Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "A Cabin and a Cathedral"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
15 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
I really enjoyed this chapter. You have impressed me greatly with your awesome descriptions of the land and church. Equally superb description of Valarius's concerns for his friends.
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I really enjoyed this chapter. You have impressed me greatly with your awesome descriptions of the land and church. Equally superb description of Valarius's concerns for his friends.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Methinks Valerius has found another patient in the same vein as Juila and the others. If that's true, how ironic for the priests to send Valerius to treat him. I could see Father Travis as the savior of the others. If he were to come back with Valerius, then they couldn't justify burning others at the stake and not a priest. At the very least it may cause a crisis of conscious that might wake Leo up.
Good chapter. I like the direction this is taking.
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Methinks Valerius has found another patient in the same vein as Juila and the others. If that's true, how ironic for the priests to send Valerius to treat him. I could see Father Travis as the savior of the others. If he were to come back with Valerius, then they couldn't justify burning others at the stake and not a priest. At the very least it may cause a crisis of conscious that might wake Leo up.
Good chapter. I like the direction this is taking.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Another great chapter. You always achieve what you set out to do. Your language is eloquent and your choice of verbs or descriptive phrases always allow the emotions to materialize.
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Another great chapter. You always achieve what you set out to do. Your language is eloquent and your choice of verbs or descriptive phrases always allow the emotions to materialize.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
Comment from Gargantuan2
Good chapter, I cold only find one flaw:
and are here to help me.
And you are here to help me.
I know you were attempting to continue a sentence after the exclamation mark, but that does end the sentence and a new one must begin. Until next time :)
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Good chapter, I cold only find one flaw:
and are here to help me.
And you are here to help me.
I know you were attempting to continue a sentence after the exclamation mark, but that does end the sentence and a new one must begin. Until next time :)
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
This looks really great! Your grammar is tight. It looks and reads sensational. A marvelous job on this unit. Had no problem understanding it. heck, I may start babbling in broken Italian slang. I'm southern, should be easy. Informative and lots of character interactions. Count your doubloon. do loco
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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This looks really great! Your grammar is tight. It looks and reads sensational. A marvelous job on this unit. Had no problem understanding it. heck, I may start babbling in broken Italian slang. I'm southern, should be easy. Informative and lots of character interactions. Count your doubloon. do loco
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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This is coming natural now. Yeah, I'm afraid I may start talking like this. I think it's a little more natural now. This is supposed to be a segment of a book, not the whole book. Oh well, it just keeps going. What can I do. Thank you mucho. I need a bigger chest! mikey
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Count your booty. Later Lion King, got boo coo words to write.
Comment from nordicgirl
How beautifully romantic that ending was. Tears welled up for me. I could feel the surprise, especially in Julia. Great chapter as things keep pointing to a confrontation. Great story. I have no idea how you plan to follow this...
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How beautifully romantic that ending was. Tears welled up for me. I could feel the surprise, especially in Julia. Great chapter as things keep pointing to a confrontation. Great story. I have no idea how you plan to follow this...
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
Comment from seaglass
Ahh, mental-telepathy is a sure sign of soul-mates. I love how this love story builds tension but I hold my breath waiting for something bad to happen because I know they must be reborn into a new life.
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Ahh, mental-telepathy is a sure sign of soul-mates. I love how this love story builds tension but I hold my breath waiting for something bad to happen because I know they must be reborn into a new life.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
Comment from Nosha17
I am glad the poor outcast family members are able to run and hide in the forest. I hope they will be safe. This is such a good story, so intricate, characters are believable and great story line. Enjoyable as always. Faye
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I am glad the poor outcast family members are able to run and hide in the forest. I hope they will be safe. This is such a good story, so intricate, characters are believable and great story line. Enjoyable as always. Faye
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: You must be up day and night with all your contests. Congrats to you for your well deserved awards!
I like how Valerius and Julia are thinking about one another and their love is growing. I like how you are having the kids hide in a secure house of stones.
Well done, my writer friend. Mental illness is still on the news with more research being done. The root causes will be discovered, fear, anxity, pain are such roots. My daughter is a senior at the University of Minnesota studying psychology. She plans on doing brain research to help others. Monica loves to write too, but professors have her write research papers. She plans on going to Chicago or Denver for graduate school.
Maybe,Leopold has his own fears or anxieties that can come out in your stories. Why does he fight others when he has his own fears? Bullied? Being small, not athletic or handy at farming? Hiding in priesthood when he really got picked on growing up...not worth much..people look up to the men of cloth..but Leopold is not good at kindness or love. Fears can explode. This is your two cents worth from me.
Happy Blessed Thanksgiving! flylikeaneagle (nancy)
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Michael: You must be up day and night with all your contests. Congrats to you for your well deserved awards!
I like how Valerius and Julia are thinking about one another and their love is growing. I like how you are having the kids hide in a secure house of stones.
Well done, my writer friend. Mental illness is still on the news with more research being done. The root causes will be discovered, fear, anxity, pain are such roots. My daughter is a senior at the University of Minnesota studying psychology. She plans on doing brain research to help others. Monica loves to write too, but professors have her write research papers. She plans on going to Chicago or Denver for graduate school.
Maybe,Leopold has his own fears or anxieties that can come out in your stories. Why does he fight others when he has his own fears? Bullied? Being small, not athletic or handy at farming? Hiding in priesthood when he really got picked on growing up...not worth much..people look up to the men of cloth..but Leopold is not good at kindness or love. Fears can explode. This is your two cents worth from me.
Happy Blessed Thanksgiving! flylikeaneagle (nancy)
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
I'm afraid I had trouble getting through this one again. I love the premise, and I admire your taking on the task of writing in medieval dialogue. If only we knew what that was. For me, this still seems wordy and dense. I know you could say the same things using half the words, and in my view it would be more effective, if perhaps less Shakespearian. This is such a fascinating period in history. I commend you for taking this on, and for introducing the reincarnation thread in the story.
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I'm afraid I had trouble getting through this one again. I love the premise, and I admire your taking on the task of writing in medieval dialogue. If only we knew what that was. For me, this still seems wordy and dense. I know you could say the same things using half the words, and in my view it would be more effective, if perhaps less Shakespearian. This is such a fascinating period in history. I commend you for taking this on, and for introducing the reincarnation thread in the story.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
