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Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Good Vibes"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from Michaelk
So is Edwards air force base really friendly, or is it a ruse? You've got me completely paranoid reading this story. I don't know who to trust.
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So is Edwards air force base really friendly, or is it a ruse? You've got me completely paranoid reading this story. I don't know who to trust.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
Comment from ravenblack
The president in Canada? President Rob Ford (mayor of Toronto). Now we are in trouble. You know, there is a remake of Godzilla in the works- send the Iranian/Chinese warships some of that.
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The president in Canada? President Rob Ford (mayor of Toronto). Now we are in trouble. You know, there is a remake of Godzilla in the works- send the Iranian/Chinese warships some of that.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
That fleet is scary. They are getting contacts with people that may help. It is going to be hard to divide the good from the bad. It is time to start a brave new world. Great work.
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That fleet is scary. They are getting contacts with people that may help. It is going to be hard to divide the good from the bad. It is time to start a brave new world. Great work.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
Comment from Sasha
This is another terrific chapter. I am still nervous when they talk on the CB...not really knowing if the person they are talking to is friend or foe. I now Johnny and some of he others can mentally read the messages, but I am still leery. I guess that just my suspicious nature. I anxiously await the next installment. Terrific work with this one.
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This is another terrific chapter. I am still nervous when they talk on the CB...not really knowing if the person they are talking to is friend or foe. I now Johnny and some of he others can mentally read the messages, but I am still leery. I guess that just my suspicious nature. I anxiously await the next installment. Terrific work with this one.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
Comment from ragamuffin
I wonder if Edwards AFB folks can be trusted. Wonder who's coming in the ships too. Chilly. That might indicate a nuclear bomb going off somewhere throwing off all kinds of dust and debris causing a "nuclear winter," but holes in the ozone would create heat. Of course with the winter/early spring we're actually having here in NE Ohio, I'd believe anything could cause any and everything. We're all over the freaking board with the weather in short periods of time to time. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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I wonder if Edwards AFB folks can be trusted. Wonder who's coming in the ships too. Chilly. That might indicate a nuclear bomb going off somewhere throwing off all kinds of dust and debris causing a "nuclear winter," but holes in the ozone would create heat. Of course with the winter/early spring we're actually having here in NE Ohio, I'd believe anything could cause any and everything. We're all over the freaking board with the weather in short periods of time to time. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
You are stroking on 8 cylinders. Some of this filled in some grey areas. At least you got communications with the oust side world. You talk about sand, Iran must be one of the enemy. Yep, it takes a lot of J-P 7 jet fuel for bombers. Takes a squadron to keep them birds in the air. If you don't fly them birds you will encounter problems. I know what it takes, being in a Navy squadron. You got to preflight them daily to keep them in the air and lots on manteinance. A lot more than meets the eye viewed from civilians point of view, ain't that simple, takes lots of man hours. I have fueled planes and have loaded nukes when I was on the bomb squad, Scrub that last message. I would also worry about subs, they carry nukes, ICCBN's, armed to the teeth and I doubt they were affected by the nuke blasts, whatnot. They can pop up anywhere if not found. They got a long range, one can carry 16 nuclear tipped missiles, devastating can wipe out cities under the cover of darkness. Be in your backyard, it's all over and you never knew they were there. There is a lot of mind warfare going on, I see. Believe me, this stuff exists, Top Secret experiments are going on, phycological warfare. Christine must be some sort of mindbender. Her ESP looks superior and looks like she could be the savior. I'm kinda wondering, how many survivors received them transmissions. Do they have the means to receive them transmissions? Better watch out, some of them could be spies or the enemy. The military has decoding devises, they can decode messages, i had a buddy in the Navy who was in cryto. They can break codes, you better be cautious who shows up. good luck Mikey, I'm sure you get lots of input. These are random thoughts but based on my experiences in the military.
