Fantasy Flight
Just a fun fantasy writing.22 total reviews
Comment from emrpoems
Were my eye[s] playing tricks on me?---typo
my hand shoo[k] and I spilled--typo
nice alliteration-- fantasy flight
Will consider going on one of those some time.
A nice fun read
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2014
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Were my eye[s] playing tricks on me?---typo
my hand shoo[k] and I spilled--typo
nice alliteration-- fantasy flight
Will consider going on one of those some time.
A nice fun read
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the review and for catching my typos. I have corrected said typos. Thanks again.
Comment from sbedian
The story, which was not told as a story but rather just descriptions of events and perceptions, was limited in dialogue and in plot. I thought the message was somewhat unclear or not well developed into the writing, and some of the words used and grammar involved were not actually correct. Otherwise not bad, just needs work.
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2014
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The story, which was not told as a story but rather just descriptions of events and perceptions, was limited in dialogue and in plot. I thought the message was somewhat unclear or not well developed into the writing, and some of the words used and grammar involved were not actually correct. Otherwise not bad, just needs work.
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the review.
