History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Scientific Inquisition"Poems that tell stories of long ago
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tom - Wow is the first word that comes to mind. What a stunning piece of work to read and ponder over. This is awesome in every way. Your author notes were just as great. I so enjoyed this one and you did an exceptional job on it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Dear Tom - Wow is the first word that comes to mind. What a stunning piece of work to read and ponder over. This is awesome in every way. Your author notes were just as great. I so enjoyed this one and you did an exceptional job on it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 01-May-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you Maureen. Reviews like that makes it all worth the effort.
Comment from NicciFaye
So powerful. When I read structure poems like this...you really make me want to take a stab at it. I think I get discouraged because of all the science formula's behind it to make sure its structure to its format. I will have to practice this...I loved this poem Trischel. You are truly a master at all forms..daring and bravely conqured.
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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So powerful. When I read structure poems like this...you really make me want to take a stab at it. I think I get discouraged because of all the science formula's behind it to make sure its structure to its format. I will have to practice this...I loved this poem Trischel. You are truly a master at all forms..daring and bravely conqured.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you Nicci. This one took a lot of effort. I am glad that you like it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What an amazing poem, Tom. Life in those times were very dangerous, and it was the church that made it so. Religion has been used for many injustices, it is a wonder anyone goes to church anymore. It still happens today. This is such a good contest entry, Tom, a wonderful read, and well written. I wish you every success in the contest. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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What an amazing poem, Tom. Life in those times were very dangerous, and it was the church that made it so. Religion has been used for many injustices, it is a wonder anyone goes to church anymore. It still happens today. This is such a good contest entry, Tom, a wonderful read, and well written. I wish you every success in the contest. xsx sandra
Comment Written 01-May-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you Sandra. I tried to capture the sense of joy of scientific discovery and the terror that would have been felt as the church clamped down.
Comment from rod007
This is an extremely thought-provoking poem. It flows well. The poem leads the reader into a path where their bigotry, prejudice and suspicion poisons the pure air of true scientific knowledge. It is a tale that has repeatedly plagued history. These false doctrines and religion bearing their influence in destroying morality and greatness. Well done, Tom. You deserved the six stars for the hard work you put into this and the brilliant poetic tale you told. Keep up the great writing, friend.
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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This is an extremely thought-provoking poem. It flows well. The poem leads the reader into a path where their bigotry, prejudice and suspicion poisons the pure air of true scientific knowledge. It is a tale that has repeatedly plagued history. These false doctrines and religion bearing their influence in destroying morality and greatness. Well done, Tom. You deserved the six stars for the hard work you put into this and the brilliant poetic tale you told. Keep up the great writing, friend.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you rod. It was a long read. Glad you got through it. Really pleased with that high ranking.
Comment from Jackarrie
Wow, what a wonderful write, a crown of superb sonnets, I thoroughly enjoyed every one, I have always been fascinated by this history, of how the church was so closed to science and truth.
I really wish I had a six for this marvelous work of art.
this is one I wrote about Galileo.
Galileo galilei how did they not see?
How valuable your work was going to be
You tried to enlighten, but it was in vain
Truth was held back, by the religious reign
Your genius punished, for an astute contribution
Sharing this knowledge would reach the solution
Aristotle's view was wrong, his world was geocentric
Galileo had the truth, no doubts it was heliocentric
A martyr for science, struck down by religious bigotry
Because he tried to educate them on astrometry
Mary
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Wow, what a wonderful write, a crown of superb sonnets, I thoroughly enjoyed every one, I have always been fascinated by this history, of how the church was so closed to science and truth.
I really wish I had a six for this marvelous work of art.
this is one I wrote about Galileo.
Galileo galilei how did they not see?
How valuable your work was going to be
You tried to enlighten, but it was in vain
Truth was held back, by the religious reign
Your genius punished, for an astute contribution
Sharing this knowledge would reach the solution
Aristotle's view was wrong, his world was geocentric
Galileo had the truth, no doubts it was heliocentric
A martyr for science, struck down by religious bigotry
Because he tried to educate them on astrometry
Mary
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you Mary. I loved your poem . It hit on the heliocentric view. I didn't touch on that.
Comment from Muffins
Breath taking work marvelously laid out. I heard music behind the words, light and hopeful in the beginning then dark and dangerous toward the end. A powerful theme to take on and create it into Heroic Sonnet form. You made it look easy but I have a feeling it wasn't. Thank you for presenting this to us.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Breath taking work marvelously laid out. I heard music behind the words, light and hopeful in the beginning then dark and dangerous toward the end. A powerful theme to take on and create it into Heroic Sonnet form. You made it look easy but I have a feeling it wasn't. Thank you for presenting this to us.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thank you muffins. Yes, it wasn't easy. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from ravenblack
Excellent crown of sonnets, the story of the ravages of ignorance during the renaissance carried out well through your narrator. Sad thing is science is still regarded in this way today, by religion but also by huge corporations that buy their own version of the truth when it comes to such things as global warming. I really enjoyed this and wish I had a six. Just one typo- quam should be qualm.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Excellent crown of sonnets, the story of the ravages of ignorance during the renaissance carried out well through your narrator. Sad thing is science is still regarded in this way today, by religion but also by huge corporations that buy their own version of the truth when it comes to such things as global warming. I really enjoyed this and wish I had a six. Just one typo- quam should be qualm.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thank you ravenblack. I am very happy that you got to review it. I did fix that typo.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Scientific Inquisition" is exceptional in the amount of talent and work it took to put together 7 good sonnets on a single theme that follows the required format. It also emphasizes an important theme; how conviction that truth is known can block scientific research. "quam" should be spelled qualm" toon is an abbreviation for cartoon which makes no sense in context and is used simply as a forced rhyme for tune. Good luck in the contest. It is a good attempt to tell an important story poetically.
Preston
Preston
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"Scientific Inquisition" is exceptional in the amount of talent and work it took to put together 7 good sonnets on a single theme that follows the required format. It also emphasizes an important theme; how conviction that truth is known can block scientific research. "quam" should be spelled qualm" toon is an abbreviation for cartoon which makes no sense in context and is used simply as a forced rhyme for tune. Good luck in the contest. It is a good attempt to tell an important story poetically.
Preston
Preston
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thank you Preston. I fixed the qualm and tune errors. I appreciate you reading this long narrative poem, commenting, and ranking it so highly.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Wow! The amount of research that must've gone into this poem. Quite a Herculian effort. Very well done. It's hard to imagine such brutality. It's amazing what people will do to protect their archaic beliefs.
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Wow! The amount of research that must've gone into this poem. Quite a Herculian effort. Very well done. It's hard to imagine such brutality. It's amazing what people will do to protect their archaic beliefs.
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thank you for you review. I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment. Brutal and amazing certainly sums the story.
Comment from sunnilicious
Exceptionally written historical story in a poem. Great visual imagery created. Informative. Interesting. Well thought out and clearly written. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Great author notes. Fascinating poem.
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Exceptionally written historical story in a poem. Great visual imagery created. Informative. Interesting. Well thought out and clearly written. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Great author notes. Fascinating poem.
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thank you Alicia. Took some time to write this one.
