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Comment from Spitfire
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An excellent topic, although I can't imagine a senior citizen lecturing with a gun in his/her face. For me, the line that creates the disparity:
Wait to start a family until after the wedding bell

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
    Hi Spitfire. I stuck my neck out by entering this contest, but I felt I had to express my POV knowing full well political correctness was against me. For a minute I had to try to figure out what you were referring to--(gun). My POV in that line is: Don't force equalization by taking from those who have been responsible and demand it be handed over to others. That is the "crime" I'm referring to. Is society so arrogant that it thinks others don't have the same talents to be successful as the generation before them? The other line: "Wait to start a family..." statistics indicate the broken family and teen pregnancy virtually dooms most young people to poverty. I do thank you for your kind review and the dialogue.
reply by Spitfire on 16-Nov-2014
    Absolutely. I hope you win.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
    Thank you, Spitfire (great pen name). Poem came in with 4 votes. I'm pleased about that as I didn't expect any.
Comment from lakeport
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Gimmee,Gimmee, Gimmee, indeed money does not grow on trees,you have to work for it, I enjoyed reading your poem,which is so true, Good luck at the contest,God bless you,Hugs!lakeport,

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
    Thank you, lakeport. I appreciate so much your support. I entered this contest against my better judgment because political correctness is against my POV. Many Americans feel so guilty for the good things in their lives that they feel they must pan our desire to strive to achieve them. For some it's easier to condemn achievement than it is to go after it. Those of us who don't buy into that victimization POV have to speak up. Again--I thank you.
reply by lakeport on 15-Nov-2014
    you are welcome,Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from justjo66
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This in my opinion is a true statement of our world today. Something for nothing seems to be the cry. I think your poem is spot on and an enjoyable read. The rhyming helps make the poem flow very freely. Easy to read and understand. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
    Hi justjo. I appreciate your fine review and your support. I entered this contest with mixed emotions. I had no vision of winning, but felt my POV was too important to let it pass. A controversial subject, indeed. Many Americans feel so guilty for the good things in their lives that they feel they must pan our desire to strive to achieve them. For some it's easier to condemn achievement than it is to go after it. Those of us who don't buy into that victimization POV have to speak up.
Comment from sbedian
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I guess I didn't really like this one, the main point of it that I enjoyed was the humor aspect, but otherwise it did not read well or have good flow, and I thought it could use much work.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
    Hi sbedian. Could it be the opposing POV? A controversial subject, indeed. Many Americans feel so guilty for the good things in their lives that they feel they must pan our desire to strive to achieve them. For some it's easier to condemn achievement than it is to go after it. Those of us who don't buy into that victimization POV have to speak up.
Comment from adewpearl
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solid use of rhyming couplets
good assonance in crying and whining
good alliteration in skimped and saved
you convey your beliefs with clarity and conviction
Brooke

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
    Thank you, adewpearl. A controversial subject, indeed. Many Americans feel so guilty for the good things in their lives that they feel they must pan our desire to strive to achieve them. For some it's easier to condemn achievement than it is to go after it. Those of us who don't buy into that victimization POV have to speak up. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from LIJ Red
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Good grief, how politically incorrect and socially unsatisfactory and true. simple prompt and I think you nailed it. Excellent.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
    Hi LIJ Red. Thank you so much for your support. I debated about writing it and "going against cloned train of thought." However, I took on the task to express myself. Many Americans feel so guilty for the good things in their lives that they feel they must pan our desire to strive to achieve them. For some it's easier to condemn achievement than it is to go after it. Those of us who don't buy into that victimization POV have to speak up. Again, thank you for your support.
Comment from mjac777
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Just excellent, mystery author. Timely and important message given the political climate we find ourselves in today.
The nice a/a/b/b rhyme kept it going at a lively, upbeat tempo that kept the pace moving.
I agree with everything you said. I'm glad more people are waking up and not buying into hate and blame.
Thank you so much for posting.
Best of luck in the contest!!
Well done.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
    Thank you, Mjac777, for your supportive review. I stuck my neck out in writing this--but I'm sick and tired of the propaganda we are being spoon fed and those dummies who buy into it. A controversial subject, indeed. Many Americans feel so guilty for the good things in their lives that they feel they must pan our desire to strive to achieve them. For some it's easier to condemn achievement than it is to go after it. Those of us who don't buy into that victimization POV have to speak up. Again, thank you for your support.
Comment from rjpurdy
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This is a really dicey prompt. There are so many underlying issues in poverty that the disparity really offers them fewer choices. There are true victims who do not have the opportunity for education. Maybe because they are too busy providing for their families at minimum wage jobs. And yes, there are those with the courage and tenacity to fight their way out. rj

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
    Thank you, purdy, for your review. A controversial subject, indeed. Many Americans feel so guilty for the good things in their lives that they feel they must pan the desire to strive to achieve them. For some it's easier to condemn achievement than it is to go after it. Those of us who don't buy into that victimization POV have to speak up.
reply by rjpurdy on 14-Nov-2014
    Indeed your point is well taken ~Peace~
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
    I stuck my neck out in writing this--but I'm sick and tired of the propaganda we are being spoon fed and our willingness to buy into it. Americans are so guilt ridden it defies logic.
reply by rjpurdy on 14-Nov-2014
    I don't know about sticking your neck out but you are absolutely right about being "spoon fed propaganda." Americans are apathetic and most still believe that our governing fathers have the peoples best interest at heart. Not true! They only care about the best interest of the party. Therefore we are victims of our own apathy. It pleases me that you do not fall into that catagory. Rage on I say! Rod
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
    I agree, politicians do their best to spin things in the direction they want us to go. They whip us up into a frenzy and we are just hapless pawns. Hopefully, we are wising up to their tactics and will refuse to be spun, choosing instead to follow our own good instincts.
reply by rjpurdy on 14-Nov-2014
    I concur!