Yosemite
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Christine Reveals & Bunkers Below"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
18 total reviews
Comment from 24chas
Trying to catch up, my friend. A nice chapter. Really like the relationship between Johnny and Christine. They are very at ease with each other.
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Trying to catch up, my friend. A nice chapter. Really like the relationship between Johnny and Christine. They are very at ease with each other.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
Comment from ragamuffin
Could it be, with an underground bunker of supplies, that something had been planned for quite awhile? A bit of a "6th sense" that taps into enemy's going-ons is a explanation and method of gaining information. Works well for the story.
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Could it be, with an underground bunker of supplies, that something had been planned for quite awhile? A bit of a "6th sense" that taps into enemy's going-ons is a explanation and method of gaining information. Works well for the story.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Even without electricity, a bunker like that can be quite useful. In a time like that your survival instinct trumps anything else. Another good chapter.
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Even without electricity, a bunker like that can be quite useful. In a time like that your survival instinct trumps anything else. Another good chapter.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, just got back on track again...That Christine, My kind of women...LOL...turned a black man white...LOL...a great write...would say I loved this one ...but I am loving them all...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
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Hi Michael, just got back on track again...That Christine, My kind of women...LOL...turned a black man white...LOL...a great write...would say I loved this one ...but I am loving them all...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from adewpearl
You include more fascinating back story about Christine and her dreams. Excellent detail of the bunkers and interesting discussion of how the men associated with the bunker still consider themselves soldiers in an army. It is fascinating how some characters perceive themselves as they were in the former society while others have detached from that former reality. Brooke
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You include more fascinating back story about Christine and her dreams. Excellent detail of the bunkers and interesting discussion of how the men associated with the bunker still consider themselves soldiers in an army. It is fascinating how some characters perceive themselves as they were in the former society while others have detached from that former reality. Brooke
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from ravenblack
So now that NORAD seems to have been relocated to Yosemite, does that mean that the military/government knew all along that Yosemite would survive and is strategically important?
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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So now that NORAD seems to have been relocated to Yosemite, does that mean that the military/government knew all along that Yosemite would survive and is strategically important?
Comment Written 29-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Norad? No. Could be some remnants in Canada maybe. They couldn't know anything about Yosemite surviving. The bunkers under the National Parks were rumored during the cold war. Just the two soldiers there in a maintenance mode, abandoned. not a priority post it would seem.
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Norad is an actual base carved into and under a mountain in Colorado, a place select members are to go in the event of nuclear war. It is a real installation and not urban legend.
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I understood it has bases in Alaska and Canada also. Florida I think as well. The legend was the bunkers being under the National Parks not Norad. Yes, I know Norad is real. Sorry for the confusion. Look at my story, what do you expect. Hahaha.
Comment from Tatarka2
I really think this whole story is amazing, overall. In re: this chapter: I think you could leave out the first paragraph entirely. Start right in with the dialogue between Johnny & Christine. It's intriguing, & tells the reader what they need to know, and advances the plot. The first paragraph reads awkwardly, to me, and doesn't. I really like the addition of the bunker, and I continue to be intrigued with the dream theme. I do continue to wonder about the archery theme - it seems a bit too "Hunger Games" in a story that stands strong on its own.
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I really think this whole story is amazing, overall. In re: this chapter: I think you could leave out the first paragraph entirely. Start right in with the dialogue between Johnny & Christine. It's intriguing, & tells the reader what they need to know, and advances the plot. The first paragraph reads awkwardly, to me, and doesn't. I really like the addition of the bunker, and I continue to be intrigued with the dream theme. I do continue to wonder about the archery theme - it seems a bit too "Hunger Games" in a story that stands strong on its own.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2014
Comment from SValencia0178
This is off the hook awesome. I cannot believe what you are coming up with. I just hold on to the rails and read. You always seem to write your way out of whatever hole it looks like your in!
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This is off the hook awesome. I cannot believe what you are coming up with. I just hold on to the rails and read. You always seem to write your way out of whatever hole it looks like your in!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
Comment from Sasha
You did a marvelous job with this one. The constant arrival of something or someone new is superb. Just when the reader thinks they have a handle on this, you pop up with something new. Johnny and Christine are so cool and I really like Ma.
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You did a marvelous job with this one. The constant arrival of something or someone new is superb. Just when the reader thinks they have a handle on this, you pop up with something new. Johnny and Christine are so cool and I really like Ma.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, the write is laced with fun humor and now introduces another key element for survival. I'm guessing that there is a generator somewhere to fire up the surveillance equipment. I bet that Ma just might have some spare gasoline somewhere to fire it up, or that there are some uninstalled solar panels somewhere inside the bunker to provide the power, one of those soldiers know how to install. This would be a good ace in the whole to see what is going on beyond Yosemite. Great description: "angry red skies and smirking sun" Great installment. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, the write is laced with fun humor and now introduces another key element for survival. I'm guessing that there is a generator somewhere to fire up the surveillance equipment. I bet that Ma just might have some spare gasoline somewhere to fire it up, or that there are some uninstalled solar panels somewhere inside the bunker to provide the power, one of those soldiers know how to install. This would be a good ace in the whole to see what is going on beyond Yosemite. Great description: "angry red skies and smirking sun" Great installment. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
