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Comment from ravenblack
Sunshine shadows on the snow, the stark black and white is one of winter's treats and it is good of you to remind us. Just too many times walking the dog on the frozen walks, my reservations slip to aches on the rude awakening of pavement. King Boreas- can I sue him? Seriously though, venturing out, the fact that it is an effort, deepens the beauty.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Sunshine shadows on the snow, the stark black and white is one of winter's treats and it is good of you to remind us. Just too many times walking the dog on the frozen walks, my reservations slip to aches on the rude awakening of pavement. King Boreas- can I sue him? Seriously though, venturing out, the fact that it is an effort, deepens the beauty.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Thank you ravenblack. You can certainly try. I dont know his address though.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I am impressed but it seems quite difficult to me.
You have done a great job using this style to put your ideas forth.
The image is perfect.
Your explanation of the style is quite helpful.:-) S
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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I am impressed but it seems quite difficult to me.
You have done a great job using this style to put your ideas forth.
The image is perfect.
Your explanation of the style is quite helpful.:-) S
Comment Written 05-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Thank you Shirley.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing Minnesota's "sunshine shadows on the snow" this time of the year, in this wonderfully lyrical poem. I enjoyed your rhymes, repeats and use of alliteration. Your photograph reinforced the imagery perfectly. Enjoy winter- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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Thank you for sharing Minnesota's "sunshine shadows on the snow" this time of the year, in this wonderfully lyrical poem. I enjoyed your rhymes, repeats and use of alliteration. Your photograph reinforced the imagery perfectly. Enjoy winter- Joan
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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Thank you Joan, I will.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love the first flush of snow, before it has been walked over and with the sun on it. This is a lovely photo, Tom and your poem is lovely too. What inspiration the different seasons and climates give us to work with. A lovely combination again, my friend. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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I love the first flush of snow, before it has been walked over and with the sun on it. This is a lovely photo, Tom and your poem is lovely too. What inspiration the different seasons and climates give us to work with. A lovely combination again, my friend. xsx sandra
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, it is nice to have 4 seasons.
Comment from adewpearl
lovely photo
solid rhymes
good use of enjambment
good use of alliteration from the start
good assonance and internal rhyme
vivid detail of setting and creative use of personification
a thoughtful look at winter in its more positive aspects
Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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lovely photo
solid rhymes
good use of enjambment
good use of alliteration from the start
good assonance and internal rhyme
vivid detail of setting and creative use of personification
a thoughtful look at winter in its more positive aspects
Brooke
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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Thank you Brooke. Gotta be positive! :-)
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good poem and I like the picture. I find winter and snow is great when one has a hot chocolate and a roaring fire lol. Your poem was very well written and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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This is a good poem and I like the picture. I find winter and snow is great when one has a hot chocolate and a roaring fire lol. Your poem was very well written and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thank you dmt.
Comment from Dawny53
First off, I want to thank you for your informative authors notes, and for teaching me something! I really appreciate your poem, because I love the snow. You capture some real beauty with your words, and I'm glad I stopped to spend some time with your poem.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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First off, I want to thank you for your informative authors notes, and for teaching me something! I really appreciate your poem, because I love the snow. You capture some real beauty with your words, and I'm glad I stopped to spend some time with your poem.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thank you Dawny. Im glad you stopped by too.
Comment from mshirachot
Wow! I could almost love winter with the images you portray in the Canzone. I have to admit - I am not familiar with the style, but I plan to make myself familiar with it now. You really shine as a port in this one!
Funny thing - when I first read Canzone I had to do a double take because I thought you write Calzone. It was right before lunch, too! Made me hungry.
The last line is STELLAR! Great summary or concluding line which perfectly illustrated the photo.
Only one little thing I found which did not follow your detailed notes (thank you so much for those!) was this:
along the frozen fields and streets, This is actually eight syllables - it could be easily changed, reworded to follow the established pattern.
Great use of alliteration throughout. Nice rhyming scheme. I was hesitant about my rating - since I had pointed out the little error, but I found this poem so inviting I think it six star worthy and I know you will be diligent to fix the little blip.
Blessings!
Marsha
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Wow! I could almost love winter with the images you portray in the Canzone. I have to admit - I am not familiar with the style, but I plan to make myself familiar with it now. You really shine as a port in this one!
Funny thing - when I first read Canzone I had to do a double take because I thought you write Calzone. It was right before lunch, too! Made me hungry.
The last line is STELLAR! Great summary or concluding line which perfectly illustrated the photo.
Only one little thing I found which did not follow your detailed notes (thank you so much for those!) was this:
along the frozen fields and streets, This is actually eight syllables - it could be easily changed, reworded to follow the established pattern.
Great use of alliteration throughout. Nice rhyming scheme. I was hesitant about my rating - since I had pointed out the little error, but I found this poem so inviting I think it six star worthy and I know you will be diligent to fix the little blip.
Blessings!
Marsha
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much Marsha. Yes, I will fix it. I appreciate you pointing that out.
Comment from emrpoems
Just posted a poem on Winter also.
Love the sentiments espoused in this poem
Good use of abab rhymes
Good use of alliteration
A heartfelt poem about the good side of winter
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Just posted a poem on Winter also.
Love the sentiments espoused in this poem
Good use of abab rhymes
Good use of alliteration
A heartfelt poem about the good side of winter
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thank you Erica. I'll get to yours soon.
Comment from rod007
A very well thought out poem with perfect rhyming and alliteration. I especially liked these lines as to me the wonder of it is a show:
"sunshine shadows on the snow.
To miss this is a lost opportunity
to view an artistic show."
Well done, Tom.
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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A very well thought out poem with perfect rhyming and alliteration. I especially liked these lines as to me the wonder of it is a show:
"sunshine shadows on the snow.
To miss this is a lost opportunity
to view an artistic show."
Well done, Tom.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thank you rod. That was a good lead-in line.
