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Comment from Green Lake Girl
Very cool photo to go with this poem, Tom. I'm listening to it pour outside right now! How fitting I came upon your poem.
"Teardrops from cloud banks." Great line! Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Very cool photo to go with this poem, Tom. I'm listening to it pour outside right now! How fitting I came upon your poem.
"Teardrops from cloud banks." Great line! Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thank you Marietta. That's amazing!
Comment from sunnilicious
You got me singing... 'Raindrops keep falling on my head'.
Mother Nature can be marvelous. It's all perspective of the situation. I like sunshowers and hail. Great visual imagery presented. Creative. Nice work.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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You got me singing... 'Raindrops keep falling on my head'.
Mother Nature can be marvelous. It's all perspective of the situation. I like sunshowers and hail. Great visual imagery presented. Creative. Nice work.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thank you Alicia. Keep on singing!
Comment from lakeport
Raindrops, indeed thank God for the raindrops.that's a very nice expressed poem,nice rhyming, I enjoyed reading it,God bless you.Lakeport.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Raindrops, indeed thank God for the raindrops.that's a very nice expressed poem,nice rhyming, I enjoyed reading it,God bless you.Lakeport.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thank you Lakeport.
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your welcome.lakeport.
Comment from Domino 2
I liked your springy meter, but I tripped on the emphasis of 'de-LAYS' (the way I emphasise the syllables) which doesn't scan to me.
Anyway, I thoroughly enjoyed the read and the clever text ending to reflect the raindrops falling.
Cheers, Ray.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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I liked your springy meter, but I tripped on the emphasis of 'de-LAYS' (the way I emphasise the syllables) which doesn't scan to me.
Anyway, I thoroughly enjoyed the read and the clever text ending to reflect the raindrops falling.
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thanks aRay.
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. I like the light almost melody-like style you used and the ending that imitates the rainfall itself was a great idea.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Very interesting. I like the light almost melody-like style you used and the ending that imitates the rainfall itself was a great idea.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thanks again Lancelot.
Comment from MagKing
Wow!
The poem looks so simple to write but there are a lot of insight to it.
Were you teaching or speaking?
...I think both...Smiling...
MagKing
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Wow!
The poem looks so simple to write but there are a lot of insight to it.
Were you teaching or speaking?
...I think both...Smiling...
MagKing
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you , actually singing.
Comment from RGstar
Another structural performance, Treischel. Even the solitude of rain is not enough to hinder the movement of your quill.
I loved the reverse with''raindrops'' and 'rain drops.'
Good write.
Best wishes,
Rg
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Another structural performance, Treischel. Even the solitude of rain is not enough to hinder the movement of your quill.
I loved the reverse with''raindrops'' and 'rain drops.'
Good write.
Best wishes,
Rg
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you RG. I like your comments.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Raindrops" is a good poem with good meter and rhyme and rhyme scheme. It has good figurative language and imagery. Unfortunately it reads like the windows fell from the sky.
Preston
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"Raindrops" is a good poem with good meter and rhyme and rhyme scheme. It has good figurative language and imagery. Unfortunately it reads like the windows fell from the sky.
Preston
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thanks Preston. It can also be sung to the tune: These Are A Few Of My Favorite Things. Reference Julie Andrews in Sound of Music.
Comment from Joan E.
We could use a "cloud burst," but there is none on the horizon until October! I admired your rhythm and rhymes in the first stanzas along with the dwindling format, plus the photo that reinforces the scene. Hope you have a dry weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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We could use a "cloud burst," but there is none on the horizon until October! I admired your rhythm and rhymes in the first stanzas along with the dwindling format, plus the photo that reinforces the scene. Hope you have a dry weekend- Joan
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Thank you Joan. Might be a good weekend.
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Fingers and toes crossed! -Joan
Comment from 9999pool
Raindrop keep falling in drops and splattered on the window panes, reminding us about the tears and the pain, but there is something to gain - a cooler day and a more relaxing day staying indoors, smiles.
Great write and well expressed a cloudy day with rain.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Raindrop keep falling in drops and splattered on the window panes, reminding us about the tears and the pain, but there is something to gain - a cooler day and a more relaxing day staying indoors, smiles.
Great write and well expressed a cloudy day with rain.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Thank you Ritchie, staying dry now.
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Sometimes it is good to get into the rain and feel refreshed from all of life's weights over our shoulders. It makes us young, and refresh again. Big smiles.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
