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Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Open Doors, Exodus & China"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from ProjectBluebook
That sucks! your computer loosing your data. I know how hard it is recounting lost data, a nightmare but you seem to have rebounded pretty good, considering. So, they discovered some new equipment. I realize, their are catacombs they haven't discovered yet, it could run for miles and your imagination could bring anything. I' surprised the earth's ozone is still there. Nukes could trigger a new ice age because the clouds smite out the atmoshere and you die from radiation poison. Don't you need masks to brave the elements so you don't get cancer. Maybe, it was mostly, biological warfare. One nuke placed strategically over a zone will knock out sattelite communications, send you to the dark ages. I read plenty 'Secret' documents on this when i was in the navy. Of course, I can't discuss it, called espionage and I'm trained not to reveal secrets. Sorry, about your computer. I got a secret weapon of mine brewing, a project. You will know!! when it is unleashed, for sure! looking good, Mikey, rock on.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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That sucks! your computer loosing your data. I know how hard it is recounting lost data, a nightmare but you seem to have rebounded pretty good, considering. So, they discovered some new equipment. I realize, their are catacombs they haven't discovered yet, it could run for miles and your imagination could bring anything. I' surprised the earth's ozone is still there. Nukes could trigger a new ice age because the clouds smite out the atmoshere and you die from radiation poison. Don't you need masks to brave the elements so you don't get cancer. Maybe, it was mostly, biological warfare. One nuke placed strategically over a zone will knock out sattelite communications, send you to the dark ages. I read plenty 'Secret' documents on this when i was in the navy. Of course, I can't discuss it, called espionage and I'm trained not to reveal secrets. Sorry, about your computer. I got a secret weapon of mine brewing, a project. You will know!! when it is unleashed, for sure! looking good, Mikey, rock on.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Still not sure all that happened, but I think it's mainly chemical and burned some big holes, but not all of it. The satellites are going. They need to get some juice into the compound. All kinds of solar panels. Probably generators. Who knows? I don't. Hahaha. Don't forget e-mail. mikey
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I got a new project going on? You will be the first to know? most definitely!
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Cool. Looking forward to it.
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Believe me--this is going to shake the whole site, an 9.0 on the rector scale and you are standing in the epic center? Are n't you curious?
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Always! Don't forget, I'm in California. A 9.0 makes my desert home beach front property!
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You will standing in the middle of this climatic event in my project? I bet you are a wee bit curious? I'm sworn to an oath an secrecy, you will feel the backlasH of this experiment. LOL
Comment from Sasha
I've lost work too...sometimes I just hate computers. But at least what you have on FanStory is saved. This made complete sense and I like the direction it is heading. Great work with this one. As usual, no suggestion, remember, I'm just along for the ride.
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I've lost work too...sometimes I just hate computers. But at least what you have on FanStory is saved. This made complete sense and I like the direction it is heading. Great work with this one. As usual, no suggestion, remember, I'm just along for the ride.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
Comment from seaglass
I have experienced "the massive loss" before and boy does it suck. I wrote a genealogy book for my family and lost a heap all at once.
This is winding up really good. The find in the bunker is the mortar to wrap it all up. And it isn't too far fetched to see us (as a country)shooting ourselves in the foot like this.
Don't know what you had written and lost but this works nicely and is believable.
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I have experienced "the massive loss" before and boy does it suck. I wrote a genealogy book for my family and lost a heap all at once.
This is winding up really good. The find in the bunker is the mortar to wrap it all up. And it isn't too far fetched to see us (as a country)shooting ourselves in the foot like this.
Don't know what you had written and lost but this works nicely and is believable.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
I think this is still just on the edge of credibility, but it's very well-told. All depends on how you follow it up, in my view. This could become very exciting, and be a very popular science-fiction/futuristic tale. My suggestions remains: continue to keep it believable. It's very intriguing, and holds the reader's interest from beginning to the end of the chapter.
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I think this is still just on the edge of credibility, but it's very well-told. All depends on how you follow it up, in my view. This could become very exciting, and be a very popular science-fiction/futuristic tale. My suggestions remains: continue to keep it believable. It's very intriguing, and holds the reader's interest from beginning to the end of the chapter.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good stuff here. I like the mind control explanation, the underground city and the solar power (assuming they found a clearing in that forest).
Just one thing bothers me... there is NO WAY the US would slaughter millions of Arabs or anyone else!!! Where are you getting such a crazy notion? Now, Iran would do it. China would. Russia might, but the USA? What have you been drinking? :)
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Good stuff here. I like the mind control explanation, the underground city and the solar power (assuming they found a clearing in that forest).
