Requiescat For A Robin
Three rhyming quatrains in iambic tetrameter16 total reviews
Comment from Zinnia48
This poem is so finely crafted! Perfect rhythm and perfect rhyme. The visuals were vivid, and I knelt with you to say a prayer at the end. Thanks! Caroline
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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This poem is so finely crafted! Perfect rhythm and perfect rhyme. The visuals were vivid, and I knelt with you to say a prayer at the end. Thanks! Caroline
Comment Written 03-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Bless you and thanks for your sweet comments, Zinnia. Peter
Comment from kiwijenny
Aw poor wee bird...poor wee red breasted robin now blood pooling around him
Sad and sweet that you would do such a grand thing for such a little bird
Well done
God bless...good requiescat
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Aw poor wee bird...poor wee red breasted robin now blood pooling around him
Sad and sweet that you would do such a grand thing for such a little bird
Well done
God bless...good requiescat
Comment Written 03-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you and God bless, Jenny. Peter
Comment from RodG
You have narrated a poignant tale that any nature lover can relate to. There is something more tragic about a bird's death than a human's, perhaps because it died alone.
Your AABB quatrains are flawless in rhyme and meter.
Myf favorite verse: sought that redbreast to draw nigh. Don't we all crave that bond with nature that often is not forthcoming?
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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You have narrated a poignant tale that any nature lover can relate to. There is something more tragic about a bird's death than a human's, perhaps because it died alone.
Your AABB quatrains are flawless in rhyme and meter.
Myf favorite verse: sought that redbreast to draw nigh. Don't we all crave that bond with nature that often is not forthcoming?
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thank you. Peter
Comment from Jacob Collins
I dark yet emotional poem. A clear representation of the fact that sometimes things can seem perfectly fine but then suddenly take a turn for the worse. An excellent piece of poetry. Well done!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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I dark yet emotional poem. A clear representation of the fact that sometimes things can seem perfectly fine but then suddenly take a turn for the worse. An excellent piece of poetry. Well done!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thank you. Peter
Comment from Glasstruth
Its so sad to see any animal, or bird that's dead. I always wondered about their lives and what really took them down. Life is that way, you live and then you die. That is the cycle of living. Nice rhyming. Thanks for sharing. Les
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Its so sad to see any animal, or bird that's dead. I always wondered about their lives and what really took them down. Life is that way, you live and then you die. That is the cycle of living. Nice rhyming. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thank you. Peter
Comment from GracieAnn
Peter, it is good to hear from you again. I thought this poem was creative in its message delivered in a sound rhyming scheme and meter. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Peter, it is good to hear from you again. I thought this poem was creative in its message delivered in a sound rhyming scheme and meter. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 19-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you, GracieAnn. I'm sorry for my late reply. Peter
Comment from country ranch writer
poor little bird didn't have a chance with this not going right in his life some kitty must have done him in poor little thing
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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poor little bird didn't have a chance with this not going right in his life some kitty must have done him in poor little thing
Comment Written 19-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you for your kind words. Sorry I'm late in replying. Peter
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welcome
Comment from honeytree
Wonderful words written here.
A robin or any other birds
have blood to shed we are all
in the same boat, we all die one day.
honeytree
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Wonderful words written here.
A robin or any other birds
have blood to shed we are all
in the same boat, we all die one day.
honeytree
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Sorry for overdue reply again, but thank you Annie. Peter
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Liked what you wrote Peter
Annie
Comment from NadineM
Peter@Poole... look at you... welcome back!
Such a sad poem about the sudden loss of something that gave you joy. The song was joyful that he sang and without warning, you find him dead in the snow the next visit to where he first met your gaze.
This is quite like life... unexplainable sometimes. Reminds me of the many deaths in our family the past few weeks. Sudden, unexplainable losses that one cannot understand but must still accept as part of life... and so we pray for those lost, as you did the wee bird. The meaning of this poem could vary. Could be reflective on all life, no matter how small... still so significant and worthy of thanks to God.
Good rhyming throughout and a thought-provoking message. Thanks for sharing!
Looking forward to hearing the latest in Peter's life and reading more of his poems. Happy New Year! Bonne Heureuse Annee!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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Peter@Poole... look at you... welcome back!
Such a sad poem about the sudden loss of something that gave you joy. The song was joyful that he sang and without warning, you find him dead in the snow the next visit to where he first met your gaze.
This is quite like life... unexplainable sometimes. Reminds me of the many deaths in our family the past few weeks. Sudden, unexplainable losses that one cannot understand but must still accept as part of life... and so we pray for those lost, as you did the wee bird. The meaning of this poem could vary. Could be reflective on all life, no matter how small... still so significant and worthy of thanks to God.
Good rhyming throughout and a thought-provoking message. Thanks for sharing!
Looking forward to hearing the latest in Peter's life and reading more of his poems. Happy New Year! Bonne Heureuse Annee!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Nadine. Peter
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Looking forward to reading your poems again... ton amie, Nadine
Comment from mermaids
I am so glad you have returned. I hope you are okay. Excellent poetic form. You have a smooth flow of lines and rhyming of words. I learned a new word-requiescat-a wish or prayer for the dead. Robins are beautiful birds that deserve a prayer, I have many in the trees around my house.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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I am so glad you have returned. I hope you are okay. Excellent poetic form. You have a smooth flow of lines and rhyming of words. I learned a new word-requiescat-a wish or prayer for the dead. Robins are beautiful birds that deserve a prayer, I have many in the trees around my house.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you for your kind words. Sorry for the delay in replying. Peter
