Lost and Found
Orphan huddles in garbage - found by Santa?16 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
good first sentence. and good Christmas story.
I have a question, if you don't mind, that struck me right off the bat, though I may be missing something here. IF the mother left him in that orphanage, why did she have to look for him for years?
Also, when she says, "May I sit down, George?" I child would probably say something like, "Sure. How did you find me?"
I hope I didn't offend. These were just two things out of your story that bothered me. It is a good, heart-warming Christmas story.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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good first sentence. and good Christmas story.
I have a question, if you don't mind, that struck me right off the bat, though I may be missing something here. IF the mother left him in that orphanage, why did she have to look for him for years?
Also, when she says, "May I sit down, George?" I child would probably say something like, "Sure. How did you find me?"
I hope I didn't offend. These were just two things out of your story that bothered me. It is a good, heart-warming Christmas story.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Good heavens, I had to go back and take a look at my work. So long ago I wrote that. I think she surrendered George and later decided to look for him. No offence taken, it's good to have input into writing. Thanks so much. I have written much since that Lost and Found. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from emrpoems
Good use of dialogue that seemed natural
Good interaction between the characters
good story and well developed
held the reader's attention from beginning to end
Good luck in the conest
Happy Holidays
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Good use of dialogue that seemed natural
Good interaction between the characters
good story and well developed
held the reader's attention from beginning to end
Good luck in the conest
Happy Holidays
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing; glad you enjoyed the story. Happy Christmas from Australia! :-) Kay.
Comment from Lovinia
Hello Kay
What a fantastic read ...held my attention all the way through. Charming and delightful Christmas story and so well told. I love the interaction of George and Spud ... and their so cold, long wait. Just in the nick of time ... George is transported to warmth and safety. Great dialogue throughout ... natural flow and real. So nice to read a happy ending after the horror we've faced in Sydney this week. Definitely made me feel good. Such a lovely touch with your ending, George not only found his mother and was safe from harm, he received the perfect Christmas gift. Great work. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Also a very joyous and blessed Christmas and holiday season to you and yours. Huge Hershey hugs - Lovi xoxoxoxo Sorry I have no sixes, or you would have had one for this superb writing.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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Hello Kay
What a fantastic read ...held my attention all the way through. Charming and delightful Christmas story and so well told. I love the interaction of George and Spud ... and their so cold, long wait. Just in the nick of time ... George is transported to warmth and safety. Great dialogue throughout ... natural flow and real. So nice to read a happy ending after the horror we've faced in Sydney this week. Definitely made me feel good. Such a lovely touch with your ending, George not only found his mother and was safe from harm, he received the perfect Christmas gift. Great work. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Also a very joyous and blessed Christmas and holiday season to you and yours. Huge Hershey hugs - Lovi xoxoxoxo Sorry I have no sixes, or you would have had one for this superb writing.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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Hello my dear friend, Thanks so much for reading; enjoyed writing this story. Hope your Christmas is full of joy, loads of prawns and all sorts of goodies. Much love, Kay :-)XX
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi Kay, I sent you an e-mail, I hope you received it. I think this story is superb and wanted to give it a 6. I will update it on Sunday if I can, because this is a brilliant story and an excellent Christmas story. It is perfect for children, dreams and prayers and letters to Santa do come true, as you story tell us. And I do honestly believe in miracles! Excellent my fried, and good luck in the contest. (It brought tears to my eyes!!!) xsx sandra
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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Hi Kay, I sent you an e-mail, I hope you received it. I think this story is superb and wanted to give it a 6. I will update it on Sunday if I can, because this is a brilliant story and an excellent Christmas story. It is perfect for children, dreams and prayers and letters to Santa do come true, as you story tell us. And I do honestly believe in miracles! Excellent my fried, and good luck in the contest. (It brought tears to my eyes!!!) xsx sandra
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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Hello Sandra Seagull! Thanks so much for your kind review; moved you to tears? Then, I have done my job. I loved writing it. I had help with re-writing it, from a novelist on site, he thinks I am a talented writer err...I was so chuffed. Lots of Love, Kay :-)XX
Comment from mermaids
I like how the spirit of the dog was taking of the little boy,I like to think that my pets who have passed on are still watching over me. This is a wonderful Christmas story that makes the reader feel good. It is an excellent entry for the contest. I also liked how the man who looked like Santa worked for emergency services.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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I like how the spirit of the dog was taking of the little boy,I like to think that my pets who have passed on are still watching over me. This is a wonderful Christmas story that makes the reader feel good. It is an excellent entry for the contest. I also liked how the man who looked like Santa worked for emergency services.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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Hello my friend, Thanks so much for your kind review, so pleased that you enjoyed. Wishing you and yours a Happy Christmas and lots of joy. Love, Kay :-)XX
Comment from alf collier
Hi Aussie. I read the story, then re-read from a younger perspective. the story flows and the dialogue flows right along with it. Thank you for sharing, alf
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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Hi Aussie. I read the story, then re-read from a younger perspective. the story flows and the dialogue flows right along with it. Thank you for sharing, alf
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much Alf, glad you saw the child's perspective. Happy Christmas my friend. :-) KayXX
Comment from Selina Stambi
Oh, Kay, just what the doctor ordered after all the grim stuff both on this site and in the media.
