Zerubbabel Baxter
rhyming quatrains in 6/5/6/5148 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
What an adorable morality tale about being too stubborn. No one gets anywhere.
Love the alliteration of all the "b's" in
Zerubbabel Baxter
It is such a fun name to say aloud.
Solid rhymes. I love the Zee and Tee repitition.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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What an adorable morality tale about being too stubborn. No one gets anywhere.
Love the alliteration of all the "b's" in
Zerubbabel Baxter
It is such a fun name to say aloud.
Solid rhymes. I love the Zee and Tee repitition.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Debi, for your generous sixth star and thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from billscott
This is an incredible piece...fun...rhythmic...rhyming...flowing.
I could hear it being sung almost..hmmm.
Very creative and 100% enjoyable!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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This is an incredible piece...fun...rhythmic...rhyming...flowing.
I could hear it being sung almost..hmmm.
Very creative and 100% enjoyable!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your generous six stars. Brooke
Comment from BLACKDYKE
What are you going to write about when
he grows up Brooke? Of course any name
will do, how about mine? Your Zerubbabel
tells a good story to interest any listener.
East or west it don't make no difference
to me, the story has captured my interest.
Eric
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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What are you going to write about when
he grows up Brooke? Of course any name
will do, how about mine? Your Zerubbabel
tells a good story to interest any listener.
East or west it don't make no difference
to me, the story has captured my interest.
Eric
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Eric, I imagine I'll be writing about skate boarding and puppy love and all sorts of boy stuff :-) Thanks so much. Brooke :-)
Comment from risktaker
When there is no room for compromise, stagnation occurs and noting gets done moving forward. I love the imagery, choice of words, flow, tone and structure. The message is clear, being stubborn at the wrong time is foolish. I relate to "thought he knew best," and "he just wanted his way,"
Outstanding poem.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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When there is no room for compromise, stagnation occurs and noting gets done moving forward. I love the imagery, choice of words, flow, tone and structure. The message is clear, being stubborn at the wrong time is foolish. I relate to "thought he knew best," and "he just wanted his way,"
Outstanding poem.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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risktaker, thank you so much for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
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Comment from comanalbert
Like the saying that when two are fighting, the third will win. I suppose that character never did rebuilt the temple...It is a lesson that too much planning drowns the project.
I will look out for your story-poem.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Like the saying that when two are fighting, the third will win. I suppose that character never did rebuilt the temple...It is a lesson that too much planning drowns the project.
I will look out for your story-poem.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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comanalbert, thank you so very much for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from jadapenn
This was such a cute poem with Tee and Zee arguing long after the cows came home. After all this time their ships lies on the bottom of the sea and they have gained nothing. Stubborn critters. lol. Well penned. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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This was such a cute poem with Tee and Zee arguing long after the cows came home. After all this time their ships lies on the bottom of the sea and they have gained nothing. Stubborn critters. lol. Well penned. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Jada, for your thoughtful review and contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from TamzinWhite
I love the way you got me Zeeeee-ing and Teeee-ing and then tea-ing just as pronounced. Great rhythm and message throughout the story. The children turned from babes to adults in a few short phrases. Excellent! Well done!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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I love the way you got me Zeeeee-ing and Teeee-ing and then tea-ing just as pronounced. Great rhythm and message throughout the story. The children turned from babes to adults in a few short phrases. Excellent! Well done!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Tamzin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sanku
tee and zee fought and argued
all through night and day
in the end they just sat glued
to the same spot on the bay-no doubt their ship would have sunk and they ,hopefully would have learnt a lesson.
one mor lovely poem for children from your golden pen, Brooke-Santha..
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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tee and zee fought and argued
all through night and day
in the end they just sat glued
to the same spot on the bay-no doubt their ship would have sunk and they ,hopefully would have learnt a lesson.
one mor lovely poem for children from your golden pen, Brooke-Santha..
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Sanku, thank you for your encouraging and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
You're right it is a delightful name - you've had a few of those lately!
What lesson are we to learn, I wonder, from this nutty piece of obstinacy from Tee and Zee (who of course would have to be Zed if he came from New Zealand - what a nuisance having to change all your rhyming!
Steve
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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You're right it is a delightful name - you've had a few of those lately!
What lesson are we to learn, I wonder, from this nutty piece of obstinacy from Tee and Zee (who of course would have to be Zed if he came from New Zealand - what a nuisance having to change all your rhyming!
Steve
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Steve - glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from Sonaleeka
Very well written with so much strong feeling .Amazingly captured .Well done my dear friend .Worth reading.
God bless!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Very well written with so much strong feeling .Amazingly captured .Well done my dear friend .Worth reading.
God bless!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Sonaleeka, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
