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Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Rhyming Orange"Free Verse Poetry
22 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
touching vision dear friend await the crash of angered-water on the beach tense and trembling, terribly taut I, holding your breath in the palm of my hand beautifully penned excellently crafted piece
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touching vision dear friend await the crash of angered-water on the beach tense and trembling, terribly taut I, holding your breath in the palm of my hand beautifully penned excellently crafted piece
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
Comment from Spitfire
A wonderful entry, mikey. Poetry is thinking outside the box. Your format indicates that. Also the use of three different colored words. You are taking FS by storm, my friend.
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A wonderful entry, mikey. Poetry is thinking outside the box. Your format indicates that. Also the use of three different colored words. You are taking FS by storm, my friend.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
Comment from lancellot
Original and all from the place where your creative musings flow. Hey, tell it like it is, there is no shame in being true to who you are. you need no meter or structure, art is free of form and full of truth. Well done. This looks like a winner.
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Original and all from the place where your creative musings flow. Hey, tell it like it is, there is no shame in being true to who you are. you need no meter or structure, art is free of form and full of truth. Well done. This looks like a winner.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
Comment from SLHarper
I had to read your reviews for a little bit of a reality check. Also, I wasn't sure if my "interpretation" of your title was close, or if I was missing something. Well, you rhymed Orange. I suspect that you do so in most facets in your life, with every "door hinge" you come across! But, kudos to you for not actually trying for slant rhymes or approximate rhymes, or other crimes. You are right that as a poet, you are... That is the great Michael Cahill existentialist statement of the century! Existentialist Philosopher, Novelist, Giant Marshmallow, and even (as one reviewer called you) Peot -- you are so many things that don't remotely rhyme with orange, but you are YOU, and that's all that really matters to me! Thanks for sharing this lovely glimpse into your wonderful "peotic" mind! Hugs! Steph
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I had to read your reviews for a little bit of a reality check. Also, I wasn't sure if my "interpretation" of your title was close, or if I was missing something. Well, you rhymed Orange. I suspect that you do so in most facets in your life, with every "door hinge" you come across! But, kudos to you for not actually trying for slant rhymes or approximate rhymes, or other crimes. You are right that as a poet, you are... That is the great Michael Cahill existentialist statement of the century! Existentialist Philosopher, Novelist, Giant Marshmallow, and even (as one reviewer called you) Peot -- you are so many things that don't remotely rhyme with orange, but you are YOU, and that's all that really matters to me! Thanks for sharing this lovely glimpse into your wonderful "peotic" mind! Hugs! Steph
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
Comment from Sasha
this is absolutely brilliant. I agree, both poets and prose writers should write something that is as completely in a form that pleases one's self as possible...I know that holds true for me. This is a superb entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
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this is absolutely brilliant. I agree, both poets and prose writers should write something that is as completely in a form that pleases one's self as possible...I know that holds true for me. This is a superb entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
Comment from damettagin
Love your use of unique non-conformance of presentation, words shifts & font sizes, lends to a more interesting read. Adopting many forms & aspects of poetry throughout gives it more credence to what poetry means to you.
I had to lookup this word "ariafactification" and couldn't find it. Should it be ' aria factification ' ?
Was a fun read
Well done
:) Dame
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Love your use of unique non-conformance of presentation, words shifts & font sizes, lends to a more interesting read. Adopting many forms & aspects of poetry throughout gives it more credence to what poetry means to you.
I had to lookup this word "ariafactification" and couldn't find it. Should it be ' aria factification ' ?
Was a fun read
Well done
:) Dame
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
Comment from GWHARGIS
I liked the notion that you are the God of your poetic universe. The images were very diverse and your imagination was tuned up and wonderful. Nice rhythm and I liked the presentation where the lines either sped up or slowed down. Very effective. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
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I liked the notion that you are the God of your poetic universe. The images were very diverse and your imagination was tuned up and wonderful. Nice rhythm and I liked the presentation where the lines either sped up or slowed down. Very effective. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
Comment from ravenblack
I am a poet/ as a poet I am- really, could not have stated it better. There is a quote, can't remember what poet said it, but " a poem shouldn't mean. It should be". Rhyming orange- a monumental task (impossible) but in your world, where water rushes skyward, Orange can rhyme...in your imagination (the Orange fonts driving this home). My only problem is ariafactication- I have no problem with made up words, but this one just seems to call too much attention to itself and on each read (yep- read it more than thrice) I stumbled on it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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I am a poet/ as a poet I am- really, could not have stated it better. There is a quote, can't remember what poet said it, but " a poem shouldn't mean. It should be". Rhyming orange- a monumental task (impossible) but in your world, where water rushes skyward, Orange can rhyme...in your imagination (the Orange fonts driving this home). My only problem is ariafactication- I have no problem with made up words, but this one just seems to call too much attention to itself and on each read (yep- read it more than thrice) I stumbled on it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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What a great review. Thank you so much. Insanely behind. Jumping forward. I changed that word on your advice. I think you are right. I really don't want people spending time trying to pronounce it and all of that when it doesn't mean anything anyway other than "I can do this". Thanks again. mikey
Comment from DR DIP
That is absolutely fkg brilliant! your use of every poetic trick is sublimely applied I love the structure I love the cryptic lines I love the alliteration I love the metaphor
what I don't like is the fact that I can't write like that and I so admire peots with their own slant and style and individuality!
well done Michael, well done!
dip
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That is absolutely fkg brilliant! your use of every poetic trick is sublimely applied I love the structure I love the cryptic lines I love the alliteration I love the metaphor
what I don't like is the fact that I can't write like that and I so admire peots with their own slant and style and individuality!
well done Michael, well done!
dip
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
Comment from krys123
Mikey, your poem caught me off guard for why I really don't know but It came upon me So suddenly. All express my feelings rather than try to express what your poem means. RI will say that this is very inventive and creative in your writing format flows smoothly Throughout the poem. I feel that the poetry is within you and you are within the poetry. Thank you for sharing and posting your work for others and may Lord be with you always.
Alex
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Mikey, your poem caught me off guard for why I really don't know but It came upon me So suddenly. All express my feelings rather than try to express what your poem means. RI will say that this is very inventive and creative in your writing format flows smoothly Throughout the poem. I feel that the poetry is within you and you are within the poetry. Thank you for sharing and posting your work for others and may Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
