To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Soul's Silent Sonata"Free Verse Poetry
18 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed the alliteration in your title and your patterned lines plus dramatic presentation. Your "death tango" metaphor is very powerful with your "counterpoint". Cheers- Joan
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I enjoyed the alliteration in your title and your patterned lines plus dramatic presentation. Your "death tango" metaphor is very powerful with your "counterpoint". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 03-May-2014
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Lovely poem, Mike. I always love the way you "scatter" your poem across the page. It's part of the allure. My favorite phrases: death tango, whispering stars.
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Lovely poem, Mike. I always love the way you "scatter" your poem across the page. It's part of the allure. My favorite phrases: death tango, whispering stars.
Comment Written 02-May-2014
Comment from seaglass
I played Moonlight Sonata at a piano recital. All you say about this piece, in your author's notes are true. Beautiful in melody it is preferable to hear it played with feeling. It makes a great metaphor for a relationship that has become mundane.
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I played Moonlight Sonata at a piano recital. All you say about this piece, in your author's notes are true. Beautiful in melody it is preferable to hear it played with feeling. It makes a great metaphor for a relationship that has become mundane.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
I really loved the way you wrote this as the "Moonlight Sonata." I think this is the kind of "experimental" poetry they were wanting in a journal that just declined some of mine. It was beautiful, and takes the reader on such a lovely journey of love, romance and reminiscence. I love the "death tango with no flare." The rest of this stanza, however, is grammatically incorrect & a little clunky in what is otherwise a lovely, lyrical reading experience.
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I really loved the way you wrote this as the "Moonlight Sonata." I think this is the kind of "experimental" poetry they were wanting in a journal that just declined some of mine. It was beautiful, and takes the reader on such a lovely journey of love, romance and reminiscence. I love the "death tango with no flare." The rest of this stanza, however, is grammatically incorrect & a little clunky in what is otherwise a lovely, lyrical reading experience.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Dam----I'm speechless. I could look at this picture all day! This writing style is perfect, has imagination. This is art!! Only wish I had a six. This has got to be a top three for me. I will bookcase this unit I am mesmerized! I hold my brearth as I gaze at this beautiful image. Words can not express how unique his art form is. Oh---this may have been a winner! I can't say more than that or get myself in deep shit. I can't say yours is this the best or Word Girl's. She reads reviews. I'm in awe, Mikey, this has to be my favorite. I knew you would come up with something extrodinare. Fantastic! A winner! wackydo
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Dam----I'm speechless. I could look at this picture all day! This writing style is perfect, has imagination. This is art!! Only wish I had a six. This has got to be a top three for me. I will bookcase this unit I am mesmerized! I hold my brearth as I gaze at this beautiful image. Words can not express how unique his art form is. Oh---this may have been a winner! I can't say more than that or get myself in deep shit. I can't say yours is this the best or Word Girl's. She reads reviews. I'm in awe, Mikey, this has to be my favorite. I knew you would come up with something extrodinare. Fantastic! A winner! wackydo
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from royowen
I particularly like the lines : I rise on the mist to meet you, over the ocean that moves as we move! This is a finely written piece, although I find my eyes having trouble following the disengaged letters on the page! But enough to tell me this a beautifully written work! Blessings, Roy.
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I particularly like the lines : I rise on the mist to meet you, over the ocean that moves as we move! This is a finely written piece, although I find my eyes having trouble following the disengaged letters on the page! But enough to tell me this a beautifully written work! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from Spitfire
A luscious and so true extended metaphor about how we let romance die after a certain number of years together.
mundane march, tango with no flare, blinding interlude. And then the reawakening, falling in love all over again. Beautiful, mikey. A poem of the month for sure.
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A luscious and so true extended metaphor about how we let romance die after a certain number of years together.
mundane march, tango with no flare, blinding interlude. And then the reawakening, falling in love all over again. Beautiful, mikey. A poem of the month for sure.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
Mikey, there is much wisdom found within the lines of this free verse - "...and now the moon rises and for once I see it..." SO many marriages are challenged by the everyday, humdrum obligations!
Forget marriages - even just examine how easily any of us lose something very precious in the struggle to achieve whatever goals we see as "success" - our sense of wonder...
What a wonderful, insightful poem!
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Mikey, there is much wisdom found within the lines of this free verse - "...and now the moon rises and for once I see it..." SO many marriages are challenged by the everyday, humdrum obligations!
Forget marriages - even just examine how easily any of us lose something very precious in the struggle to achieve whatever goals we see as "success" - our sense of wonder...
What a wonderful, insightful poem!
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from Loren (7)
Out of six stars, sorry. But amen to your author's notes. This was the first piece I ever played in a state competition and when I walked onto that stage with just me and the grand piano,it was not the notes I was concerned about, it was the feeling and expression of the music. I knew if I could get that all else would fall into line. What you've captured here in words is exactly the way I interpreted the music and placed 2nd in the competition. The way your words flow and cascade are visually beautiful and I could easily follow your thoughts as the music played in my mind.
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Out of six stars, sorry. But amen to your author's notes. This was the first piece I ever played in a state competition and when I walked onto that stage with just me and the grand piano,it was not the notes I was concerned about, it was the feeling and expression of the music. I knew if I could get that all else would fall into line. What you've captured here in words is exactly the way I interpreted the music and placed 2nd in the competition. The way your words flow and cascade are visually beautiful and I could easily follow your thoughts as the music played in my mind.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
I forget that you really are a poet that writes stories. This looks abd sounds and feels like music while at the same time admonishing the reader to feel the message of love and not ignore it. Participate with every note of your being. Awesome piece. NG
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I forget that you really are a poet that writes stories. This looks abd sounds and feels like music while at the same time admonishing the reader to feel the message of love and not ignore it. Participate with every note of your being. Awesome piece. NG
Comment Written 01-May-2014
