Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This is well done. I hadn't heard of a nonogram before. I like it!The repetition makes your point clear and the rhythmic words are very appealing. Good job!

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014

Thank you Rhyme4u.

Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

Wow! Your work just keeps coming! Such talent. I have a question.. what about your use of so many commas in your last stanza? Is that correct? It didn't seem right to me.. but I didn't let that take away from 5 stars because your work is so very good.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014

Thank you Dawny . I thought they were separate unique thoughts so i bracketed them.

Comment from poetbear

Excellent

Great photo.
Your beautifully written words parallel your image.
Nature is a great and wondrous gift providing we respect it.
You always remind me of that!

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014

Thank you poetbear, im so glad that you get that.

Comment from ProjectBluebook

Excellent

Nonogram sounds good to me ... why not? If others can create a type of poem, we can too. Good imagination ... the green background mimics the green grass in the picture above. White is a good choice in words. Reminds me of the song ... 9-5 by Dolly. I like your word choices. Loon or Eagle's cry ... I like. Both quatrains are unique in itself. A lovely, Nonogram. I suspiciously suspect ... others will create a Nonogram. I'm impressed ... wackydo

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014

Thank you Wackydo. That would be a wonderful event if they did.

reply by ProjectBluebook on 28-Jun-2014

I think they will. I have a friend who created a poem. Well, I did too. Think he calls it a carot. Some heavy hitters copied his new poem and did some. I know a lot of poets who would like to try one. I willl tell some of my poet buddies about your Nonogram. I got one in mind. I just got to remember Treishel. They can look at your profile and the Nonogram. I just wrote the poem down. i will contact a special friend of mine. A high ranked poet. I know ... she will try one.

reply by ProjectBluebook on 28-Jun-2014

They may, yet.

Comment from Nottoway

Excellent

A great capture of innocence, purity and beauty in one moment. Excellence in the use of words to present to one who was not present as to the meaning of the moment.

And above. A moment with your grandson that is a memory forever for both of you.

Well done

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014

Thank you Nottoway.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

You describe nature so well, my friend. I envy those who have it to their disposal. I wish to hear and experience some of the things you describe.
Lovely.
Best wishes, Treischel.
Best wishes,
RG

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014

Thank you RG

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Nice quality time with the grandchild sounds nice. Good lyrical flow in the rhyme scheme. Good visual imagery. Great poem. Good author notes.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thank you Alicia

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

What a gorgeous poem to highlight a special moment captured on camera.

You invented this form .... clever Tom!

There is something intoxicating about nature at this time of year, isn't there?

Enjoy the lovely weather. I adore your poem.

Sonali



inborne .. did you mean inborn? (Not sure ... either would make sense here, I think)

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thank you Sonali. I leave it up to the readers interpretation.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

Everything is clear about nature and you describe it very well in this poem. I loved these lines;
"Just listen to cricket lullaby,
Music to your ear."
Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thank you rod

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Exceptional

Hi, Treischel,
"Everything is So Clear" is a beautiful statement of communication with the "dralas",the isness of the natural world.
It has great rhyme, rhythm, meter and flow. It is written in beautiful great figurative language (connects our soul with a primal place).
Preston

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thank you Preston. I like you description of the Dralas, isness of the natural world. Yes that fits perfectly. I appreciate the comeents and recognition.