Yosemite
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Fort Yosemite & The Inner Circle"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from ragamuffin
Got a little behind with the reading- putting in a kitchen and a house full of sick kids. Looking forward to the reading the rest of the posted chapters. Taking a serious turn in tone as would eventually happen even if folks weren't in panic mode. Well done write.
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Got a little behind with the reading- putting in a kitchen and a house full of sick kids. Looking forward to the reading the rest of the posted chapters. Taking a serious turn in tone as would eventually happen even if folks weren't in panic mode. Well done write.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
Comment from Michaelk
I guess that answers if the earth has really shifted. Nice twist, quite a shocker. I like the inner circle and the easing strangers into the camp that way. You've made me doubt the soldiers now. I'm not even sure who they would follow if push came to shove. The dream squad still bothers me. There must be some reason for sending them out with the other troops, and I can't imagine that reason is good.
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I guess that answers if the earth has really shifted. Nice twist, quite a shocker. I like the inner circle and the easing strangers into the camp that way. You've made me doubt the soldiers now. I'm not even sure who they would follow if push came to shove. The dream squad still bothers me. There must be some reason for sending them out with the other troops, and I can't imagine that reason is good.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
the suspense is killing me--Mikey. I reckon, your next chapter will describe what caused the ocean to come surging. You got it--Mikey, leave the writer in suspense so he will read the following chapter, just like how the soap opera's do, they do it well. I was thinking ... at ease, mate, don't panic. The sun radiates solar spots, if they get huge and these solar blasts reach the Earth, it can have a remarkable impact on the climate, raising temperatures drastically. It may takes hundreds of years to reach Earth, these solar bursts. If it ever happens, we are fried. A solar wave could raise temperatures rapidly, melting the polar caps, and causing supernatural floods. Also, it would shift the magnetic poles alignment off axis and probably cause earthquakes and such. i'm sure, you already thought of this but you say you want input, I want to help if possible, I got plenty more ideas in me head. I suppose, the dreams Johnny has and the others are coming true. Do they have a computer chip in their nose that reproduce dreams? i'm full of ideas, if you ever need them but these are only suggestions, you got great imagination. Outstanding, I'm enjoying this and you have learned how to make us want to read more with the cliff hangers. wackydo out
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the suspense is killing me--Mikey. I reckon, your next chapter will describe what caused the ocean to come surging. You got it--Mikey, leave the writer in suspense so he will read the following chapter, just like how the soap opera's do, they do it well. I was thinking ... at ease, mate, don't panic. The sun radiates solar spots, if they get huge and these solar blasts reach the Earth, it can have a remarkable impact on the climate, raising temperatures drastically. It may takes hundreds of years to reach Earth, these solar bursts. If it ever happens, we are fried. A solar wave could raise temperatures rapidly, melting the polar caps, and causing supernatural floods. Also, it would shift the magnetic poles alignment off axis and probably cause earthquakes and such. i'm sure, you already thought of this but you say you want input, I want to help if possible, I got plenty more ideas in me head. I suppose, the dreams Johnny has and the others are coming true. Do they have a computer chip in their nose that reproduce dreams? i'm full of ideas, if you ever need them but these are only suggestions, you got great imagination. Outstanding, I'm enjoying this and you have learned how to make us want to read more with the cliff hangers. wackydo out
Comment Written 27-Mar-2014
Comment from Nosha17
This is getting to be more exciting by the chapter. This one read really well, with lots of insight into the characters and who was trustworthy or not. The organisation gives some form to the story, also. The illustration is good and with prospects of ocean views, who knows! Enjoyable as always. Faye
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This is getting to be more exciting by the chapter. This one read really well, with lots of insight into the characters and who was trustworthy or not. The organisation gives some form to the story, also. The illustration is good and with prospects of ocean views, who knows! Enjoyable as always. Faye
Comment Written 27-Mar-2014
Comment from faragon
I really like how the story is progressing and the reference to the "Garden of Eden". I like how the story is flowing and how they are making their own little community.
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I really like how the story is progressing and the reference to the "Garden of Eden". I like how the story is flowing and how they are making their own little community.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, OK, hmmmmm, now what? Maybe there are aliens terraforming or ocean-forming the earth to colonize it for themselves or they need something from the human brain to survive. Siphoning the id somehow for biofuel? You asked for ideas and you're challenging my imagination. Remember in Red Dawn when Jeb's (Patrick Swayze) high school buddy was ratting them out to the Russians because of his mayoral dad sucking up to them? There has to be a Benedict in the camp but he/she needs to be nixed just in time. A Brutus. Like the climate and geographical change. Creative twist. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, OK, hmmmmm, now what? Maybe there are aliens terraforming or ocean-forming the earth to colonize it for themselves or they need something from the human brain to survive. Siphoning the id somehow for biofuel? You asked for ideas and you're challenging my imagination. Remember in Red Dawn when Jeb's (Patrick Swayze) high school buddy was ratting them out to the Russians because of his mayoral dad sucking up to them? There has to be a Benedict in the camp but he/she needs to be nixed just in time. A Brutus. Like the climate and geographical change. Creative twist. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-Mar-2014
Comment from l.raven
well twenty five miles is a stretch down the road...so now...build a boat...hummmm...someone must have known...all those people...ok GO!!! next...so very well written...keep it coming Michael...Luff Linda xxoo
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well twenty five miles is a stretch down the road...so now...build a boat...hummmm...someone must have known...all those people...ok GO!!! next...so very well written...keep it coming Michael...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
Reading through this, I kept seeing it as a movie. I think it would make a great one! Write it up as a novel first, then see where it goes! It's exciting to watch this being built. I love the way you've written this chapter. You've included a lot of information in a very readable way, using dialogue. I have no idea where you're going, and that's so intriguing!
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Reading through this, I kept seeing it as a movie. I think it would make a great one! Write it up as a novel first, then see where it goes! It's exciting to watch this being built. I love the way you've written this chapter. You've included a lot of information in a very readable way, using dialogue. I have no idea where you're going, and that's so intriguing!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Hmmm...but is it truly the Pacific Ocean or some sort of psychic projection by the dream police (sorry Cheap Trick) done to flush them out? I think Yosemite as one of the last unspoiled havens in the U.S. is a good idea.
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Hmmm...but is it truly the Pacific Ocean or some sort of psychic projection by the dream police (sorry Cheap Trick) done to flush them out? I think Yosemite as one of the last unspoiled havens in the U.S. is a good idea.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
Comment from 24chas
Well, that is quite the ending to this chapter, mikey. That's going to be interesting in the next chapter. Like what everyone is saying about Carlos, I have the same feeling.
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Well, that is quite the ending to this chapter, mikey. That's going to be interesting in the next chapter. Like what everyone is saying about Carlos, I have the same feeling.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
