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Comment from adewpearl
Excellent
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effective pairing of illustration and poem, which is in good 5/7/5 syllable count for the contest
good imagery with the troublemaker commented upon as a croaking bullfrog
good satiric tone in your commentary
Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
    Hi Brooke. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Short poems are hard to review. However, I gave you this 6 star reason for your ability to put into words what so many are thinking. I do not understand why people such as the man you described rush to these places of unrest. Yes, they just want to keep the fires going so they have something to report on negatively. The man you described, and others, only want to get for themselves by relying on others to get them there. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
    Thank you so much, jannypan, for your very kind and supportive review. I took much flack for my piece by those who apparently do not find anything wrong with lawlessness. As I'm sure you know from my author's note, it's important to try to solve weighty issues like this through non-violence--not to incite it. Again, thank you for your review. I appreciate it so much and the stars.
Comment from JPilcher
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WAY 2 GO!!! Seriously!!! :O This wasn't at all what I was expecting!!! The much shorter pieces of writings, I'm often deterred by. It takes a lot of talent for someone to be able to make a huge impact with what I consider so little to work with - but you did though.

This type of style, for me it heavily depends on the overall presentation - but especially the image choice. Yours was spot on!! Well done!! :)

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
    Hi J. Pilcher. You will never know how much I appreciate your supportive review. We MUST get some sanity in this country.
reply by JPilcher on 30-Nov-2014
    A-MEN!!! :)
Comment from RYME4U
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Excellent commentary. Well written. Sharpton needs to get out of Dodge and get a life for himself. This is a good contest entry and is well presented.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
    Thank you Rhyme4U. You will never know how much I appreciate your supportive review. We MUST get some sanity in this country.
Comment from Veeb
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You seem to have met all the criteria for the prompt with this rather tongue-in-cheek political senryu. Very clever and original. I wish you well in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
    Hi Veeb. Thank you for your review. We MUST get some sanity in this country. Burning and looting to the ground cannot stand.
reply by Veeb on 30-Nov-2014
    You're welcome. No easy answers, I'm afraid.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
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This a quite satirical political 5-7-5, with commentary on a current social situation. Indeed, the rioting, burning and looting is not consistent with the message of Martin Luther King. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
    Thank you, Jeanie. We must get some sanity back into this country and destroying towns and businesses, looting isn't the way to make progress.
Comment from Glasstruth
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I don't believe he's inciting hatred that's been there since our founding fathers wrote that into our Constitution that a black man is 3/5 of a person. In the Declaration of Independence Indians are referred to as savages. why not concentrate on the real issues as to the 1% that loves us being divided. Lets create jobs and have the rich pay their fair share. Les

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
    Thank you for reviewing, Glasstruth, but I think you're missing the point. We must get some sanity back into this country and destroying towns and businesses, looting isn't the way to make progress.
reply by Glasstruth on 30-Nov-2014
    Neither is the prosecuting attorney who had his father killed by a black man; and Nixon the governor of that who could have moved the grand jury else where, but didn't. The jury is not deciding on guilt but on probable cause. Out of a 162,000 cases, only 11 were rejected. The facts speak for themselves.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
    Well it certainly is a mess. My point is that we MUST solve these problems by trying to unify and not divide as my author's note indicates. Violence doesn't solve a darn thing and we can't take law into our own hands. Otherwise there will be anarchy--and it seems we're headed in that direction. Cool heads must prevail.
Comment from Wendyanne
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Hi author your piece of well written senryu style political poetry certainly gave me food for thought. King will certainly be turning in his grave at the state of things. Good luck.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
    Thank you, Wendyanne. Cool heads must prevail to work out a solution to inflammatory situations. I appreciate your thoughtful review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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Rating revised after syllable count was corrected. Good luck!

This is really a good piece but no matter how you cut it the last line is six syllables which is why I marked you down. Maybe something like 'dream King' or 'Luther' rolls over would work and address the syllable count issue. You have time to fix it and I would be happy to look at it again if you do. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
    Aha! you counted Dr. as 2 syllables. Will go in and fix that. I counted it as one.
reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 30-Nov-2014
    I am concerned that I will not be the only one and I don't understand why other folks don't point things like that out to prevent good pieces from being disqualified. I will check it out after the fix and upgrade.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
    Thank you so much. I changed last line to "Rev." So last line shouldn't be considered "Reverend" (3) but Rev (1) King... for a count of 5 in that line. I always do what you have done. I try to note glitches in my reviews which may disqualify piece or other reviewers from granting fewer stars. Again, I thank you for calling this to my attention.