A Mentally Ill Mother and No Father
Prose and poetry jamboree18 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
What an interesting halibun, I would call it. Lots of meat to chew on. Good observation of our forgetfulness of how we feel about happenings in the past. Wonderful description of the paper boats floating through the mountain.
Something is not missing if it doesn't exist.-- the old tree falling analogy.
Great stuff, mikey.
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What an interesting halibun, I would call it. Lots of meat to chew on. Good observation of our forgetfulness of how we feel about happenings in the past. Wonderful description of the paper boats floating through the mountain.
Something is not missing if it doesn't exist.-- the old tree falling analogy.
Great stuff, mikey.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
Comment from Green Lake Girl
A very esoteric piece, Mikey. Every reader will bring something with them when reading this and take away something completely different when they leave. For me, I love the little paper sailboats. They present very whimsically and mystically. Well done.
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A very esoteric piece, Mikey. Every reader will bring something with them when reading this and take away something completely different when they leave. For me, I love the little paper sailboats. They present very whimsically and mystically. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
aaaahhhh you flat rocked it my friend. Insanity followed by sanity but I thought you'd take it the other way.
A truly delightful and different read. but you!
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aaaahhhh you flat rocked it my friend. Insanity followed by sanity but I thought you'd take it the other way.
A truly delightful and different read. but you!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
Comment from country ranch writer
Old wives tales and myths are what this world is made of and through it all we have survived. you have become quite the philospher
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Old wives tales and myths are what this world is made of and through it all we have survived. you have become quite the philospher
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
Comment from ravenblack
A jamboree jambalaya. I don't understand it all, but that is okay. I get the feel, the lost pieces of ourselves those paper sailboats that if we were to understand or relive all at once, the volcano erupts, the dam released. Or the boats our little hopes or the little boats and gravid mountain you trying to understand through pieces cast to the stream your relationships. Whatever the case or none of them, don't hesitate to push the boundaries. It's worth the trip.
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A jamboree jambalaya. I don't understand it all, but that is okay. I get the feel, the lost pieces of ourselves those paper sailboats that if we were to understand or relive all at once, the volcano erupts, the dam released. Or the boats our little hopes or the little boats and gravid mountain you trying to understand through pieces cast to the stream your relationships. Whatever the case or none of them, don't hesitate to push the boundaries. It's worth the trip.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
The title sounds somewhat sad. I'm curious, when did you write this one. This one slipped by me almost. You still got a big imagination Mikey. I like the part about the Dutch boy and I really liked the part about them paper sailboats through the cave. What is the use of living if we got no dreams ... later Lion King/
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The title sounds somewhat sad. I'm curious, when did you write this one. This one slipped by me almost. You still got a big imagination Mikey. I like the part about the Dutch boy and I really liked the part about them paper sailboats through the cave. What is the use of living if we got no dreams ... later Lion King/
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Eloquently written with great choice of words.
fantastically philosophical but I relate to he first part very well. I remember with clarity every event in my life from at least the age of three. Clothes I wore etc.
An enjoyable read
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Eloquently written with great choice of words.
fantastically philosophical but I relate to he first part very well. I remember with clarity every event in my life from at least the age of three. Clothes I wore etc.
An enjoyable read
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
Comment from mermaids
I love the part about the paper sailboats going into the mountain and making the decision to believe they were safe. You have a smooth flow of words throughout this mixture of prose and poetry that is pleasant to read out loud.
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I love the part about the paper sailboats going into the mountain and making the decision to believe they were safe. You have a smooth flow of words throughout this mixture of prose and poetry that is pleasant to read out loud.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
Comment from seaglass
This is well written in grammar and complete thought with riddles tossed in for good measure. The Night Wolf is growing very Philosophy after being struck by the blood moon.
Is the biographical? I wondered at the connection of the title and the content? I have always mused at clichés such as some you intertwined here, but I also refused to be guided by them, insisting that noting can be applied generically. (i.e.) To me, "the early worm gets eaten by the bird."
For me, the most meaningful line is, "Something is not missing if it doesn't exist."
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This is well written in grammar and complete thought with riddles tossed in for good measure. The Night Wolf is growing very Philosophy after being struck by the blood moon.
Is the biographical? I wondered at the connection of the title and the content? I have always mused at clichés such as some you intertwined here, but I also refused to be guided by them, insisting that noting can be applied generically. (i.e.) To me, "the early worm gets eaten by the bird."
For me, the most meaningful line is, "Something is not missing if it doesn't exist."
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is an interesting one worthy of multiple meanings to capture them all. Interesting metaphors that would be a delight to therapists! LOL Seriously, these are musings worth considering. Wisdom must accompany such pushes, however. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is an interesting one worthy of multiple meanings to capture them all. Interesting metaphors that would be a delight to therapists! LOL Seriously, these are musings worth considering. Wisdom must accompany such pushes, however. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
