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Along the Jericho Road

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Murder Mystery

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Comment from AprilShower
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This story is moving along at a fast pace, Bev. It certainly keeps a person awake. This is another well written chapter. I see this one has also received a well deserved sixth star. I have to keep reading.

April

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
    Hi, April. It's nice to see you name on this review. I was just thinking about you the other day!

    Thanks for the great review. So glad you liked the chapter.

    :) Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
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Hi Bev, I have finally settled in and catching up on my favorite writers chapters... :) Once again you mailed this one and you know I know the religious under and over tones and plot of this and all your work...the dialogue is phenom!

BRAVO BRAVO! 7 STARS FLY :0 HUGS

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
    Thank you so much, Christopher. I really appreciate your insights and grasp of the religious aspects of the story. That's something I really value, my friend. And your generosity touches my heart. :) Bev
Comment from amahra
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Thank you for your author notes; I've been away for a while...just had second eye surgery and doing well. I really loved this chapter--especially about the devil dog. I loved the descriptive writing and you pen for details. The imagery was very strong as well as the dialogue which was very realistic.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
    Hi, Amahra. Good to know you're back and doing well! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your encouragement and support, my friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from JW
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You did a good job in writing this, Bev. Your use of description was excellent. You easily held the reader's interest, and you left him or her in suspense in regards to what is about to happen.

Thanks for sharing this. J. W.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
    I appreciate your generous and encouraging review, Jonathon. Thanks for taking time to read. :)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where we learn more about danika and ty and jake hear her cries as the devil dog gets to her

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
    Thanks so much, Sweet. I appreciate your generous review. :)
Comment from Connie C
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What excellent description you have, Bev, of Danika's nightmare in the first few paragraphs. As always, your command of using dialogue is excellent. I am always so impressed with your imagination. I must admit, though, that sometimes I forget who some of the characters are, so I'm glad you always include something in your author's notes. Great artwork to accompany another of your exciting chapters.
Hugs,
Connie

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
    Thank you, Connie. You always manage to put a smile on my face with your generous and encouraging reviews. It means a lot to me! Hugs, Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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You left a fantastic hook. I am glad to see you are up for book of the month. This book deserves it. I enjoyed reading this post and I am really worried about Danika

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
    Thank you so much, Barbara. I really appreciate the kind review. :) Bev
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
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Hello there~
Wow! This is really well-written. I especially loved the way you described the scenes. I wonder what'll happen next! So interesting!
Thanks for sharing~
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
    Thanks so much for the great review, K. I appreciate you taking time to read! :) Bev
Comment from DALLAS01
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I was afraid I missed a chapter. Forgot all about Danika. Creating a little backstory here? This is a super chapter. Some great descriptive phrases that makes one's blood curdle.
I really liked your definition below:

Images like water bubbles struggled to the surface and popped just as she grasped them

Another great diagram:

Reverting to a technique taught to her by a former colleague and war correspondent, Danika pictured herself behind the lens of a camera. Pacing her breathing put her into a witness mode, and she waited for the scene to come forward

Whew being pulled into hell feet first:

Then, agony beyond anything she imagined, forced her to scream over and over as the soles of her feet melted beneath a wave of searing heat.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
    Hi, Dallas. Yes, Danika has been a minor character up to this point. I'm glad it wasn't too confusing. I'm trying to use this chapter as a further fleshing out of the level of dark energy we're dealing with.

    Thank you so much for very generous and encouraging review. Means a lot to me!

    :) Bev
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This is amazing! Every word has a purpose and you masterfully raise the energy level little by little as you progress through the chapter. Everything about it is perfection and completely hold the reader spellbound. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
    Thank you so much for this grand review. I really appreciate you taking time to read and review so generously, M. :) Bev