Just one thing bothers me... there is NO WAY the US would slaughter millions of Arabs or anyone else!!! Where are you getting such a crazy notion? Now, Iran would do it. China would. Russia might, but the USA? What have you been drinking? :)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi Mikey,
What a horrible thing to happen - to have stuff wiped out from your hard drive. How on earth?
A great read. Lots of excitement, tension and futuristic drama.
Good luck with the memory bank in your head. :)
Have a great day!
Sonali :)
Jonesy looked quite interested (in) the solar
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At least (someone's) a talkin' (')bout
A radio(,) you say?
pour that hot water over(,) do you?"
of the best coffee I recall(ed) having in a long
and waited for me to open my clenched eyes... clenched usually refers to fists and jaws .. another word, perhaps? .. or just .... closed eyes?
But(no comma needed here) then(,) there's stuff that looks
sounding. But(no comma needed here) you two talked about it .. comma always come before 'but', not after
(But,) they were going to slaughter them and .. this sentence would read better without 'but'
( But), this was all being done to .. this one too
(Anyone) that would be enticed by
by a boatload of money(no comma needed here) was on the Iranian payroll(,) developing
what happened(,) (b)ut when I glance
. But(no comma needed here) someone started it(,) and
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Hi Mikey,
What a horrible thing to happen - to have stuff wiped out from your hard drive. How on earth?
A great read. Lots of excitement, tension and futuristic drama.
Good luck with the memory bank in your head. :)
Have a great day!
Sonali :)
Jonesy looked quite interested (in) the solar
Enough vinegar(.) (A) little sugar, okay
At least (someone's) a talkin' (')bout
A radio(,) you say?
pour that hot water over(,) do you?"
of the best coffee I recall(ed) having in a long
and waited for me to open my clenched eyes... clenched usually refers to fists and jaws .. another word, perhaps? .. or just .... closed eyes?
But(no comma needed here) then(,) there's stuff that looks
sounding. But(no comma needed here) you two talked about it .. comma always come before 'but', not after
(But,) they were going to slaughter them and .. this sentence would read better without 'but'
( But), this was all being done to .. this one too
(Anyone) that would be enticed by
by a boatload of money(no comma needed here) was on the Iranian payroll(,) developing
what happened(,) (b)ut when I glance
. But(no comma needed here) someone started it(,) and
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
Comment from Nosha17
How awful, you lost some of your story, it is so easily done. I go potty if I lose a line of poetry I scribbled on a piece of paper while out for a walk! Anyway, it is still great and good job you have a good memory. It sounds like it's getting into serious war time stuff. Enjoyable as always. Faye
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How awful, you lost some of your story, it is so easily done. I go potty if I lose a line of poetry I scribbled on a piece of paper while out for a walk! Anyway, it is still great and good job you have a good memory. It sounds like it's getting into serious war time stuff. Enjoyable as always. Faye
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
They have a energy source. They have information about the mind control. Sorry about the lost work. I think you and Christine can help stop some of the mind control without electrician help.
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They have a energy source. They have information about the mind control. Sorry about the lost work. I think you and Christine can help stop some of the mind control without electrician help.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This is a turning point!!! I believe that all of this is possible and even see this as a warning. Perfect to involve the Chinese. What an enemy. Iran has the heart for war but not the technology. With oil money a lot of brain powercan be lured. The rusiians are the most likely to be on board and the most likely to be on a par with the U.S. now things are rolling. Let's get em. NG
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This is a turning point!!! I believe that all of this is possible and even see this as a warning. Perfect to involve the Chinese. What an enemy. Iran has the heart for war but not the technology. With oil money a lot of brain powercan be lured. The rusiians are the most likely to be on board and the most likely to be on a par with the U.S. now things are rolling. Let's get em. NG
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
Comment from cory4
Dear Michaelcahill,
Your chapter of your book is very interesting. It is a well thought out story. You seem to have great plot for the entire novel based on what i have read in this chapter. Your writing is very good and so is your dialogue. It will be good to find out how you go with your novel after you have finished it. This book chapter was enjoyable to read, and the mysteriousness of the chapter you have written makes me want to read more. Well done
Kind Regards,
Cory4
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Dear Michaelcahill,
Your chapter of your book is very interesting. It is a well thought out story. You seem to have great plot for the entire novel based on what i have read in this chapter. Your writing is very good and so is your dialogue. It will be good to find out how you go with your novel after you have finished it. This book chapter was enjoyable to read, and the mysteriousness of the chapter you have written makes me want to read more. Well done
Kind Regards,
Cory4
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
