Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Julia Reaches Through to Florentina"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
15 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
I loved this section. It's not so different that what Native Americas believe about spirit guides. I like the picture, it's perfect for the piece. perhaps Julia will use her gift for healing in issues of mental illness.
I found one typo.
"I sometimes see (here) rub at her head before a vision." (her)
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I loved this section. It's not so different that what Native Americas believe about spirit guides. I like the picture, it's perfect for the piece. perhaps Julia will use her gift for healing in issues of mental illness.
I found one typo.
"I sometimes see (here) rub at her head before a vision." (her)
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from robina1978
Florentina trusts Julia completely. She asks if she has visions as well. I think the young girl must have had a fit with an aura beforehand. Julia takes her to see a doctor.
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Florentina trusts Julia completely. She asks if she has visions as well. I think the young girl must have had a fit with an aura beforehand. Julia takes her to see a doctor.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
Comment from Sankey
Once again friend a great chapter. This has been a most interesting story and creation of yours. Keep up the good work. Mate.
SPoke to Tom about how I have problems on some chapters of my book with the advanced edit thing as far as the Mid or MP3 files working properly on Google Chrome. Overall Chrome is far better than the old Internet Explorer.
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Once again friend a great chapter. This has been a most interesting story and creation of yours. Keep up the good work. Mate.
SPoke to Tom about how I have problems on some chapters of my book with the advanced edit thing as far as the Mid or MP3 files working properly on Google Chrome. Overall Chrome is far better than the old Internet Explorer.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
Comment from faragon
Ok...you got me...I never thought it was the Father who sent spirit wolves to watch over his daughter. Very well done!!! I fear the ucoming war will not leave our intrepid heros unscathed!
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Ok...you got me...I never thought it was the Father who sent spirit wolves to watch over his daughter. Very well done!!! I fear the ucoming war will not leave our intrepid heros unscathed!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
I picture Valerius as Duncan McCloud. There can only be one. Julia is good for the girl. Now the girl does not to have to fear the wolves. The wolves have only come to protect her -- not do her bodily harm. her father was close to animals and nature it appears. Just a wave of her hand and they bow to her commands. They can learn from one another. Maybe there is something that the girl can teach Julia. Some tenderness comes to this chapter. A family is evolving, even though they were strangers, except for Valerious who doe snot recall his last lives. I saw no grammar errors. Hope the black plague doe snot come. The black plague killed thousands. Maybe the physician encounters some type of pestilence and seeks for a cure. The girl knows about nature's herbs which could have healing properties. Does the doctor keep a diary or a log book where he documents patients treatments. Maybe he is making a medicine encyclopedia with disease names and cures. Maybe the witch can find water with a divining rod? Don't seem you need much help. I see six wolves guarding the girl from danger which can come disguised as a high priest. Count your doubloon. wackydo
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I picture Valerius as Duncan McCloud. There can only be one. Julia is good for the girl. Now the girl does not to have to fear the wolves. The wolves have only come to protect her -- not do her bodily harm. her father was close to animals and nature it appears. Just a wave of her hand and they bow to her commands. They can learn from one another. Maybe there is something that the girl can teach Julia. Some tenderness comes to this chapter. A family is evolving, even though they were strangers, except for Valerious who doe snot recall his last lives. I saw no grammar errors. Hope the black plague doe snot come. The black plague killed thousands. Maybe the physician encounters some type of pestilence and seeks for a cure. The girl knows about nature's herbs which could have healing properties. Does the doctor keep a diary or a log book where he documents patients treatments. Maybe he is making a medicine encyclopedia with disease names and cures. Maybe the witch can find water with a divining rod? Don't seem you need much help. I see six wolves guarding the girl from danger which can come disguised as a high priest. Count your doubloon. wackydo
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: Great details. I like how father appears and the wolves lay down. Maybe, she will see eagles too?!? Anyway, helping one another with compassion calms down the fears. The light of these visions is being exposed. Maybe, the visions will help them with the evil priests show up. They will see into his real intention of killing the girls. Well written and entertaining Michael!
flylikeaneagle
PS: I am taking a poetry class from Brooks, great class.
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Michael: Great details. I like how father appears and the wolves lay down. Maybe, she will see eagles too?!? Anyway, helping one another with compassion calms down the fears. The light of these visions is being exposed. Maybe, the visions will help them with the evil priests show up. They will see into his real intention of killing the girls. Well written and entertaining Michael!
flylikeaneagle
PS: I am taking a poetry class from Brooks, great class.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
Comment from Sasha
How wonderful, the two children have each other to lean on. I do hope this new friendship help both of them and keeps the church from doing them harm. Great work with this one. I enjoyed it very much.
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How wonderful, the two children have each other to lean on. I do hope this new friendship help both of them and keeps the church from doing them harm. Great work with this one. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
Comment from Nosha17
To incorporate the workings of the mind into your story is no easy task. It was impressive and fascinating. Your characters are so likeable and interesting and the story is so good. Most enjoyable. Faye
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To incorporate the workings of the mind into your story is no easy task. It was impressive and fascinating. Your characters are so likeable and interesting and the story is so good. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
Father Thurston missed the miracle. He will be a handy ally. They girls may not be in as much danger if they can recognize the visions and not react violently to them. Florentia and Julia can help each other. They may not be just seeing visions of their past lives. They may be seeing spirits sent to help them. Great work.
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Father Thurston missed the miracle. He will be a handy ally. They girls may not be in as much danger if they can recognize the visions and not react violently to them. Florentia and Julia can help each other. They may not be just seeing visions of their past lives. They may be seeing spirits sent to help them. Great work.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This might be your best chapter or even the best chapter anyone has written this year. Just beautiful interactions between the girls. Wonderful insights that are as current as the morning light.
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This might be your best chapter or even the best chapter anyone has written this year. Just beautiful interactions between the girls. Wonderful insights that are as current as the morning light.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
