Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "More Injuries and a Visitor"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
17 total reviews
Comment from nordicgirl
As I suspected, word would get out and those with mental problems would begin to seek Valerius. It is going to draw unwanted attention I fear. Things are getting tense and it is all too real. A great story.
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As I suspected, word would get out and those with mental problems would begin to seek Valerius. It is going to draw unwanted attention I fear. Things are getting tense and it is all too real. A great story.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Just a thought, but sticking with the conflict between medicine/science and religion, it would be interesting if you had vision and sound meet again during the plague. Excellent chapter, the boy showing signs of torture infuriating.
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Just a thought, but sticking with the conflict between medicine/science and religion, it would be interesting if you had vision and sound meet again during the plague. Excellent chapter, the boy showing signs of torture infuriating.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
love how this drew for me in many ways mikey provide some compensation though our coffers are not over flowing a delightful read as always pal
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love how this drew for me in many ways mikey provide some compensation though our coffers are not over flowing a delightful read as always pal
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
Comment from Sasha
I apologize for taking so long to get to this. I finally got some sleep and can once again focus on the computer screen without getting lightheaded. The doctor put me back on my original medicine.
This is a terrific chapter that builds excellent curiosity and tension for the reader. As probably expected, I have no suggestions. Your imagination is doing just fine without me adding anything. This is really a great story and I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
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I apologize for taking so long to get to this. I finally got some sleep and can once again focus on the computer screen without getting lightheaded. The doctor put me back on my original medicine.
This is a terrific chapter that builds excellent curiosity and tension for the reader. As probably expected, I have no suggestions. Your imagination is doing just fine without me adding anything. This is really a great story and I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Cicero and Lourdes? Why not? But I'm more concerned with him finding out that the family he's looking for is right there with Valerius. What will happen to all the "demonic" patients when they are found? How can anyone save them from the church and soldiers? Seems impossible... hope you have a solution ready. :)
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Cicero and Lourdes? Why not? But I'm more concerned with him finding out that the family he's looking for is right there with Valerius. What will happen to all the "demonic" patients when they are found? How can anyone save them from the church and soldiers? Seems impossible... hope you have a solution ready. :)
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Lourdes wont give him the time of day. Valerius is just making note that he's a bit creepy. :) I hope so too... I mean, of course I do!!! mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
I like the way the story is going. Valerius may gain some information while he treats the old priest. Cicero has eyes for Lourdes. This may help keep his attention from Valerius. The fact that soldiers are accompanying these priests means danger. Great work.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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I like the way the story is going. Valerius may gain some information while he treats the old priest. Cicero has eyes for Lourdes. This may help keep his attention from Valerius. The fact that soldiers are accompanying these priests means danger. Great work.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Thing are going to get sticky with Valerius in strange territory and Leopold more and more set on finding demons! Thank you for your great input and encouragement. :) mikey
Comment from Nosha17
Another absorbing chapter where more abuse has been uncovered. Good job your characters are on the ball and manage to fend off the evil onslaught. The medical procedures are well written and narrated. Most enjoyable as always. faye
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Another absorbing chapter where more abuse has been uncovered. Good job your characters are on the ball and manage to fend off the evil onslaught. The medical procedures are well written and narrated. Most enjoyable as always. faye
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
Comment from Gargantuan2
A good chapter, the reasoning for the characters is well placed and the story evolves with few problems. Two things to look at here, the first is in the introduction:
Winslow, who has stoped (excavated?)
Winslow, who has stopped
physicians skills
physician's skills
The latter being a possessive is easily missed. Until next time :)
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A good chapter, the reasoning for the characters is well placed and the story evolves with few problems. Two things to look at here, the first is in the introduction:
Winslow, who has stoped (excavated?)
Winslow, who has stopped
physicians skills
physician's skills
The latter being a possessive is easily missed. Until next time :)
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
Comment from seaglass
That priest gives me the creeps. This continues to convey tension of the times. It would be stressful lying to a priest for these people who were made to believe that they would go to hell unless they confessed every sin to a priest. Hope this isn't a trick to test Valerius.
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That priest gives me the creeps. This continues to convey tension of the times. It would be stressful lying to a priest for these people who were made to believe that they would go to hell unless they confessed every sin to a priest. Hope this isn't a trick to test Valerius.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
Hi Michael. What an enjoyable, gripping yarn. I have come in mid-plot, of course, which is always difficult and dangerous, but I feel I have been rewarded for taking the time to read. Thank you.
I liked the thought behind these sentences:
'But, he is a boy and given to the ways of a boy. He does not tolerate too much of a mother's embrace.' Very insightful.
I did notice a few things, and trust you will not mind me pointing them out:
'She mostly observed, nodding her approval, making expressions that ranged from worry to curiosity.' I wonder if a semi colon after 'approval' is warranted here, since it stands in place of 'and'?
'The conversation between them had little meaning for anyone but them for the most part.' This read a little awkwardly. How about 'The conversation between them meant little, for the most part, to anyone else listening.'
'Are you aware of this(?)'
'He prodded gently and noted the boy recoiled to the touch near the wrist. "I suspect there may be a break near the wrist. Lourdes?"' Repetition of 'near the wrist'. Perhaps, 'I suspect there may be a break here.'
'A suggestion only(.) I find the notion absurd.'
'...who awaited on horseback while holding an empty stead.' Do you mean 'steed'?
'But what...(?) (L)ooking for us(,) I imagine. My apologies....'
'No, if he is taking leave, I will wait for him to depart then.' I don't think 'then' is needed.
'Protection on the road(,) they say.'
'Now, don't warn the doctor now.' Repetition of 'now'.
'We can provide some compensation(,) though our coffers are not over flowing.'
'There are things that are beyond the physician(')s skills.'
Thanks again, Michael.
Anthony
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Hi Michael. What an enjoyable, gripping yarn. I have come in mid-plot, of course, which is always difficult and dangerous, but I feel I have been rewarded for taking the time to read. Thank you.
I liked the thought behind these sentences:
'But, he is a boy and given to the ways of a boy. He does not tolerate too much of a mother's embrace.' Very insightful.
I did notice a few things, and trust you will not mind me pointing them out:
'She mostly observed, nodding her approval, making expressions that ranged from worry to curiosity.' I wonder if a semi colon after 'approval' is warranted here, since it stands in place of 'and'?
'The conversation between them had little meaning for anyone but them for the most part.' This read a little awkwardly. How about 'The conversation between them meant little, for the most part, to anyone else listening.'
'Are you aware of this(?)'
'He prodded gently and noted the boy recoiled to the touch near the wrist. "I suspect there may be a break near the wrist. Lourdes?"' Repetition of 'near the wrist'. Perhaps, 'I suspect there may be a break here.'
'A suggestion only(.) I find the notion absurd.'
'...who awaited on horseback while holding an empty stead.' Do you mean 'steed'?
'But what...(?) (L)ooking for us(,) I imagine. My apologies....'
'No, if he is taking leave, I will wait for him to depart then.' I don't think 'then' is needed.
'Protection on the road(,) they say.'
'Now, don't warn the doctor now.' Repetition of 'now'.
'We can provide some compensation(,) though our coffers are not over flowing.'
'There are things that are beyond the physician(')s skills.'
Thanks again, Michael.
Anthony
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
