History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "DIscovery"Poems that tell stories of long ago
17 total reviews
Comment from words
I like your acrostic nod to explores.
Although, I have always found it strange that native lands could be "discovered" and claimed by outsiders.
Using the conquerors logic, there are several lovely, beachfront homes in Malibu that I would love to "discover".
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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I like your acrostic nod to explores.
Although, I have always found it strange that native lands could be "discovered" and claimed by outsiders.
Using the conquerors logic, there are several lovely, beachfront homes in Malibu that I would love to "discover".
Hugs, d
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thanks D, let's get an expedition together, I'd like to Discover them too.
Comment from adewpearl
A solid acrostic for Discovery
good use of optional rhyming
good alliteration in courageous quest and sent seeking and King and country and seldom see
while most explorers are not my favorite people for what they did to those they found already inhabiting areas they "discovered," I do acknowledge the courageous spirit with which they set out to find - and you capture that spirit well
Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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A solid acrostic for Discovery
good use of optional rhyming
good alliteration in courageous quest and sent seeking and King and country and seldom see
while most explorers are not my favorite people for what they did to those they found already inhabiting areas they "discovered," I do acknowledge the courageous spirit with which they set out to find - and you capture that spirit well
Brooke
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you Brooke. Yes, you make a great point.
Comment from Capricorn30
Interesting--a well-penned acrostic, Tom;
Explorers alter history--today as we know it stemmed from yesterday's curiosity -- great men remembered--important for us to keep in mind their achievements.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Interesting--a well-penned acrostic, Tom;
Explorers alter history--today as we know it stemmed from yesterday's curiosity -- great men remembered--important for us to keep in mind their achievements.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you Margaret. The grass looks greener...
Comment from James Dooney
Very nice acrostic you have done for us here. The lines and the word fit very well together. Good luck in the contest and keep it up !
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Very nice acrostic you have done for us here. The lines and the word fit very well together. Good luck in the contest and keep it up !
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you James.
Comment from costellsgirl33
"Die-hard veterans in courageous quest
Investigate the corners of the earth"
I love the first two lines of your poem.
Veterans are indeed courageous and they
go through so much and do a great deal for our country.
Your poem was very well put together and I wish you luck
in the contest
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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"Die-hard veterans in courageous quest
Investigate the corners of the earth"
I love the first two lines of your poem.
Veterans are indeed courageous and they
go through so much and do a great deal for our country.
Your poem was very well put together and I wish you luck
in the contest
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank yoy costellsgirl.
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You are welcome :)
Comment from sunnilicious
I think the most modern day explorers are astronauts. How history changes from boat to airplane to space ship. Riches and fame... Sensible poem about historical events in general. Great work.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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I think the most modern day explorers are astronauts. How history changes from boat to airplane to space ship. Riches and fame... Sensible poem about historical events in general. Great work.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thank you Alicia. Yes, that is a true transition.
Comment from innerworlds
What a beautiful and smooth flow of thoughts. And the imagery of the motivation, courage, and commitment it took to risk life and limb to extend their civilization's reach.... eloquently painted. Thanks for taking me back to the days in history class that spawned a sense of adventure in me. DISCOVERY...nicely handled. Well done! Thanks!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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What a beautiful and smooth flow of thoughts. And the imagery of the motivation, courage, and commitment it took to risk life and limb to extend their civilization's reach.... eloquently painted. Thanks for taking me back to the days in history class that spawned a sense of adventure in me. DISCOVERY...nicely handled. Well done! Thanks!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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A wonderfully written review with depth and understanding.
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
Very good war poetry. Great rhyming scheme. Good form and choice of words in such a smaller poem....Photo worked also.
keep writing!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Very good war poetry. Great rhyming scheme. Good form and choice of words in such a smaller poem....Photo worked also.
keep writing!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you Raphael
Comment from lancellot
Yes, there is a lot of truth in what you have written, but you left out all the bad parts too. But it's your history so that's fine. Well made.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Yes, there is a lot of truth in what you have written, but you left out all the bad parts too. But it's your history so that's fine. Well made.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thanks Lancelot. Yup, I'll get to the darker stuff in other poems.
Comment from MagKing
You made a documentary and a piece of history and study book out from this very piece.
A fine one indeed with a smooth flow.
I wasn't too pleased with the rhyme scheme, so I couldn't give it a six...Though the syllable scheme was impeccable.
MagKing
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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You made a documentary and a piece of history and study book out from this very piece.
A fine one indeed with a smooth flow.
I wasn't too pleased with the rhyme scheme, so I couldn't give it a six...Though the syllable scheme was impeccable.
MagKing
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you MagKing, let's see:
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I hah considered inserting spaces but decided against a it would have spoiled the acrostic but would have looked like this.
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And read:
Die-hard veterans in courageous quest
Investigate the corners of the earth
Sent seeking knowledge others only guessed
Committed searchers out to prove their worth
On dreams of riches, fame, and interest
Vested within robust ability
Endowed by King and country, they are blessed
Raising flags where most folks so seldom see
Yet proven as all histories attest