A sweet Christmas story. Merry Christmas, dear lady.
God bless you.
Big hugs,
Sonali
George looked into (its) brown eyes... apostrophe not required
Skipping across the high grass, (she sang) a lullaby
thumbs into his thick(hyphen not required here) black belt... how about ... wide black belt?
the reindeers and then finally, (to the) fancy sleigh choc
He was happy (-) he had never met his mother (before) and
the
George (had been) exposed to the elements for a very
she waddled around the bed(,) checking monitors
(the) orphanage tracked me down and told me
and they both cried tears of joy(.) (A)t last mother and son
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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Oh, Kay, just what the doctor ordered after all the grim stuff both on this site and in the media.
A sweet Christmas story. Merry Christmas, dear lady.
God bless you.
Big hugs,
Sonali
George looked into (its) brown eyes... apostrophe not required
Skipping across the high grass, (she sang) a lullaby
thumbs into his thick(hyphen not required here) black belt... how about ... wide black belt?
the reindeers and then finally, (to the) fancy sleigh choc
He was happy (-) he had never met his mother (before) and
the
George (had been) exposed to the elements for a very
she waddled around the bed(,) checking monitors
(the) orphanage tracked me down and told me
and they both cried tears of joy(.) (A)t last mother and son
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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Sonali, I thought you had gone off the radar! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Happy Christmas, Love, Kay :-) XX
Comment from Nosha17
What a lovely story, it brought tears to my eyes. You captured the real meaning of Christmas in your story. The characters were wonderful and I like happy endings!!! Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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What a lovely story, it brought tears to my eyes. You captured the real meaning of Christmas in your story. The characters were wonderful and I like happy endings!!! Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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Hello Faye, Thanks so much for reading and I am pleased that you liked it. It is a child's story - we need more these days. Happy Christmas my friend. :-) Kay XX
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It's a very sweet story about a son and mother. I liked the idea of the ghost dog coming to take care of the child until Santa could get there to rescue him. Then the mother is found just in time. A good entry for the contest Kay! :<) Nancy
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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It's a very sweet story about a son and mother. I liked the idea of the ghost dog coming to take care of the child until Santa could get there to rescue him. Then the mother is found just in time. A good entry for the contest Kay! :<) Nancy
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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Hello Nancy, Thanks so much for reading and glad you liked it. I wrote it for children - we need to be kids sometimes. Happy Christmas my friend :-)XX Kay.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Kay, this is just a beautiful Christmas story. The fact it follows a contest guideline doesn't take anything away from it. So often, they seem contrived to fit the sentence, but I didn't feel that way about this piece. Good luck in the contest, my friend. And the very merriest of Christmases to you!
Love, Bev
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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Kay, this is just a beautiful Christmas story. The fact it follows a contest guideline doesn't take anything away from it. So often, they seem contrived to fit the sentence, but I didn't feel that way about this piece. Good luck in the contest, my friend. And the very merriest of Christmases to you!
Love, Bev
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
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Hello Bev, I actually made a mistake (didn't mean to enter that contest) anyway, got around it and wrote it for children. Thanks so much for reading. Happy Christmas my friend :-) Love, Kay XX
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You're most welcome, Kay. Love and blessings, Bev
