps you could leave a couple of copies 'floating' around for all involved to see? xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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It is so sad when that happens, Tom. I guess I was lucky with my siblings, we sat down and talked it all through. My parents didn't write a will, they had nothing to leave apart from lots of very personal things. I have heard some horrific stories though, which ends up with the family splitting up, when they should be coming together more. You have written this really well. Perhaps you could leave a couple of copies 'floating' around for all involved to see? xsx Sandra
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you Sandra. That's a good idea.
Comment from adewpearl
effective use of listing and of questioning
who gets the cloths? - clothes
good use of abcb rhyming in your quatrains
effective refrain line
you capture perfectly a situation I've seen played out more than once, such a sad low in human behavior
Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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effective use of listing and of questioning
who gets the cloths? - clothes
good use of abcb rhyming in your quatrains
effective refrain line
you capture perfectly a situation I've seen played out more than once, such a sad low in human behavior
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Thank you Brooke, fixes it. Yes, i have seen it too often too.
Comment from emrpoems
good use of abcb rhymes
Good enjambment allowing smooth flow of words
Good effective repeated line--Hard Feelings
Sad poem about the peril of divorce
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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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good use of abcb rhymes
Good enjambment allowing smooth flow of words
Good effective repeated line--Hard Feelings
Sad poem about the peril of divorce
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Comment Written 11-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Thank you Erica. Not divorce, although that can be similar, but death of a parent and actions of the siblings.