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You are stroking on 8 cylinders. Some of this filled in some grey areas. At least you got communications with the oust side world. You talk about sand, Iran must be one of the enemy. Yep, it takes a lot of J-P 7 jet fuel for bombers. Takes a squadron to keep them birds in the air. If you don't fly them birds you will encounter problems. I know what it takes, being in a Navy squadron. You got to preflight them daily to keep them in the air and lots on manteinance. A lot more than meets the eye viewed from civilians point of view, ain't that simple, takes lots of man hours. I have fueled planes and have loaded nukes when I was on the bomb squad, Scrub that last message. I would also worry about subs, they carry nukes, ICCBN's, armed to the teeth and I doubt they were affected by the nuke blasts, whatnot. They can pop up anywhere if not found. They got a long range, one can carry 16 nuclear tipped missiles, devastating can wipe out cities under the cover of darkness. Be in your backyard, it's all over and you never knew they were there. There is a lot of mind warfare going on, I see. Believe me, this stuff exists, Top Secret experiments are going on, phycological warfare. Christine must be some sort of mindbender. Her ESP looks superior and looks like she could be the savior. I'm kinda wondering, how many survivors received them transmissions. Do they have the means to receive them transmissions? Better watch out, some of them could be spies or the enemy. The military has decoding devises, they can decode messages, i had a buddy in the Navy who was in cryto. They can break codes, you better be cautious who shows up. good luck Mikey, I'm sure you get lots of input. These are random thoughts but based on my experiences in the military.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
Comment from Nosha17
It is getting more exciting, it must be hard thinking of ideas on the way it is going. Maybe, have all those guys build a fortress, as I said before. Well written with strong story line, likeable characters. Faye
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It is getting more exciting, it must be hard thinking of ideas on the way it is going. Maybe, have all those guys build a fortress, as I said before. Well written with strong story line, likeable characters. Faye
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
The plot here is growing more exciting with each chapter. Congratulations on (just barely) staying within the believable. That's a very difficult line to try to navigate, but you seem to have done it so far. A couple of random thoughts: I would be careful about using words like "awesome." Way too pedestrian for such a big story. Also, what if this were to be written as a script? Like, a movie script? Just can't get that thought out of my mind - -
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The plot here is growing more exciting with each chapter. Congratulations on (just barely) staying within the believable. That's a very difficult line to try to navigate, but you seem to have done it so far. A couple of random thoughts: I would be careful about using words like "awesome." Way too pedestrian for such a big story. Also, what if this were to be written as a script? Like, a movie script? Just can't get that thought out of my mind - -
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, good progression with the story-line. In the last review, I suggested that some stealth bombers need to defect over to Johnny's group. That kind of fire power is the only thing to dissuade or stop the onslaught of that many ships. Or the group could "play possum" and give the appearance of a useless piece of realty not worth bothering over. Could go either way. One grammo here: need to change "to" to "too" here as in how much "if we got to chatty". Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, good progression with the story-line. In the last review, I suggested that some stealth bombers need to defect over to Johnny's group. That kind of fire power is the only thing to dissuade or stop the onslaught of that many ships. Or the group could "play possum" and give the appearance of a useless piece of realty not worth bothering over. Could go either way. One grammo here: need to change "to" to "too" here as in how much "if we got to chatty". Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Mikey, Mikey, Mikey... So there's a fleet of ships coming now? If the water level had suddenly risen thousands of feet, the water in the ocean would not be fit to navigate. The waves would be soooo high and soooo rough it would be like tidal waves everywhere. No boat could possibly survive that.
With all that ice melting, sending incredible amounts of moisture into the atmosphere, there would be constant rain and wind so bad planes could not fly, let alone drop poison-gas packages.
If you are going to write ANY story, you need to get the facts of reality straight. Things that you have happening on Earth are just NOT possible under the basic laws of physics!
In the first place, the water level can't rise even two inches overnight... that would take many years, a decade or more. And you have it at thousands of feet in that time, with a sailable ocean????
REsearch is invaluable in writing any story. Even in bizarre situations, you cannot write something that is not possible in this universe.
You write VERY well, with a great style. The only problem is the content of your writing. Research EVERYTHING. Make no assumptions. If you don't know, find out using the web.
>> Well, Nikolai there has been debriefing me
In this case, you want to say BRIEFING. The general gets BRIEFED and Johnny gets DEBRIEFED.
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Mikey, Mikey, Mikey... So there's a fleet of ships coming now? If the water level had suddenly risen thousands of feet, the water in the ocean would not be fit to navigate. The waves would be soooo high and soooo rough it would be like tidal waves everywhere. No boat could possibly survive that.
With all that ice melting, sending incredible amounts of moisture into the atmosphere, there would be constant rain and wind so bad planes could not fly, let alone drop poison-gas packages.
If you are going to write ANY story, you need to get the facts of reality straight. Things that you have happening on Earth are just NOT possible under the basic laws of physics!
In the first place, the water level can't rise even two inches overnight... that would take many years, a decade or more. And you have it at thousands of feet in that time, with a sailable ocean????
REsearch is invaluable in writing any story. Even in bizarre situations, you cannot write something that is not possible in this universe.
You write VERY well, with a great style. The only problem is the content of your writing. Research EVERYTHING. Make no assumptions. If you don't know, find out using the web.
>> Well, Nikolai there has been debriefing me
In this case, you want to say BRIEFING. The general gets BRIEFED and Johnny gets DEBRIEFED.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
