The Bard of Bel Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Will, Jagger and a Shakedown"A homeless man sees more than people realize.
15 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this will business should prove to be interesting as to how the information gets to his daughter. No spags that I could see. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this will business should prove to be interesting as to how the information gets to his daughter. No spags that I could see. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Good chapter. I like when you jump between characters and storylines, it keeps things moving, and keeps the characters fresh in the readers minds. Good story, off to the next chapter.
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Good chapter. I like when you jump between characters and storylines, it keeps things moving, and keeps the characters fresh in the readers minds. Good story, off to the next chapter.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
Comment from l.raven
HI Columbo, will there is always that one person that comes out of the woodwork when someone dies...and of course not everyone wants curtain things to be found out....and I'm with Detective Adrian...just can't put my finger on it Yet!!!LOL...every chapter gets better...Luff Linda xxoo like playing Clue!!!luff Linda xxoo
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HI Columbo, will there is always that one person that comes out of the woodwork when someone dies...and of course not everyone wants curtain things to be found out....and I'm with Detective Adrian...just can't put my finger on it Yet!!!LOL...every chapter gets better...Luff Linda xxoo like playing Clue!!!luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
Comment from Sasha
This is building into a fascinating story. Lots to think about and not too confusing...thanks. I look forward to the next post. Nice work with this one.
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This is building into a fascinating story. Lots to think about and not too confusing...thanks. I look forward to the next post. Nice work with this one.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
This is really exciting and is taking off nicely. So many possibilities -- I love the way you brig in the oldies Like Mick Jagger and the Stones. I thought this was well-told and formatted, with just enough action and mystery to keep the reader intrigued. Well done.
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This is really exciting and is taking off nicely. So many possibilities -- I love the way you brig in the oldies Like Mick Jagger and the Stones. I thought this was well-told and formatted, with just enough action and mystery to keep the reader intrigued. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
The applause drifted through the room. It was genuine really loved how this almost clapped in my mind beautifully penned really enjoyable read mikey
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The applause drifted through the room. It was genuine really loved how this almost clapped in my mind beautifully penned really enjoyable read mikey
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I think it will be an interesting story when you get the foundation laid. I will let the writer critic the writing and I will just say what I find interesting. LOL That should cover everything. Good job. Nancy
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I think it will be an interesting story when you get the foundation laid. I will let the writer critic the writing and I will just say what I find interesting. LOL That should cover everything. Good job. Nancy
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Mikey.
This is another good chapter. I like how you are showing different characters, all linked to Blackwell. You've shown well their individual lives and attitudes.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
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Hi, Mikey.
This is another good chapter. I like how you are showing different characters, all linked to Blackwell. You've shown well their individual lives and attitudes.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
Fifty one per cent for the oldest child. That is Ruby. That could be a major war if she came forward. But she may be the best one to run the company. Seniors death is already suspicious. It will be hard to shut down the investigations, official and unofficial. Great work.
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Fifty one per cent for the oldest child. That is Ruby. That could be a major war if she came forward. But she may be the best one to run the company. Seniors death is already suspicious. It will be hard to shut down the investigations, official and unofficial. Great work.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from Nosha17
I think you are right to include the different facets of all the characters so we the readers can understand the intrigue and plot better and see what roles they play in the unravelling. Your characterisations are always well drawn. Interesting chapter, keep up the good work. Faye
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I think you are right to include the different facets of all the characters so we the readers can understand the intrigue and plot better and see what roles they play in the unravelling. Your characterisations are always well drawn. Interesting chapter, keep up the good work. Faye
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
