The Bard of Bel Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Out of Ice. The Circus Comes to Town"A homeless man sees more than people realize.
15 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Let me tell you something, Sandy - add comma for direct address
Love your description of the reading of the will and the pop-culture Elephant Man references LOL
Excellent dialogue that conveys strong emotion well
a most engaging narrative style and a fun plot line
Brooke :-)
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Let me tell you something, Sandy - add comma for direct address
Love your description of the reading of the will and the pop-culture Elephant Man references LOL
Excellent dialogue that conveys strong emotion well
a most engaging narrative style and a fun plot line
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is definately and answer to part of the puzzle. Money does crazy things to people. Follow the money is the phrase of the day. This one was creative. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is definately and answer to part of the puzzle. Money does crazy things to people. Follow the money is the phrase of the day. This one was creative. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
I would like to say i knew it. Hahaua!!!! But who onows what you are going to come up with. Awesome chapter. Pleased to see Harpster alive. Interesting to learn even more about the Bard. Cool. Now the breakout. Awesome!!! NG
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I would like to say i knew it. Hahaua!!!! But who onows what you are going to come up with. Awesome chapter. Pleased to see Harpster alive. Interesting to learn even more about the Bard. Cool. Now the breakout. Awesome!!! NG
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Sorry, for the delay. I been having boo coo company lately. They tapping in me fanstory time, it's frustrating. Got to earn me a certificate and cent pumps. Let's see what surprises you got waiting for me. You getting there, Mikey. Chapter by chapter. You build a strong foundation one brick at a time.
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Sorry, for the delay. I been having boo coo company lately. They tapping in me fanstory time, it's frustrating. Got to earn me a certificate and cent pumps. Let's see what surprises you got waiting for me. You getting there, Mikey. Chapter by chapter. You build a strong foundation one brick at a time.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from seaglass
Ah ha, I know it. Wonder what his crazy son thought he would end up doing with his dad by letting him stay alive. Sounds like a lot of fighting on the way for heir ship. Probably DNA testing.
I think it would be funny if the DNA testing proved that Winston was a son from someone else like his mothers secret lover. That would cook his greedy little goose.
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Ah ha, I know it. Wonder what his crazy son thought he would end up doing with his dad by letting him stay alive. Sounds like a lot of fighting on the way for heir ship. Probably DNA testing.
I think it would be funny if the DNA testing proved that Winston was a son from someone else like his mothers secret lover. That would cook his greedy little goose.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from ravenblack
I knew Harpster was still alive. Just how do you come up with the Bard' s dialogue- sonambulise a shirtless Sade and an Abe Vigoda moment? Were you dropped on your funnybone...And then your head as a child?
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I knew Harpster was still alive. Just how do you come up with the Bard' s dialogue- sonambulise a shirtless Sade and an Abe Vigoda moment? Were you dropped on your funnybone...And then your head as a child?
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from l.raven
OMG Michael, how many hires are there???LOL...and we found Harpster and Bard...both know to much...but they are friends..and now talking to each other..I changed my mind...It's not Bard...I said it before...not dead....and the Enquirer...LOL..what next??? ok Next...moving on...a wonderful story and a great write...luff
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OMG Michael, how many hires are there???LOL...and we found Harpster and Bard...both know to much...but they are friends..and now talking to each other..I changed my mind...It's not Bard...I said it before...not dead....and the Enquirer...LOL..what next??? ok Next...moving on...a wonderful story and a great write...luff
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Yes, it's a great story, I am glad the Bard us still alive, I think you may need him to help solve the crime! Well written with life like characters, good dialogue, great story line. Faye
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Yes, it's a great story, I am glad the Bard us still alive, I think you may need him to help solve the crime! Well written with life like characters, good dialogue, great story line. Faye
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story/ You gave a personality to a homeless man. You showed the value he had in his life. You pointed Out the problems Ex-military have. The Bard has a friend in the detective. You showed powerful doing not very good things Great work.
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I love the story/ You gave a personality to a homeless man. You showed the value he had in his life. You pointed Out the problems Ex-military have. The Bard has a friend in the detective. You showed powerful doing not very good things Great work.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I get confused between the father and son names. Winston is the father or the son? The Bard is over the top in his ranting. I do understand now that the father has been kidnapped by his son and now they have kidnapped the Bard as well. I understand the Harpster is the father. Maybe you need to give them one name and stick to it like Jr. and Senior. ...LOL I will stay with it though. Nancy
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I get confused between the father and son names. Winston is the father or the son? The Bard is over the top in his ranting. I do understand now that the father has been kidnapped by his son and now they have kidnapped the Bard as well. I understand the Harpster is the father. Maybe you need to give them one name and stick to it like Jr. and Senior. ...LOL I will stay with it though. Nancy
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
