Nonet Poem (acrostic nonet)
nonet acrostic4 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Wow, what a creative entry! I like how you added the challenge of exemplifying the subject in it's own concrete form. The phrasing is also unique. I especially liked the personification of the lines (braiding) and words (dancing). Good flow and smooth enjambment give this a polished feel not easy to achieve within the limitations of either form.
Original, touching and expressive lines:
Open chapters of heartbeat tears
Never fully touched, thumping
Everlasting dreams wide
Interesting choice: thumping
Suggest a comma here for dramatic pause effect:
To speak their story(--)
Plead bloody ink
A striking presentation as well, with the bleeding ink artwork.
This is a strong contender for my vote due to the creativity and fluid alliance of two strict forms.
Good luck
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Wow, what a creative entry! I like how you added the challenge of exemplifying the subject in it's own concrete form. The phrasing is also unique. I especially liked the personification of the lines (braiding) and words (dancing). Good flow and smooth enjambment give this a polished feel not easy to achieve within the limitations of either form.
Original, touching and expressive lines:
Open chapters of heartbeat tears
Never fully touched, thumping
Everlasting dreams wide
Interesting choice: thumping
Suggest a comma here for dramatic pause effect:
To speak their story(--)
Plead bloody ink
A striking presentation as well, with the bleeding ink artwork.
This is a strong contender for my vote due to the creativity and fluid alliance of two strict forms.
Good luck
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Wow you always amaze me with your thorough reviews. You read so deeply into the pieces which is the BEST compliment to a writer. I put a great deal into every word and it means so much that you find that. I'm going to add the comma. Thank you! I rarely do these types of poems but I have been trying different spins on them as of late. I'm so glad you appreciate that. I'm a little bummed I didn't place in the Acrostic contest. I thought mine was unique and actually told a deep story.
Anyway, thank you so much for reading, and for liking the different take. You're the best.
healing thoughts... ;)
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Thanks for your gracious and enthusiastic response and healing thoughts as well :-)))
I voted for yours.
Don't be bummed, because the popular taste in these contest seems to be never for the higher caliber writing. I used to be amazed how really mediocre (and even lame) stuff often wins those contests when much better entries hardly get votes. Anyway, you got mine!
Warmest Smiles, rd
Comment from daniela.albu
A lovely nonet so well complemented by the artwork. Words and ink are the branches of the tree of dreams. Sorrows and joys, life's experiences transposed into words breed this dream tree of ink - you are also so well describing the characteristics of the nonet poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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A lovely nonet so well complemented by the artwork. Words and ink are the branches of the tree of dreams. Sorrows and joys, life's experiences transposed into words breed this dream tree of ink - you are also so well describing the characteristics of the nonet poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Wow your review is poetic in itself. Love t! You humble me and I thank you. Truly.
Comment from WLHall
I give you 5 stars because you not only wrote a nonet poem, but an acrostic one, too. And the shape came out perfectly. Also, it flowed well. Very nice.
WHall
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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I give you 5 stars because you not only wrote a nonet poem, but an acrostic one, too. And the shape came out perfectly. Also, it flowed well. Very nice.
WHall
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Thank you! I'm so glad you appreciate it! Thank you for the five too! :)
Comment from barleygirl
Very creative idea, well-crafted blend of the acrostic and the nonet. The first line is very original and pulls the reader in immediately. Really enjoyed this, about two of my favorite forms for the little bit of poetry I do write. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Very creative idea, well-crafted blend of the acrostic and the nonet. The first line is very original and pulls the reader in immediately. Really enjoyed this, about two of my favorite forms for the little bit of poetry I do write. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much! I'm so grateful you liked it! I'm glad it pulled you in ;)
