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keep your hope alive....

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Comment from Green Lake Girl
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Congratulations on your contest win. A very interesting story and such a surprise. Oh to be caught in a body that is foreign to your mind. Great story!

 Comment Written 16-May-2014


reply by the author on 16-May-2014
    thank you gl girl :)
Comment from nelliesellie
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I love the story. Sometimes people are handed a very wrong problem. Being born in the wrong body is a very hard problem. Every one has a hard problem when it comes to sex. Parents often reject children because they do not know how to deal with it. The writer dealt with the problem in secret. He (she) did not let it came a problem between him and his lover. Great work

 Comment Written 15-May-2014


reply by the author on 15-May-2014
    thank you ellie :-)
Comment from Terror2s
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This one is my favorite secret so far, and one that people must struggle with constantly. I did not notice any mistakes, and the lowercase format did not bother me. T2

 Comment Written 15-May-2014


reply by the author on 15-May-2014
    thank you t2 :-)
Comment from elchupakabra
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I was waiting for this letter lol, I knew it had to be in the pile somewhere. Much more elegant than a Jerry Springer episode for sure, so kudos on that, I believe you did a great job capturing the struggle of the trans. community in this piece. Great work overall here and good luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-May-2014


reply by the author on 15-May-2014
    thank you el :)
Comment from Norbanus
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An outstanding turn from your usual fare, shelley. I don't know what your competition has offered in this contest, but this one should land at the top of the heap. Super story.

 Comment Written 15-May-2014


reply by the author on 15-May-2014
    thank you norby! :-)
Comment from Pili Pubul
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Wow, powerful and moving letter to your fictitious love, after death.
It truly must be a very powerful feeling to go trough so much to change your gender. Interesting and good writing. Pili

 Comment Written 14-May-2014


reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    thank you pili :-)
reply by Pili Pubul on 14-May-2014
    My pleasure Shelley ...
Comment from Sasha
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This is a terrific entry for this contest. I have many gay friends and one that actually had the surgery. I can relate to being born in the wrong body after spending so much time talking to him/her. I also understand the difficulty in telling the truth, not knowing how it would be received. Since we are left not knowing how Mikal reacts to learning the truth, I am choosing to believe that while surprised and possibly shocked, he still loves her and understands. This is a superb entry and I sincerely wish you all the best.

 Comment Written 14-May-2014


reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    thank you smurphette :)
Comment from GeraldS
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This was a clever construction for this contest. The story packed a pretty solid punch for so few words. I think your entry will be tough to beat.

I wish you well in the contest!

 Comment Written 14-May-2014


reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    hope so lol! thank you gerald :-)
Comment from Eternal Muse
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That was a shocking and touching story. Very well told (though I'll never get used to that punctuation - well at least it is consistent).

One part doesn't sit well with me.

"at 19, i changed my name and started living as a woman. when i was 21 i finally had my surgery".

I wonder how Kevin passed for a woman for two years without surgery.

That is my only issue with the story.

I wish you luck in the contest, it was very well done and certainly does contain a "shocking surprise" as called for by the contest directives.

Love, Y.

 Comment Written 14-May-2014


reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    lots of women have to. they shave, use padded bras, let their hair grow and curl it or something. the surgery just refers to removing things that were not supposed to be there.... maybe i should say "physical surgery"? hmm will think how i can make it more clear.... thank you yeltel :-)

reply by Eternal Muse on 14-May-2014
    Perhaps, "the actual transformation surgery"?
Comment from Erik McGinley
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Wow! I don't really understand those things and I suspect very few people actually do.

I felt genuinely sad when I read your story. Maybe someone gender changed is more acceptable than the gut churning obscenity, for a guy at least, of screwing someone the same gender as you.

But it's very poignant to read about someone boxed into a life they did not want and could not choose.

I guess some people would read the above and think the writer a traitor. In a life where I have been repeatedly abused by deceit, no matter what other feelings I might have and they would be ambivalent, I would love the person for being honest about such a difficult subject.

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 Comment Written 14-May-2014


reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    "gut churning obscenity of screwing someone the same gender as you"??!??

    say what?!?
reply by Erik McGinley on 14-May-2014
    I guess I meant as the same gender as myself - screwing a guy does not appeal even if he became a female

    I wasn't referring to you .. or was I? :P
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    lol no. not me. but my nephew is gay and anytime someone says something derogatory about gays, it turns my stomach lol